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Squeeze page headline... Need a bit of help

by miqrofella
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Hey guys,

First of all, I'm not from any English speaking country, to my english is not as good...

On my squeeze page, i have this headline:
"FREE report reveals a step by step guide on how to start earning online, without investing a single penny. Earning potential of $50 - $200 each day, with less than 2 hours of work a day."

But I don't think its that good..

Oh, and In report/ebook im offering Fiverr guide that actually I use to make my money online. So it's a good ebook/report.

Any help or suggestions with my headline are well appreciated.

Cheers.
#bit #headline #page #squeeze
  • Profile picture of the author FarNext
    Originally Posted by miqrofella View Post

    Hey guys,

    First of all, I'm not from any English speaking country, to my english is not as good...

    On my squeeze page, i have this headline:
    "FREE report reveals a step by step guide on how to start earning online, without investing a single penny. Earning potential of $50 - $200 each day, with less than 2 hours of work a day."

    But I don't think its that good..

    Oh, and In report/ebook im offering Fiverr guide that actually I use to make my money online. So it's a good ebook/report.

    Any help or suggestions with my headline are well appreciated.

    Cheers.

    Your headline is too big with repeating terms.

    My suggestion would be:

    " FREE step-by-step report reveals earning $50-$200 online with less than 2 hours work each day "

    But still it can be improved further. Carry out split tests on your headline
    to see what works the best.



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  • Profile picture of the author rhinocl
    FREE report - "How to start earning online, without investing a single penny." Potential earnings of $50 - $200 per day. Requires less than 2 hours of work a day.
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  • Profile picture of the author AmberJB
    Need money now? You can earn $50-$200/day right away - in less than 2 hours/day! FREE step-by-step report
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    • Profile picture of the author TonySharma1
      Originally Posted by AmberJB View Post

      Need money now? You can earn $50-$200/day right away - in less than 2 hours/day! FREE step-by-step report
      I would go with this one for sure.
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  • Profile picture of the author henryw1981
    Make your headline shorter and ask a question that addresses your prospects pain points. Make sure it is a question that gets a yes answer. Also you do not have a CTA in your headline which is very important.
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  • Profile picture of the author eugenedm
    Amber nailed it.
    I like hers the best:
    Need money now? You can earn $50-$200/day right away - in less than 2 hours/day! FREE step-by-step report

    Questions is a good way to catch people's attention.
    Numbers and Figures are nice.
    And then time like "2 hours"
    That word FREE and "step-by-step" is a Power word

    You had a few of power words in your first post but the shorter the better.

    By the way don't get discouraged that it's not your first language. I've seen people succeeding with a heavy accent. Some of them make over $10 million and there's no problem there...

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  • Profile picture of the author fulfilledlife
    I think your headline is ok just needs to be a bit tighten up.

    Something like that:


    "FREE easy step by step guide on how to start earning online, without spending a single penny. Earn $50 - $200 a day, with less than 2 hours of work a day."

    Basically, the changes are:
    1. No need to use words report and guide in the same sentence.

    2. I assume the report is for people who're thinking to start making money online or tried in past and failed. So the emphasis is on spending rather than investing.

    Another emphasis is on a guide is being easy.

    3. Changed the last line to present tense. Makes it call to action rather than future opportunity.
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  • Profile picture of the author miqrofella
    Thanks so much everyone Tested with few headlines you all provided, and got good results on all ) (40% + optin).

    Thanks again,
    I really appreciate it!
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