Autoresponder sales page, could you do better?

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I really need to make some extra money and I've been studying the offline concept. I'm not capable of setting up websites at this time (and it seems like everyone has a site anyway, good or bad).

So, I thought an auto-responder would be nice and put together this flier. I'm going straight to Kinko's tomorrow morning, come hell or high water, no more procrastination, that's it!

I've tried to make it user-friendly and personal and I do not want to sound like a big business, more like a friend. Your comments are greatly appreciated, here you go:

How can you stay in touch with your customers on a regular basis, so that you can make more money, on auto-pilot? Is there such a way?
The answer is a solid YES.

In today's economy, doing all that you can to keep your doors open is vital.
Let me ask you, what do you do today to maximize your profits? Do you:

*Advertise in your local paper?
*Have an ad in the Yellow Pages?
Run another ad in the local throw-away?
*Participate in value-pack type of advertising?
*Send out some kind of mailings?

Whatever you do, it sure gets expensive, doesn't it? So, is there a better way, a more affordable way and a way that you can basically set it and forget it? YES< there is and its easier than you think.

Yes, it takes a little bit of pre-planning but once set up, you are done! Best of all, it is FREE!

To find out more about this way of marketing, please contact me for a FREE 30 minute consultation, how to make more money, spending LESS on advertising. You'll be glad you did.

This offer is available to the first 30 businesses (a $75 value for FREE) that contacts me. Please call xxx-xxx-xxxx for further information, ask for Eva, thank you and happy selling! Call TODAY to reserve your spot, Yes, you actually can make MORE money!
#autoresponder #comments #page #sales
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      Originally Posted by Joeman View Post

      Hi, i wouldnt get that printed just yet.
      You are using too much "online speak". the offline business community wont have clue what youre trying to sell. Also IMO its too long.

      try something like:
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      Feeling the effects of the recession?
      Not getting the level of customers you would like?
      Spending a fortune on advertising?

      If any of these are familiar why not take advantage of our FREE 30 minute consultation offer.

      We are already working with a number of businesses in your area, many of which may well be your competitors, and we have already helped them to

      * Make more sales
      * Stay in contact with their customers
      * Spend Less on advertising

      So if you want to survive the recession and keep one step ahead of your competitors, dont delay, call us today! - Can your business really afford not to?

      *Free offer valid for first 30 companies...

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      Thank you, I will work on that ! Honestly, it was my first rough draft and I was hoping to get some responses here so that I could re-work it in the morning, thanks again, Eva
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