JUDGE my squeeze page

by Anshar
17 replies
Hello,

This is the third time for me returning to the IM
This time im trying out a dog training nice.
I have made squeeze page from scratch and now im trying to collect emails.

What do you pros think about my page? Any critical signs of failuare?
So far i have 0 emails collected, but now, when my page is done, i will start submiting some articles to ezine sites trough fiverr and ill be making some youtube videos to generate traffic...

I tried to buy fb traffic, but that was worthless, got my ad account blocked AGAIN

also i will try some FB group advertising ( altho i hate it myself, i think its unethical and dirty, maybe ill find someone on fiverr to do the dirty work)



Thanks for hearing me out, if you have any specific tips, please share them
#judge #page #squeeze
  • Profile picture of the author GlenH
    What did you do so bad with your 'dog training' ads on FB that got you banned?
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    • Profile picture of the author Anshar
      Originally Posted by GlenH View Post

      What did you do so bad with your 'dog training' ads on FB that got you banned?
      No idea.. it's hard to understand facebook. One of their employes can just ban your account because he thinks the ads are misleading and your done for it. Have to look for a new credit card etc

      Also im not sure how much to spend per visit, and what countries to target.
      So far ive targeted US/Australia/NewZewland at the same time, with some added interests of "dogs".

      Maybe its better just to target one country? maybe just one city?

      These are the questions i would find out after large amounts of testing, for now i have no experience.
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      • Originally Posted by Anshar View Post

        No idea.. it's hard to understand facebook. One of their employes can just ban your account because he thinks the ads are misleading and your done for it. Have to look for a new credit card etc

        Also im not sure how much to spend per visit, and what countries to target.
        So far ive targeted US/Australia/NewZewland at the same time, with some added interests of "dogs".

        Maybe its better just to target one country? maybe just one city?

        These are the questions i would find out after large amounts of testing, for now i have no experience.
        Did you get your first advert rejected right away? If you can give me some more details I can tell you why it got banned. I advertise on FB every day all day long day and I deal with FBs bullshit all the time.

        If it got reflected right away then a ban it could be because it's not a domain name but wouldn't think so... then again a .blogger doesn't help. Anyhow you must of done something wrong a few times before you got banned.

        What was your target audience? If you got negative feedback on the advert then that would be why.

        What message did you get when you got banned?
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        • Profile picture of the author GodOfCPA
          Facebook maybe didn't like your page because it could come off as "information harvesting" (collecting emails for no legit purpose). Privacy policy and domain should solve that issue...

          Having said that, I don't see this page converting too well because it doesn't offer a compelling reason to opt in (I know you get the ebooks pictured, but everything feels weak). I'd at least test giving the user some excellent content -- really hit the pain points of training a dog (headline is ultra-important here) and offer a couple of solutions -- on the page prior to asking for email (or even using an overlay popup to get emails).

          If there's plenty of content prior to an opt in request, you might solve your FB approval issues too (low-content squeeze pages are frowned upon by many ad networks).

          Also, maybe test out offering an email series (instead of ebook) on dog training -- that might lead to a more engaged list and higher opt in rate or it might not, just a thought..
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  • Profile picture of the author petkanov
    Ok, I think you need to get your own domain name rather than using blogspot. I wouldnt ask for the dogs name, and would make the headline more specific, like How To Teach Your Dog To Sit etc, also would change the graphics on the page.
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    • Profile picture of the author Anshar
      Originally Posted by petkanov View Post

      Ok, I think you need to get your own domain name rather than using blogspot. I wouldnt ask for the dogs name, and would make the headline more specific, like How To Teach Your Dog To Sit etc, also would change the graphics on the page.

      Thanks. What exactly would you change in the graphics?
      Maybe you have an example of a perfectly preforming squeeze page?
      (i know there are millions out there, but maybe you have a favorite?
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  • Profile picture of the author petkanov
    anf last would have a blog on my wevsite rather than using ezine. That way you can build trust and authority and brand yourself.
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  • Yeah, I would get a domain name for sure, they barely cost anything..... Maybe that's why FB banned you? Don't know any other reason why they would unless you are using words in the ad that you shouldn't. I like the design anyway.
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  • Profile picture of the author heruma
    Get your own domain name and hosting.

    The images are too distracting. Is this one ebook or three ebook? The picture on the lower right show three books.

    Why is your opt-in under the fold?

    As petkanov mentioned : Find one specific training in your book and focus the site on that.
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    • Profile picture of the author Anshar
      Originally Posted by heruma View Post

      Get your own domain name and hosting.

      The images are too distracting. Is this one ebook or three ebook? The picture on the lower right show three books.

      Why is your opt-in under the fold?

      As petkanov mentioned : Find one specific training in your book and focus the site on that.

      Thanks!
      No problem about the domains - i have done that before.
      Facebook accepts blogger blogs with no worries. As long as its not in the weight loss niche, that it hates

      Are you sudgesting my own domain just for facebook or better SEO?
      Almost everything in my squeeze page is an image based..

      Thats why im not focused on SEO..
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  • Profile picture of the author Anshar
    Are there any good fiverr gigs for promoting my site that you have tried yourself and would like to recommend ?
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    • Profile picture of the author GlenH
      A few basic things that don't look right

      1. Your whole pages is way to 'busy'. Too much for the visitor to look at
      2. The text is way too small, and with the color of the text you're using, it's so hard to read against that brown background. Visitors will just get frustrated and click away.

