Critique site content - teeth whitening product
I'm selling teeth whitening at home products online, and I know the content on your site is critical for your conversion rate.
I'm hoping you guys can critique my copy and tell me what's wrong and should be changed.
Click here to go to the site: http://tinyurl.com/nzsk3dj
I have hired a copywriter before but that page did worse (why?) than the above one, you can see it here http://tinyurl.com/pggys33
fire away!
http://www.prospringlaunch.com/Akbar786