Critique of Sales Letter
I am helping a friend with his marketing promotions and am working on a sales letter. I've attached it here. Any constructive critiques are really appreciated. Some of the info is omitted, but the general target is those between 19-25 with jobs, particularly (according to him) college students.
Thanks much.
Respectfully,
Angel
P.S. I realize the Opening Date is missing. It has not been entirely decided, so I did not insert the information yet. This is not the final draft. Just looking for expert critiques by other copywriters.
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