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My First Product, Critiques Please...

by Kash
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Hey everyone, I've been a long time studier of internet marketing, but just recently got to making my first product. I've got a very small list at the moment, and sold a few copies on my first weekend of launch last week. Woo! But have been sending followups to the rest of the list the past week...

I've done everything myself, including writing the copy. Just wondering what your opinions are on it?

I am open to constructive criticism and improving it (I'm sure there are some flaws).

Thanks
#critiques #first product #product
  • Profile picture of the author MicahF7
    Do you have the link to your website or is it one of your sig links?
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  • Profile picture of the author howdoyou
    would need to see the product, and any feed back your customers have given you!
    good job on the release though!
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  • Profile picture of the author Kash
    its my first sig link. Only been released a week. List is still fairly small but opens for messages are always in the high 80-100% range, and site getting hits everyday. initial impressions from buyers are positive. wondering if the copy is doing its job or not i guess.
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    • Profile picture of the author Bill Jeffels
      Originally Posted by Kash View Post

      its my first sig link. Only been released a week. List is still fairly small but opens for messages are always in the high 80-100% range, and site getting hits everyday. initial impressions from buyers are positive. wondering if the copy is doing its job or not i guess.
      Hi Kash,

      First off, your website is all over the place. Not enough benefits, and in the bodybuilding/ weight lifting field you need lots of proof.

      I think that you definetley need a star for your website. C-Money should be a testimonial along with his buddies. Judging by your Shotgunn.com website you should be the star. You need a star a story and a solution. Your the star, you have the story and your audio and video reports are the solution.

      Anyway, I have experience in the bodybuilding/ diet field so I put something together for you. Here you go.

      Finally, it's here!...




      "The Amazing Secrets To Putting
      On Huge Rock Hard Muscle As
      Fast As Humanly Possible"

      Here's how you can get big and
      ripped with the "Anabolic Shotgun"
      Background Audio Reports



      Dear Friend

      I have to get this off my chest before I explode. My name is Kash Chowdhurry, and up until 3 months ago I was your classic " 150 pound weakling". Now, 3 months later things have drastically changed. I have put on 19.2 pounds of muscle and become shredded.

      How did I do this?. It was really quite easy, and I've put together a series of FREE audio and video reports and with you permission I would like to send them to your personal e-mail.

      Here's a sneak of what you will discover:

      - How a simple change in your repitition speed will explode your muscle growth, even if your the biggest hardgainer.

      - Discover how to slap on huge ripped muscle in as little as 4 weeks, it's faster and rasier then you think.

      - How much time you need to let your muscles "Recover", if you know the right time putting on thick muscle on your shoulders and chest is a breeze.

      - And much, much more!.

      It's easy to discover these secrets. All you have to do is fill in your name and e-mail in the box below and I'll send these muscle building secrets to you right away.

      There you go Kash, I hope that helps you out.

      Take care

      Bill Jeffels
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  • Profile picture of the author The Big Deal
    I think Bill is correct on this, that's pretty good writing Bill.
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  • Profile picture of the author TravisWrites
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