NEED some serious feedback on this site.

The sales page is a rough draft at best, but I have to say it is a great start to sales copy. I am no expert at writing copy, but here is my hones evaluation.

*I do know that successful sales copy uses Tahoma Font.

*A pre headline; Ask a question that is about the product. Such as; Are you tired spending good money on half the information? You get the idea if you think about it. Text is half the size if your headline.

*Headlines that draw the reader in; including an idea of what they are getting, and the finale outcome: more money, traffic, etc., but attention getting.
Bold headline; In a bright red.

*Subheadline: three quarter the size of the heading font, in a bright blue

*Tell a story, your story or a created story that leads to the product. i really recommend your story!

*Picture of you - gives some credibility!

*The problem your product or service resolves. Now, this area comes to some conjecture, but I have learned to make the problem sound bigger than it is; therefore making your solution sound like "miracl maker"

*After the problem, present the solution your product or service resolves. Use lots of power words; you can find them in the warrior forum.

*Potential buyers always want to know What Is In It For Me or W.I.I.F.M. . Present the Benefits of your product or service. Make your benefits clear and strong

Present the benefits:

• Bullet Points
• Bolded
• Indented
• Specific

*Most people skim sales pages, and pay real close attention to the headings of each sections - Try to get good WIIF info in each heading when appropriate.

I hope this helps; you have made a good start your further ahead of others. Read some sales pages, especially from people who write good sales copy. You will learn alot just from that.

The header graphic needs to be higher quality. You tell people you are only a few months active but that you reached your self-set goals. So you must tell them what exactly you achieved. What kind of content do you give them? Is it PLR? If so, did you go through all the PLR content yourself to see if it is any good? Did you re-brand the content?

The headline is not impressive. What do you mean with half the information? Most people would probably agree on"Tired of spending your money of worthless products".

The sub headline is also not impressive. First of all, it is fine you want to share information for free, but don't give your customers the impression they will get qall the information they need to become a successful online entrepreneur FOR FREE. You can say you are tired of all the scam and bogus products out there that are only meant to suck cash out of people's pockets. And that you want to give people great information to be able to make the decision if they want to start an online business. That is the free level. People who decide YES must be able to upgrade to let's say Silver Level, so newbies actually starting an online business. And at the end there is the Platinum level, for those who have an online business for more than a year and want to take the next step in developing their business (I give this as an example).

There are a lot of IM membership sites out there, so there is a lot of competition. To take your share of the market you need to really stand out from the rest. Most people will have the best chance of success if they step into affiliate marketing at first, and later to sell their own products. Your membership site could also focus on an IM sub niche. Most important however, you need to deliver high quality content, even to free members!

Hope this helps.

Charles