What Do You Think About My Script?
Hello all... Long time reader - don't post much so I wanted to post the script that I came up with and wanted some thoughts...I personally think I need to find a better way to create some urgency.
I have a directory website called Florida Trip Guides and I am cold calling businesses about adding their business to the website.
Thanks!
So here is my script.
Hello! This is Brandon from floridatripguides.com!
The new ‘personalized’ Florida destination website - that connects OUR visitors to YOUR business!
_(NAME)_, I’m sure you’re busy - so the short version is…
We’ve done the research – and the NUMBER 1 thing on every visitors list to Florida is - INFORMATION. And our site has it!
We let our visitors know WHERE to: Eat, Stay, Shop, and Play!
Our site just officially launched – and we’re gearing up to attract thousands of visitors each month who are looking to enjoy themselves at a business like yours…
We want YOUR BUSINESS added on our website! Best part – its free!
Your business has the opportunity to stand out - not only in front of new potential customers to your area - but to stand out from your competition as well…
Mr/Ms _____ You can showcase your business by adding a description, hours of operation, your address and more - PLUS you’ll receive our personal, positive ‘TIP’ - about what we liked about your business!
Florida Trip Guides has over 28 different locations and over 87 different categories to choose from! Your business will be listed under every category that fits best.
Looking to stand out even more? Then we also offer our Enhanced Listing, and Featured Listing. If you purchase you’re listing TODAY, we’re offering a “LAUNCH SPECIAL” that’s 50% OFF our listing choices – now through April 30th!
Our most popular listings - is our ‘Enhanced Listing’. Normally $199 is now only $99. The other - is our Featured Listing normally $399 is now only $199 - AND - either listing is good for one full year from the date of purchase! With both of these listings you will be able to add your logo, contact info, videos, pictures, website links and more! Plus we will write a blog about your business as well!
Where else can you find advertisement like this for pennies a day?
To add your business TODAY - just go to our website and click ‘Join Us’ – and it’s all done right on through PayPal on our secure site.
Once you select which listing fits your needs best - then you can start adding information to our site.
Once again all listings are half off until April 30th …
We also offer affordable advertising space as well – if you’re more inclined to post an ad…
Just check out our ‘Advertise With Us’ Page. Compared to other sites – you’ll understand why we think they’re very affordable, and, very valuable!
Do you have any questions? How does that sound? Lets get you started!
Once again my name is Brandon – owner of Florida Trip Guides.com!
I really appreciate your time today…
I know I’ve given you a lot of information, so if I can have your email address, I can send you the simple details.
So any need for improvement? Thanks for taking the time to read!
I have a directory website called Florida Trip Guides and I am cold calling businesses about adding their business to the website.
Thanks!
So here is my script.
Hello! This is Brandon from floridatripguides.com!
The new ‘personalized’ Florida destination website - that connects OUR visitors to YOUR business!
_(NAME)_, I’m sure you’re busy - so the short version is…
We’ve done the research – and the NUMBER 1 thing on every visitors list to Florida is - INFORMATION. And our site has it!
We let our visitors know WHERE to: Eat, Stay, Shop, and Play!
Our site just officially launched – and we’re gearing up to attract thousands of visitors each month who are looking to enjoy themselves at a business like yours…
We want YOUR BUSINESS added on our website! Best part – its free!
Your business has the opportunity to stand out - not only in front of new potential customers to your area - but to stand out from your competition as well…
Mr/Ms _____ You can showcase your business by adding a description, hours of operation, your address and more - PLUS you’ll receive our personal, positive ‘TIP’ - about what we liked about your business!
Florida Trip Guides has over 28 different locations and over 87 different categories to choose from! Your business will be listed under every category that fits best.
Looking to stand out even more? Then we also offer our Enhanced Listing, and Featured Listing. If you purchase you’re listing TODAY, we’re offering a “LAUNCH SPECIAL” that’s 50% OFF our listing choices – now through April 30th!
Our most popular listings - is our ‘Enhanced Listing’. Normally $199 is now only $99. The other - is our Featured Listing normally $399 is now only $199 - AND - either listing is good for one full year from the date of purchase! With both of these listings you will be able to add your logo, contact info, videos, pictures, website links and more! Plus we will write a blog about your business as well!
Where else can you find advertisement like this for pennies a day?
To add your business TODAY - just go to our website and click ‘Join Us’ – and it’s all done right on through PayPal on our secure site.
Once you select which listing fits your needs best - then you can start adding information to our site.
Once again all listings are half off until April 30th …
We also offer affordable advertising space as well – if you’re more inclined to post an ad…
Just check out our ‘Advertise With Us’ Page. Compared to other sites – you’ll understand why we think they’re very affordable, and, very valuable!
Do you have any questions? How does that sound? Lets get you started!
Once again my name is Brandon – owner of Florida Trip Guides.com!
I really appreciate your time today…
I know I’ve given you a lot of information, so if I can have your email address, I can send you the simple details.
So any need for improvement? Thanks for taking the time to read!
― George Carlin