Please review my landing page

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Hi

Can you please review my landing page [Website Offline]:

Please tell me what you think and how i can make it better.

Thanx in advance.
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  • Profile picture of the author drnet
    create more urgency and highly recommend a video.
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    • Profile picture of the author MEMMedia
      wlasikiewicz,

      Work on your headline first. Focus on your product's best feature and why Version 2 is better than version 1, or other listbuilding products for that matter.

      IOWs, what differentiates it from the rest. Something like why V2 makes failure unlikely.

      Also, think about putting your bullet points in bold and write what specifically the buyer will learn. Then list a few benefits the buyer will gain from their new education underneath your bullet point list.

      Hope this helps.

      Mark
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  • Profile picture of the author wlasikiewicz
    Thanx for all your advice so far..
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  • Profile picture of the author dudeco
    Don't like the book cover. Wanting to say this as nicely as possible, but it looks amateurish with the text in black at bottom bleeding into the background and hard to read. Would probably look much better just white text versus black.

    Other Q's- Are you trying to rank in the SE's at all? Looks like "make money in 2013" maybe, but very little there in that regard.

    You forgot the apostrophe in "It's"... you wrongly wrote "Its" in a heading. Big no no for me. I see something like that, I usually bail.

    Lastly, not convincing enough. Need a little more enticement and excitement created, needs to be a little longer too. Short sales copy, not creating enough "Man, sounds good... gotta have this for $15!" Like someone else said, a video would be great.
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  • Profile picture of the author ankitoberoi
    Apart from above mentioned points, the email subscribe form looks too simple.

    Once you get your design issues resolved, do try A/B Testing to optimize your landing pages.
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  • Profile picture of the author steelhead
    Echoing other respondents, the headline and body copy require testing.
    Work on writing compelling benefit driven headlines. Put some emotional hooks into your body copy. Bullet points or check marks, etc work well but they need life.

    Your market will tell you. If you put this up and nobody salutes, that is a pretty good sign it needs work.

    Because I play in the IM market every day, the best advice I can give is to write and test multiple versions of your headline and body copy. But the critical part of testing is not to make a bunch of changes and throw traffic at it. Change one thing only and test. Don't change two things.

    Check your metrics after every test. Throw 200 clicks at a squeeze page, see what happens. Then change something else. Always be testing. Different traffic sources will respond in different ways on different days, times of day, in diffeent countries.

    -Steely Steve
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  • Profile picture of the author erhebert
    Hi,

    Great job on taking action and asking for help!
    Perhaps add a few more testimonials.

    Good luck!

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  • Profile picture of the author curationsoft
    Just simple and plain, nothing special. You should add more content and pages
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  • Profile picture of the author Clickthroo
    Have you tested this yet? As ankitoberoi has said, split-testing the page is essential.

    Let the test data tell you if it will perform or not
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    • Profile picture of the author wlasikiewicz
      Originally Posted by Clickthroo View Post

      Have you tested this yet? As ankitoberoi has said, split-testing the page is essential.

      Let the test data tell you if it will perform or not
      I have split-tested it and it seems to be converting quite well..
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  • Profile picture of the author KevinW
    Get a better ebook cover. Get a cover standing up so you can see the text better. Try 3dcovermaker.com

    A little more spacing between the text and the torn paper testimonials.

    Text above the buy button is not centered (same for the image above the testimonials). Too far to the right.

    I would drop the buy button and make it a free offer. Give them a piece of the book for free and then direct them to a buy page after optin.
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  • Profile picture of the author Clickthroo
    This thread is a few weeks old know - how did it go?
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