Sales letter critique please
I would appreciate some critique please. This letter is going out to pool industry professionals (pool heating and swimming pool installers) who have requested more information about our product after a brief cold phone call introduction.
They're conservative people. Our product is a lower cost alternative to the premium brands on the market - it's not as good but also costs much less.
The aim is to either get them to take up the sample offer or minimum is to get them into a sales conversation.
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