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Can anyone give me critique on my squeeze page, please?

by havefunandlive
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Hello.

I've done a lot of research into making a squeeze page and have tried to apply a lot of the tips that were said to make conversion rates go up (except making the opt-in form email only. Getresponse doesn't seem to have that).

Despite all of the research though, it's best to get human input from people who know what they're talking about, to make sure I've done everything right.

My website is here PC WITHOUT LIMITS - Learn how to fix your PC like the pros

I realize some of the CSS may not appear correctly on IE. I just realized that yesterday.

The middle white bar is supposed to be slightly transparent to give view to the computer in the background.

Thanks.

EDIT: Now edited. Any new input?
#critique #give #page #squeeze
  • Profile picture of the author havefunandlive
    I thought that about that part, too.

    There has to be some sort of value on it, but I knew that was overthrown.

    I'll fix that for sure.

    2 forms - is that too many?

    EDIT: alright, all fixed. How is the attached value, now?
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  • Profile picture of the author havefunandlive
    Okay, that makes sense. It's a wonder why I didn't think of that before.

    I'll get to work on my page and upload a revised copy ASAP.
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  • Profile picture of the author ragnartm
    Let me get this straight, you want their email, and you put a word identifier in the equation as well? I don't get it. Emails are sorted out in the confirmation process.

    The best advice for you atm: Keep it simple, don't play around with backgrounds, keep it gray, white, or light blue or something that does not hurt my eyes. Change the font color, black, red, dark blue again something simple. Make the forms A LOT SMALLER.

    Write a new headline, at least if you want my mail. For example go with your title; "5 Steps To A PC With No Limits!"

    Bullets:
    # Never experience a slowdown ever again!
    # Avoid computer errors for all time!
    # Massively increase the speed of any computer!
    # Much, much more!

    Something like that.
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    Ragnar.

    Quality over quantity. Hire me to write highly shareable, user focused blog posts or articles.

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  • Profile picture of the author havefunandlive
    Ah, I see.

    Good input!
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  • Profile picture of the author havefunandlive
    Alright, I've fixed the page and uploaded a new copy. How is the squeeze page, now?

    Also, would it be a good thing to add Adsense ads on the top and bottom of this page?
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  • Profile picture of the author ragnartm
    I like the new headline and most of the other changes, but please change the headline font color and the background image
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  • Profile picture of the author havefunandlive
    You're still seeing a background image?

    I was trying to get rid of that.

    See if it still comes up.

    I changed the header color, too. Is there maybe a better color that would suit this page?
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  • Profile picture of the author JimtheWriter
    I am personally not a fan of your headline...

    "Discover the secrets to making your PC shred all limits in 5 simple steps..."

    Shred what limits? Why do I need my computer to shred these limits?
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  • Profile picture of the author havefunandlive
    Would it be better if I changed the word 'limits' to something else?
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  • Profile picture of the author JimtheWriter
    I think you need to do more than just changing that one word...

    If you want to use the "Discover the secrets" concept, maybe something like...

    "Discover the secrets to making your computer run like new"
    (This is just an example off the top of my head...it's not very good, but you get the idea.)

    Focus on a benefit in the headline, and let the prospect know something that entices them to continue reading...Make it clear there is some benefit for them to stay on your page and continue reading...
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  • Profile picture of the author havefunandlive
    Alright, changed it to "discover the secrets to fixing your computer like the pros"

    Does that work better?
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  • Profile picture of the author JimtheWriter
    How about something along the lines of

    "Free 5 step eCourse! Watch videos, play games and surf the internet without experiencing any slowdowns! Discover the secrets pros use to keep their computers running in tip top shape!"

    "without experiencing any slowdowns!" could be changed to something better. I just couldn't think of anything. Maybe you have some ideas...

    In the end, you just have to write a few that you think are good and split test them...Let your prospects decide which one is best...
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