All IM's what do you think of my home page?

Dude. It looks great! Congrats.

Hi.

Here's my 2 cents:

1) While I like the graphics quality of your header, I think it takes up too much space without moving your sales offer along. I feel it's eating up valuable "above the fold" real estate and you're not getting anything in return, like making your pitch.

I think you can solve it in two ways:

a) Make the overall header smaller.
b) Use some of the header real estate to move the sales offer along.

For example, you could make the 360 PROFIX lettering smaller and right below that identify your customer's pain: "Are you sick of game freezes, distorted Graphics, 2 and 4 Red Light errors, and the annoying E74 Error Code? Click here to learn how to solve it all under 1 hour!"

And then you can have some kind of graphic near it. Or maybe make that big XBox graphic clickable.

2) Overall, I think you should be a little more bold in your offer. These are gamers who want their XBox fixed NOW. So get on with it and right up front identify their pain and tell them how you're going to help.

Right now your main offer graphic is way at the bottom of the page. Why not put it near the top? Maybe even in the header area if you want to keep the header big.

3) I'd drop the XBox 360 Repair Center headline. It's too quiet for me. Why not be more direct:

"Super Videos Teach You To Fix The Dreaded Game Freezes, Distorted Graphics, 2 and 4 Red Light errors, and the Annoying E74 Error Code All Under 1 Hour!"

You can make that a little more eye appealing with some bullet points and sub headers.

4) I think the main body is a tad too wordy. Use more bullet points and sub headers to make the major points stand out. Remember, you're trying to let people know that you identify with their problem and that you have a solution for them that is easy, quick, cheap, etc. Whatever is your value proposition.

Hope this gives you some ideas.

Wendell

Hey ClickGuy ya that really does help. Thank you for taking the time to do this for me I really appreciate it.

The website looks great. I noticed however that some of your sentences are very long. Try to tidy up a few long ones as it is hard to follow some of the sentences.

The style is very conversational friendly which is great I wonder if you are using dragon naturally speaking software?

hey guys,

I updated my home page - would you mind telling me what you think now?

Re-adjusted the copy in the article, hopefully made it a little more appealing to create that sense of "this is the product I need" type of feeling. Also adjusted the headline. If you wouldn't mind giving your honest opinions and any objective criticism/feedback would be greatly appreciated.

Heres the URL: Xbox 360 Repair Center

Thanks guys,

Andrew

Very nice.

this is the first site i encountered that offers the kind of service, so i dont understand why you're not selling. i dont own an xbox, so i havent really ventured down this road, but i know a lot of people that do own one. i will let them know about your site.:-)

It seems very legit..with the videos and everything - my only question is how are you marketing it ... i mean, are you catching the flies who are willing to pay for this type of information?

The only reason I would guess that you aren't selling anything with this is that you aren't attracting the right prospects...

js

Like the site its well organized and and well decorated. Besides you need to concentrate in the captions and specially on the sentences you have used. They seems to be a bit too long. Try to cut them in short sentences.