Critics for my first squeeze page

by Linens

Posted: 9 years ago 11 replies

EMAIL MARKETING

Really Really good forum for beginners to learn and work. I explored many threads here, keep learning and trying them.

Hey Friends, as a part of email list creation, i explored threads here for squeeze page for last 2 days. and today i just tried creating one. But as its my first time, i am not sure how much i did correctly.

I made it with funnelkit and mailchimp.

Please check it at following URL
http://chanap.com/home-decor

Also chanap.com already have few of my previously written blogs. Can i keep writing more blogs here? or left this domain for this squeeze page? i know my questions might be dumb

but try learning things.

I added my intro with a photo. is it weird adding personal photo on business page?

i added my products feedbacks screenshots on home decor topic. Is it looking out of context?

I also added my buyers images which they shared using my products in their rooms.

What else can be added and wt shud be removed from here.

Bottom right corner i added link to my product site.

Wanna your guys critics on my squeeze page. yes i am going to add links to images and few things are pending but atleast you guys see and tell me if i should change it or remove anything.

Do you feel my squeeze page is able to attract subscribers?

#critics #page #squueze

jamescanz 9 years ago

Originally Posted by Linens

Do you feel my squeeze page is able to attract subscribers?

Possibly.

I'm not too familiar with your niche...

However I would recommend watering it down a lot.

There's just so much going on with your squeeze page.

Here's what I do that has helped me achieve great results with my squeeze pages.

1) Headline (some type of benefit)

2) Email box (Telling them to enter their best email)

(ONLY asking for email, do you really need their first & last name and country?)

3) Everything centered and above the fold

4) Clean background

Either way...

I would recommend sending some traffic to your squeeze page first...

It makes it much easier to critique from there.
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Luke McCormack 9 years ago

Too much going on for me too. Could not work out what the benefit of signing up to your list is?

James makes some great points above. The essence is to simplify your page.

Luke
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- discrat 9 years ago
  
  Sq. Page ?
  
  This is more like a Web Page with an Optin form. But you do direct your focus on the Optin with Sq. Page tendencies.
  
  So if you want a conventional Sq. Page you need to get rid of 90% of what you have written.
  
  It is way too much !
  
  You need to get straight to the point and clearly explain the benefits if they give up their email address to you.
  
  - Robert Andrew
  
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fulfilledlife 9 years ago

Too much going on, the page feels very busy. There is a ways of doing long form squeeze pages, but the way you've done it, is not a correct way.

Too many bullet points, and they centred around features and not benefits.

Subscription form is below the fold.

Page is not mobile friendly.
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- Linens 9 years ago
  
  Thanks all for your critics and based on all feedback i gonna change it today. I hope you will like my revised version of squeezed page.
  
  @jamescanz
  i wanted to know name as i can address them with name and country as i am promarily selling in USA and few sales worldwide. But if it reduce subscription rate i can try removing these fields
  
  You suggested sending some traffic. Solo ads in this niche i feel not available. adwords PPC is quite costly. What do you suggest to send traffic here
  
  I will revised and then update it here so that i can get more critics and make it better.
  
  Thanks
  
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  Linens 9 years ago
  
  I have changed my squeeze page based on critics i received
  
  What do you guys say now? is it good enough? or i need more changes?
  
  http://www.chanap.com/home-decor
  
  Thanks
  
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gabelumagui 9 years ago

First thing I noticed was all the green, and I'm not saying that its a bad color scheme, but with the background its slightly distracting. Needs to be straight to the point, what are we getting? At first I thought I was receiving a guide, then at the bottom its a newsletter in smaller print.
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jamescanz

9 years ago

Looks so much better than before...

Test it out and send some traffic to it, see how it does

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Linens

9 years ago

Thanks James.

I just created solo ads with 10DollarSoloAds.

Lets see results.

Thanks
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Shaolinsteve

9 years ago

Originally Posted by Linens

Thanks James.

I just created solo ads with 10DollarSoloAds.

Lets see results.

Unlucky... 10DollarSoloAds have been scamming people for years. A lot of people are referring the traffic from PTC sites.

http://www.warriorforum.com/ad-netwo...loads-com.html

I suggest doing your research before diving into something just because it's "cheap".

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Linens

9 years ago

Originally Posted by Shaolinsteve

Ohh Is it?

Actually i searched on google and got this site which is doing solo ads for home & Garden niche. Thats why went with it.

Which site would you suggest?

Thanks

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