Is this fine?

Zero

10 years ago

Sounds homophobic and offensive.

Thanks

{{ DiscussionBoard.errors[8892576].message }}

Jason Kanigan

10 years ago

And you'd want to insult your viewer...why?

Thanks
1 reply

Signature

>> How To Grow Your Online Business [FREE Training Video, No Opt-In, from 10+ Year Vet]

>> For Agency Founders: The Fast Shortcut To Selling SEO, Leadgen, Webdesign & Other Services

{{ DiscussionBoard.errors[8892618].message }}

Joshua P 10 years ago

Originally Posted by Jason Kanigan

And you'd want to insult your viewer...why?

Well,I just need an answer..its just an example..

On a side note, the sentence I used is from the most popular product on clickbank..not sure why everyones complaining..I think most people reading this already know where its from!

=)
- Thanks
- 1 reply
{{ DiscussionBoard.errors[8892681].message }}
- Bill Jeffels 10 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by Joshua P
  
  the sentence I used is from the most popular product on clickbank
  
  If this Is the most popular product on ClickBank like you claim. I'm sure it's not because of this phrase.
  
  I wouldn't copy the phrase word for word.
  
  Not knowing what your VSL is I'm sure you could come up with something that is dissimilar.
  
  Bill
  
  .
  
  Thanks
  
  Signature
  
  Bond Halbert's Badass Blog
  " You Are One Sales Letter Away From Being Rich " --Gary Halbert
  
  {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[8893506].message }}

Raydal

10 years ago

Following in the trend of the RichJerk "be nasty to get attention" model.
It's the old marketing trick of getting attention by shocking your audience.
Nothing new. Although most marketers who use this approach are
assuming a personality and are nothing like that in real life.

It's the same reason why people tune into to hear what Simon Cowell
would say to insult the next xFactor contestant.

-Ray Edwards

Thanks

Signature

The most powerful and concentrated copywriting training online today bar none! Autoresponder Writing Email SECRETS

{{ DiscussionBoard.errors[8892760].message }}

Tim R

10 years ago

In what way do you possibly think you can get in any trouble for using what you've got?

If every VSL that wasn't 100% original were taken offline you'd be lucky to find three still standing.

Tim.

Thanks

{{ DiscussionBoard.errors[8893232].message }}

Cool Hand Luke

10 years ago

Originally Posted by Joshua P

Some famous video SL has this sentence:
"If you don't watch this video you're either gay, or you're so old that you piss dust."

Can I,in my copy use this without getting into trouble if the owner isn't happy with it?

"Well if you close this window and don't watch this video ,its probably because you're gay...or its that you are so old that you probably cannot walk without someone's help"

Help?

You're paraphrasing a quote from the Tao of Badass' Goldfish VSL which works in the context of that script... except your example sounds awkward and forced.

With that said, context matters, so without knowing more about your script/product, no one can tell you whether or not it will work.

As for swiping in general, you're better off NOT swiping sentences directly, even if you change a word or two.

Thanks
2 replies

{{ DiscussionBoard.errors[8893330].message }}

Ean Stark

10 years ago

Originally Posted by Cool Hand Luke

You're paraphrasing a quote from the Tao of Badass' Goldfish VSL which works in the context of that script... except your example sounds awkward and forced.

With that said, context matters, so without knowing more about your script/product, no one can tell you whether or not it will work.

As for swiping in general, you're better off NOT swiping sentences directly, even if you change a word or two.

Well,I think yes its from the Goldfish video!
Wondering how it works ,even though it almost insults the viewer like others have said.

Thanks

Signature

>>>FINALLY : Discover The Secret Behind An Extra $967 I Received On My PayPal Account Last Sunday Morningâ€¦

{{ DiscussionBoard.errors[8894830].message }}

Joshua P

10 years ago

Originally Posted by Cool Hand Luke

You're paraphrasing a quote from the Tao of Badass' Goldfish VSL which works in the context of that script... except your example sounds awkward and forced.

With that said, context matters, so without knowing more about your script/product, no one can tell you whether or not it will work.

As for swiping in general, you're better off NOT swiping sentences directly, even if you change a word or two.

Well I'm not concerned if would work or not right now, I won't take the sentence entirely, I'll try to change as much as I can...but taking the 'idea' or 'what they are saying' and putting them in a different form or saying it in a different way won't get me into any legal troubles right?

Thats the only thing I'm concerned as of now..

Thank everyone

Thanks

{{ DiscussionBoard.errors[8894840].message }}

BrianMcLeod

10 years ago

I just posted an in-depth training video on another thread the other day that you should definitely watch:

http://www.warriorforum.com/copywrit...ml#post8883807

Thanks

Signature

Brian McLeod

Direct Response Copywriting

{{ DiscussionBoard.errors[8893341].message }}

Alex Cohen

10 years ago

Originally Posted by Joshua P

Some famous video SL has this sentence:
"If you don't watch this video you're either gay, or you're so old that you piss dust."

Can I,in my copy use this without getting into trouble if the owner isn't happy with it?

"Well if you close this window and don't watch this video ,its probably because you're gay...or its that you are so old that you probably cannot walk without someone's help"

Help?

You're asking a legal question.

Consult with an attorney.

(BTW, the rewrite is nowhere near as powerful as the original.)

Alex

Thanks

{{ DiscussionBoard.errors[8893479].message }}

Joshua P

10 years ago

Originally Posted by Bill Jeffels

If this Is the most popular product on ClickBank like you claim. I'm sure it's not because of this phrase.

I wouldn't copy the phrase word for word.

Not knowing what your VSL is I'm sure you could come up with something that is dissimilar.

Bill

.

Well,which means I can take the meaning of some sentence from any sales letter,and reframe it completely(without changing the meaning) without getting into any trouble?

i like how someone said there would hardly be any sales letters if they were original...which means taking the meaning from a sentence ,or a part of the letter an reframing it ENTIRELY would be entirely and LEGALLY fine,right?

Thanks..

Thanks

{{ DiscussionBoard.errors[8894820].message }}

Tim R

10 years ago

You're not going to get into legal trouble, ok? Got it?

Thanks

{{ DiscussionBoard.errors[8894868].message }}

BrianMcLeod

10 years ago

Posting from multiple accounts in the thread (Joshua P and Ean Stark share the same IP)...

Willfully ignorant of the advice given...

Thread closed as a good example of a bad example.