Need Help! Which of my 2 copies do you think will convert better on launch date!

Clearly you just saw the first one. We are limiting the amount of units we're selling to 5000. And the likes are no BS, it's my facebook page.

Another fabulous Clickbank offer. Both "copies", as you call them, are dogs. So you've supposedly taken the "Likes" from your personal Facebook page and added them to this. On one I see "169" likes at the top and "8" down the bottom. On another it's "775". (Least it was there a minute ago) On a page that isn't even live? And whats with the Earnings screenshots?

Max, I've paid a lot of attention only to what's above the fold and feel that the first link wins clearly. It doesn't linger around too much on your brand name and gets straight to the message. Your message is shown clearly in large print and then the video starts and segue's their attention right away.

The second link on the other hand has quite a bit more ambiguity as to what to do next and what to click on (because you've got unrelated menu buttons showing). I imagine the second link might possibly be better if people really know your brand and recognize the header and logo but otherwise the first one wins easily.

Honestly, neither are good.

You've got a lot of issues here that need to be addressed and things that just don't add up.

You say that the big secret to your success is that you don't share your secrets with anyone else. Oh, but you can share them with 5000 people and they'll still work okay. But as soon as you hit 5000 you're shutting the offer down. But wait a minute, you're opening it up to another 5000 but at a higher price.

Lol c'mon man, can you not see the problem with this?

That's just one problem out of many. Don't even get me started on the headline.

If you're behind a bunch of six-figure launches, surely you know how important good copy is. Why don't you hire someone from all of the tons of money you've made online?

I'd also suggest that if you're going to be teaching a subject, at least sound like you know what you're talking about. In your training video on copywriting you have titled it 'how to write good and effective email copies'.

If I saw that as a paying customer I'd immediately be contacting Clickbank for a refund.

It's screaming scam.

You've either got to completely re-haul it or hire a copywriter...

Lots of inconsistencies throughout...

The layout for both sales letters is very distracting...looks amateurish to be honest.

Back to the drawing board.

I'm working on the new sales site. So just please ignore the video as I'm uploading a new one. Check the whole layout of the site.

Inside Deal 2014

Thanks, and I do not take anything personally. Every critic is well accepted.

I'm working on the new sales site. So just please ignore the video as I'm uploading a new one. Check the whole layout of the site.

Inside Deal 2014

Thanks, and I do not take anything personally. Every critic is well accepted.

The video feels a bit scammy to be honest. Too much time spent on the message and not enough time showing things that create identifiable emotions in the viewer.

the video is strong it works well on its own

Man... this is not a page I enjoyed reading!

Cardinal sin #1... this market loves a new method. They jump from method to method, hoping one will magically make them money.

You need to push the new method FIRST as part of your lead copy. I see no method.

Just flat, sappy copy.

--- Ross

"Writing hot email copies."

Should be "Writing hot email copy."

"Copy" is the same for singular and plural.

For example:

I wrote the copy for a single email.
I wrote the copy for ten emails in my new autoresponder series.

or...

I write copy for Guru Gus.
I write copy for ten well-known gurus.

Everyone said it all...Please change 'personal profit'...strange term