Could someone rate this headline I thought of.

****, dude, at least fix the typo for starters

as for the rest of it... it looks dated, wordy, the "quit your job" angle has been done to death, nobody is gonna believe you that "you've compiled all the information", and "earn big online" is way too vague.

thats just off the top of my head

As Matt said... it's been done to death.

Can you give us a description of what you're actually selling?

Then we can offer up some alternatives.

Chris

It's true. This kind of headlines has already gone to the grave. Think more, it's technology time where you should write in more attractive ways.
It seems to be a making money online scheme as it can be understood from the headline.
As Chris said, describe your product than you may get more help and ideas.

Quit Your Job Now? Eh? I don't like it.. Try to come up w/ something more sassy.

Looking back, I agree with all of you. Thanks for the heads up.

Why is quitting your job a good thing (benefit)? And the first line doesn't
connect logically with the second. What does quitting your job have
to do with selling. Same for the third line: what does information about
selling online have to do with quitting your job? Can't you do both?

Again, as expressed before the "make money online market" is a trodden
path and you have to differentiate yourself to get attention in this market.

But you have to start somewhere and you were brave enough to ask for
comment.

-Ray Edwards

You're trying to sell a product to delusional people.

In marketing, most don't try to sell to delusional people...except for one behaviour...

Usually, we try and target them once they come to their senses.

See the guy with the arms cut off his t shirt? He's got them cut off to show you his big arms. Problem is, his arms are big because they're fat. In his mind big means muscle size.

See the big lady in the spandex? In her mind she has a hot body. To us she's just plain embarrassing.

We're not gonna try and sell either of the two a diet program. They're not there yet...they haven't had a wake up call.

We're waiting on them to face reality.

Now, most diet ads and programs have it all wrong. They're trying to compete with everyone else that has a diet program, and they're missing the idea...but that's another post.

"Get rich quick" programs are one of the very few products that can be targeted towards delusional people...

They're delusional because they haven't yet figured out that if you're making so much from what you're selling...why are you wasting your time trying to sell a course.

The internet is full of marketers trying to sell to delusional people.

Problem is, most of those selling this crap are happy to make a thousand bucks off the stuff.

I'm not happy with a thousand bucks, are you? If you are...keep on with your small time plan...you'll have a whole line of delusional people wanting to buy if you market it right.

When we sell to delusional people, most headline rules don't apply. You can go full crazy with promises...

after all, most of the claims are a lie, so why not go rain forest ape type orgy on the promise?

Long story short, your headline is bland.

Ugh.

Rating = 0

Alex

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The above is a suggestion you may use. Your headline will draw a lot of poor results, if any, whereas you want quality (hopefully) responses. I assume you are giving free information leading to some form of sale.