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*rubs hands together* All right, guys...

by Emily Meeks
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I'd like a penny for your thoughts.

I just redid my salesletter and if I say so myself it's a LOT better than the first time around. Now, it's 5 AM, I've stayed up this late before and as I've proven before, working when I'm dead-tired is counter-productive.

The only difference between then and now: instead of coffee, I have a much more potent source of caffeine >

So check this out:

Participate in the Ninja Safelist Launch for 75% Commission

Constructive feedback needed - July 3 is fast approaching...
#guys #hands #rubs
  • Profile picture of the author TheGodfather
    bad news: your website is down!
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    • Profile picture of the author TheGodfather
      Originally Posted by Onslaught View Post

      The site is working for me.
      I keep getting a PAGE NOT FOUND maybe she's using a free server? they have a tendency to block out certain IPs i had that problem with 000webhost (they were blackmailing me into buying a paid hosting plan with this)... just a taught...
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      • Profile picture of the author Emily Meeks
        Originally Posted by TheGodfather View Post

        I keep getting a PAGE NOT FOUND maybe she's using a free server? they have a tendency to block out certain IPs i had that problem with 000webhost (they were blackmailing me into buying a paid hosting plan with this)... just a taught...
        I use ZootHost. That's strange they were down, they're always working for me...
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        • Profile picture of the author Emily Meeks
          Originally Posted by Onslaught View Post

          I would spend at least a week on this page.
          I don't have that kind of time though... This was a rough draft so I'll definitely be hacking away at it. And of course, getting rid of lines that make no sense
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          • Profile picture of the author David Raybould
            Originally Posted by moneysoapbox View Post

            I don't have that kind of time though...
            That in itself speaks volumes.

            A word of advice - if you don't have the time
            to do a passable job on a piece of copy, outsource
            it to a pro.

            If your JV page sucks, the JV guys are going to
            assume that your main salespage sucks too.

            Logical assumption right?

            And a poor salespage will hurt their wallets. So they
            won't promote for you.

            Suddenly your rushed piece of copy is responsible
            for the whole launch going off with a whimper instead
            of a bang.

            Now do you see why you should take a week, or
            get it done properly?

            Sorry if that's harsh, but better to find out now than
            on launch day right?

            -David Raybould
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            • Profile picture of the author Emily Meeks
              Originally Posted by David Raybould View Post

              That in itself speaks volumes.

              A word of advice - if you don't have the time
              to do a passable job on a piece of copy, outsource
              it to a pro.

              If your JV page sucks, the JV guys are going to
              assume that your main salespage sucks too.

              Logical assumption right?

              And a poor salespage will hurt their wallets. So they
              won't promote for you.

              Suddenly your rushed piece of copy is responsible
              for the whole launch going off with a whimper instead
              of a bang.

              Now do you see why you should take a week, or
              get it done properly?

              Sorry if that's harsh, but better to find out now than
              on launch day right?

              -David Raybould
              True. I'll see what I can do. I'll postpone if I absolutely have to, but hopefully I don't need to.

              I may or may not outsource this time, but whether I do or not I still want to learn, ya know? I'm very DIY when it comes to the internet >

              Thanks for the input guys. I'll be back..............
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    • Profile picture of the author Emily Meeks
      Originally Posted by Onslaught View Post

      The site is working for me.

      In my opinion the copy is not very interesting. I feel that especially
      for the audience you are focused on it will need to be enhanced.

      I am a skimmer. I skim through sales pages then read it all if something
      sticks out. You don't really have much copy so it was quick, unfortunately
      your subheads are serving no purpose.

      Subheads are speed bumps to draw attention to something interesting
      you are about to say. Mentioning "Ninja Safelist" does nothing as I do
      not know what it is nor do I care.

      I would exit this page without reading a word beyond the heads and
      sub-heads. They need attention bad, but the body copy is not very inspiring either.

      I would spend at least a week on this page. This headline? is a little strange

      Ninja Safelist Gives You the Know-How, the Material AND the Traffic to Create Products That SUCK CASH LIKE STRAWS


      I am not sure that a straw can suck much of anything

      I saw some other marketer vaguely using it... I kinda had my doubts about that one >
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  • Profile picture of the author gjabiz
    Originally Posted by moneysoapbox View Post

    I'd like a penny for your thoughts.

    I just redid my salesletter and if I say so myself it's a LOT better than the first time around. Now, it's 5 AM, I've stayed up this late before and as I've proven before, working when I'm dead-tired is counter-productive.

    The only difference between then and now: instead of coffee, I have a much more potent source of caffeine >

    So check this out:

    Participate in the Ninja Safelist Launch for 75% Commission

    Constructive feedback needed - July 3 is fast approaching...
    There is an assumption on the page that the visitor KNOWS what a safelist is.

    So, if the traffic is targeted, this page should be converting. The copy is good enough if the traffic is coming from.

    gjabiz

    PS. I have NO idea what a safe list is as presented on your site.
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  • Profile picture of the author Fernando Veloso
    I noticed too many different font size. Maybe you can look at this issue?

    Best,
    Fernando
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