Warriors Can You Be Brutally Honest With Me?, Its My First Time!!

[Mr McDonald]

I have decided to wet my fingers in the video promotion world, fancied a new angle to my marketing.
I have just uploaded my first video to my site and i would like some honest reviews before i advertise it to the world. I intend to make 1 video a month and submit to a number of top video sites.

Please review and give me your thoughts below:

Click To View My First Attempt

Thanks and best wishes

Gavin McDonald

[igorhelpsyousucceed]

This video doesn't make me want to visit
Listquad. It is not painful enough.

For example, first couple of seconds, you are asking
if the person is strugling with list building, but the picture
shows a girl smiling at a laptop - doesn't makes sense.

Igor

[Damien Roche]

I think it looks good, but it screams advertisement. If you aren't going to do a screen capture with audio or a personal video with you, then I'd advise you look at this as more of a presentation.

Offer more information and if you do use one-liners, make them useful - not just there to fill space. Reduce the amount of images.

Also, don't forget to use those link boxes youtube allows you to overlay your videos with.

Hope that helps!

[Alexa Smith]

Originally Posted by igorhelpsyousucceed

This video doesn't make me want to visit Listquad. It is not painful enough.

I have to say I completely agree with Igor about this point.

I think the smiley pictures and the soft, jazzy music are a huge contrast to the "You have a major problem, I have the solution" message an opt-in might better portray.

I think a voice-over might be preferable to this soft background "muzack".

[Mr McDonald]

Originally Posted by igorhelpsyousucceed

This video doesn't make me want to visit
Listquad. It is not painful enough.

For example, first couple of seconds, you are asking
if the person is strugling with list building, but the picture
shows a girl smiling at a laptop - doesn't makes sense.

Igor

Thanks your comment has got me thinking of new ideas. I hadn't thought of the painful side of list building. I will certainly adopt your ideas in next video.

[Mr McDonald]

Originally Posted by Damien Roche

I think it looks good, but it screams advertisement. If you aren't going to do a screen capture with audio or a personal video with you, then I'd advise you look at this as more of a presentation.

Offer more information and if you do use one-liners, make them useful - not just there to fill space. Reduce the amount of images.

Also, don't forget to use those link boxes youtube allows you to overlay your videos with.

Hope that helps!

Thank you for taking the time to review and leave your thoughts, i have alot of thinking to do before i try again.
Regards

[Mr McDonald]

Originally Posted by alexa_s

I have to say I completely agree with Igor about this point.

I think the smiley pictures and the soft, jazzy music are a huge contrast to the "You have a major problem, I have the solution" message an opt-in might better portray.

I think a voice-over might be preferable to this soft background "muzack".

Thanks alot for your thoughts, everyones comments will be a great help in my next video. I promise no more jazzy music lol !!!

[artwebster]

The music was awful! I'd expect to hear that in a lift somewhere!
The graphics were totally inappropriate - everybody smiling while looking at a monitor or laptop screen. Pain might be good but 'glum' would help.
Your message simply did not get across to me because I was initially confused by 'opt in list marketer' - I was looking for the 'new' opportunity to sell opt in lists.
Fade-in and fade-out of your verbal lines simply added to the general impression that 'here is some wall paper'.
The quality was good so you just have to work out what you are trying to do - drive a message home or simply produce pleasant videos to bore people off your page.

[RedMatrix]

Hated the music! I was expecting a voice over. I don't like to "read" my videos, I prefer to "watch & listen" to them.

[Nahar]

I agree with all comments so far (especially the one by the brutally honest artwebster's ), but I must add that the video does look professional. The music is awesome (unless of course you aren't planning to have the ad run on a monitor inside of a hotel elevator ).

You might consider using something else than YouTube. As soon as your video was over I clicked on it to check your YouTube channel and found many other interesting videos on Opt-in under "Related Videos". You might lose some (if not - many) potential customers this way. Perhaps paying for having your videos posted somewhere else than YouTube might be a good idea.

I can tell you will make awesome videos in the future.

[Tyrus Antas]

The video is well done in the technical sense but you need to be more persuasive. I was expecting something more personal. Maybe your voice, your picture or you actually talking to a camera. Remember that in video marketing some of the same principles of good copywriting/salesmanship still apply.

Tyrus

[Mr McDonald]

Originally Posted by Captivated Marketing

The music doesn't quite go with it, you need something more captivating. Something that grabs your viewers by the balls so to speak! Trial and error as they say though.

Thanks for the input, i must admit i never really thought about the music side enough

Regards

[Mr McDonald]

Originally Posted by artwebster

The music was awful! I'd expect to hear that in a lift somewhere!
The graphics were totally inappropriate - everybody smiling while looking at a monitor or laptop screen. Pain might be good but 'glum' would help.
Your message simply did not get across to me because I was initially confused by 'opt in list marketer' - I was looking for the 'new' opportunity to sell opt in lists.
Fade-in and fade-out of your verbal lines simply added to the general impression that 'here is some wall paper'.
The quality was good so you just have to work out what you are trying to do - drive a message home or simply produce pleasant videos to bore people off your page.

Thanks for the reply and thoughts, i really appreciate the time you have given me. I will use the advice in my next planning for video.

Regards

[Mr McDonald]

Originally Posted by RedMatrix

Hated the music! I was expecting a voice over. I don't like to "read" my videos, I prefer to "watch & listen" to them.

Lol another hater of the music, god i wish i had thought more about the music.
Thank you it means alot you took the time to look and advice.

Regards