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I'm Looking for Feedback On My Opt-in Page

by wwidman
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Hi All. I'd like to get some feedback on my new opt-in page...look, copy, etc.

Click on my signature link.

Thanks,

Namaste
#feedback #optin #page
  • Profile picture of the author Tim R
    How many times do you need to let the reader know that your report is free?

    Who is your target audience?

    What is INCREDIBLE about your offer?

    How is it different to the thousands of other free reports out there?

    If the workout is so good, why do I need a bonus 6-day workout?

    I don't think the cover of the book could look any less appealing if you tried.

    This is such a competitive market that you need to really offer a tangible benefit that people won't get anywhere else. What sets you apart from everyone else?
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  • Profile picture of the author sethczerepak
    I'm the target market and I wouldn't opt in.

    It's not focused. Has no specific example of what results I'll get. It just says "Get Results..."

    What results?

    Is it cardio or strength focused? That's damn important in that niche, especially if you're selling to those young dudes who want to get ripped. Most fitness nuts prefer one or the other, you're trying to market both.

    My advice, tell me what your "5 Compelling Benefits" are. That's a start, but you've got a long way to go.
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  • Profile picture of the author elmo033057
    I don't know if anyone has ever addressed this issue, but I'm one of the poor unfortunates that only has 5 gigs a month for Internet. I live in a weird area between two medium sized cities and I have to use a Hotspot from AT&T for my Internet.

    The thing is, if I see a video, I immediately get off the page because it'll eat up my Gigs. Oh, and there are a ton of people just like me, so please don't tel me that I'm unusual and it doesn't happen much.

    So, if you only post video and nothing for "readers" like me in the digital divide, you are immediately losing a segment of the market.

    Just Sayin'

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    • Profile picture of the author wwidman
      Thanks All for the feedback. I will definitely consider all of it. I am new to this (first two weeks) and still very much on the learning curve.

      Not sure why, but some of the feedback has a negative, harsh tone to it. So, to give myself some props and not let that negativity knock me down, I made my first $12.00 online yesterday after being in the game only two weeks.

      Please try to remember that when people are looking for advice, help, etc., the goal, purpose should be positive, uplifting, encouraging!

      Namaste
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      • Profile picture of the author sbucciarel
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        Originally Posted by wwidman View Post

        Thanks All for the feedback. I will definitely consider all of it. I am new to this (first two weeks) and still very much on the learning curve.

        Not sure why, but some of the feedback has a negative, harsh tone to it. So, to give myself some props and not let that negativity knock me down, I made my first $12.00 online yesterday after being in the game only two weeks.

        Please try to remember that when people are looking for advice, help, etc., the goal, purpose should be positive, uplifting, encouraging!

        Namaste
        It should be honest or it won't do any good. When you ask for feedback, you should want the negatives. Otherwise you won't really know what is wrong with it and be able to fix it. If you just want pretty stories and people to pat you on the back, you shouldn't request honest feedback.

        I didn't see any feedback here that was intended to be mean. You need a thick skin to ask for feedback if you want honesty, but you'll have a better site in the end.
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        • Profile picture of the author Steve Faber
          Well,
          "FACT: Achieving Your Ultimate Fitness Goals REQUIRES A Total Body Approach - Get Your FREE Report - With A Fantastic Bonus 6-Day Workout You Can Start TODAY!"

          sounds like too much work. People are averse to that, even if they know plenty is required. It doesn't tell me too much about the benefits of what I'm getting, only that there'll be plenty of work involved. Need specifics.

          Try this one:

          "This "Secret" Workout Delivers the INSIDE TRACK to World Class Performance..... and It Can Be Yours, Right Now!"
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  • Profile picture of the author Tim R
    Congrats on making your first sale.

    Please try to remember that when people are giving you feedback on here they are giving you their time for free, to do something they normally charge money for.

    If you want comments that are positive, uplifting and encouraging, show your work to your friends and family.

    If you want to improve your business then you need to hear the truth - so expect feedback that doesn't pull any punches. Nobody is doing you any favours if they sugarcoat their comments.
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  • Profile picture of the author Eugene Palisi
    Hi Mate

    There's no opt-in page by clicking on the signature link.

    Please re-check it.
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  • Profile picture of the author cbx
    Wwidman, welcome to the warrior forum, the online marketer's critic corner. I can relate to where you are.

    When using this forum for feedback, expect people to tear into you. Its both a good thing and a bad thing. The good thing is you get detailed feedback. The bad thing is you can end up taking way longer than you need to just perfecting something like a squeeze page before finally putting it into place.

    My suggestion, use the criticism as a general guide and then test the thing. Results are more accurate than critics. Sometimes I find myself find it easy to get paralyzed by the mass of nit picking.

    Oh, and congrats on your first online sale.

    Clinton
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  • Profile picture of the author lometogo
    Congrats on the sale....

    Some layout/design points that I think take way from visual crispness:
    1. In the headline, I'd kill both the exclamation point and the colon
    2. Too many exclamation points overall...use sparingly
    3. What's with the inconsistent use of YOUR...you bold it in some cases, not in others. What's with that?

    Declan O'Flaherty, a Warrior here, talks about the 'reverse squeeze page' in which you actually show some of your cards before asking for a sign in. In your case, you would show a few pages of your book, to let the reader see its value, then ask for the sign-in.

    Good luck.

    TC
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  • Profile picture of the author GuestBlogging
    Nice work, congrats on the sale.
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  • Profile picture of the author KevinW
    Too many different fonts styles. Some bold. Some italic. At least 6 different colors on the text. For me, that makes it look sloppy and unprofessional.
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  • Profile picture of the author erinwrites
    I'm not sure why "YOUR" is sometimes bolded, sometimes not. Is that just an oversight?

    Also, while I think I understand what you're trying to do there you might want to add some text that explains why "YOUR" is bolded and not "Ideal body," etc. Something like "so many workouts try to turn people into cookie cutter versions of the instructor. It's great to have goals but you need to structure your workout and diet to build the best you for YOUR OWN health and self-esteem. You can't do that when you're trying to turn yourself into someone else. This product will..." and then go into your list.

    Also, the yellow you used for "3-Months To A New You!" make me flinch. My face physically tries to force my eyes away from it.
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  • Profile picture of the author cbx
    I think I understand what your trying to do by capitalizing and bolding the word YOUR. Correct me if I'm wrong but are you trying to give the subscriber the sense that they re getting something personalized?

    If that's the case, I suggest making just the Y in "your" a capital letter. The mind tends to emphasize words that start with a capital letter other than the first of the beginning of a sentence.

    In fact, I just noticed that your capitalizing the first letter of all the words in your bullet points. I think that rule is reserved for the headline only. I suggest capitalizing just the first letter of the words you want to emphasize and reserve bolding for...actually, I'm not too sure what the rule is for bolding in copy.

    Another thing you could do that I've seen and liked in the past is doing line alternating bolding with the bullet points. Bolding every second line to make the bullets stand out.
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