      You must grab your visitor attention within a few seconds, otherwise they are gone.

      And the headline of your page doesn't say anything special to grab a visitors attention.

      Your optin page has to focus on one thing and one thing only.

      Visitors are coming to your site looking for a solution to their dogs bad behavior. And you have to demonstrate to them you can give them the solution/s they need.

      The pretty graphics don't do anything, expect to distract.

      Sorry if all that is a bit harsh
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  • Profile picture of the author Cleberl1
    First of all get your domain name, you'll never reach success with a blogspot domain. Also try to make your design more clean with better headlines and font text.
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  • Profile picture of the author cherrytom
    I'm still very much a newbie, so I can't comment on your squeeze page from a marketer's point of view. But as a potential customer, if I had a dog, and wanted advice on training, it would appeal to me, and I really like the graphics.
    There is a lot of work involved in testing, tweaking and whatever else you might be inclined to do, none of which would interest me. Instead, I'd let my mentor take the strain! He would tell me what needed to be done and show me how to do it.
    There are mentors in all niches, and probably quite a few in the Dog Training niche. What you might pay for their coaching would be peanuts compared to what you could make by following their advice.
    Keep smiling!
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  • Profile picture of the author Jason Kanigan
    Originally Posted by Anshar View Post

    Hello,

    This is the third time for me returning to the IM
    This time im trying out a dog training nice.
    I have made squeeze page from scratch and now im trying to collect emails.

    What do you pros think about my page? Any critical signs of failuare?
    So far i have 0 emails collected, but now, when my page is done, i will start submiting some articles to ezine sites trough fiverr and ill be making some youtube videos to generate traffic...

    I tried to buy fb traffic, but that was worthless, got my ad account blocked AGAIN

    also i will try some FB group advertising ( altho i hate it myself, i think its unethical and dirty, maybe ill find someone on fiverr to do the dirty work)



    Thanks for hearing me out, if you have any specific tips, please share them
    It IS too busy. My eye doesn't know where to go.

    I don't *hate* the design or the colors...but there is no logical "Look here first...then here second...then here third..." progression as I view the page. More like "...Huh? What's this...And should I be looking at this other thing?...wait...what's this third thing?!"

    Direct the eye.

    1 - Headline

    2 - Copy about the prospect's problem that you are QUALIFYING your visitor for: do they have THIS problem? Because that's what you can solve for them.

    3 - Action to take (opt in).

    Unfortunately, you have two competing messages on this page:

    Stop excessive barking, train to follow commands, and get your dog to respect you

    and

    Stop chewing.

    This is confusing.

    Having the article tacked on the bottom makes it confusing.

    Which is it? What am I signing up for?

    It's best if you choose one message and stick with it.


    Since someone asked why the opt in wasn't above the fold, and it is now, I presume you changed the layout after early feedback? And this is what pushed the article text down?


    I'd pick ONE key problem with dog training, and stick with it.

    Split test several different landing pages each featuring a different problem your training solves. See which has the strongest feedback and then concentrate on that one.

    I don't have an issue with your colors or the central graphic. I would remove the signpost with the key problems and the free signup insets and move them beneath that graphic but above the opt-in...possibly turning one or both into text copy ("Are you sick and tired of your dog destroying your sleep by barking all night?" or "Are you fed up with your dog ruining your favorite shoes?").

    Maybe keep one of these insets in the header. Test and see what works: you should get a clear idea within 100 visitors.

    Are you using a heatmap product? They're free and can track clicks on the page, too. Then you can see how far the visitor got. But you need to give it more time than you'll want to--don't start adjusting things after just 5 or 10 visitors. You need a lot more to make it statistically significant.
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  • Profile picture of the author nicheblogger75
    Here's what I would do:

    First, get a real domain. IMO it looks unprofessional and makes you look like a hack when you use Blogger to set up a squeeze page. I don't mean to be harsh, just constructive criticism. I have lots of squeeze pages that convert at 40% or better, so I like to think I know a thing or two about building them.

    One thing that I have learned when it comes to squeeze pages is that simpler is better.

    I don't know if you paid someone to do the graphics, or did them yourself, but I would scrap the whole page. I know that isn't what you want to hear, but squeeze pages that are loaded with graphics like that are not converting well anymore.

    The squeeze pages that work best for me are the "guru" style, meaning the ones with a content box in the center or to the left or right and then an enticing background photo. Those pages are designed to draw the visitor's attention right to the headline. I have pages that do equally as well and all they are is a headline in big read or black letters that I made with Gimp, and then an email submit box.

    Also, there's no need to put anything below the fold. People generally won't scroll down and read any copy below the fold on a squeeze page. Also, if you want the best conversion rates ask for email only. Studies have shown that asking for email only can increase your conversion rates by as much as 8%-12%.

    Most important is your headline copy. You have to come up with a headline that almost makes it impossible for the person not to subscribe. Focusing on general dog training is alright, but you'd be better off to pick a specific problem that most dog owners have and then offer a solution.

    Then, you could put maybe one or two sentences underneath that describing a few of the tips inside. I wouldn't go much farther than that as far as copy. Basically, you have 2-3 sentences to turn your visitor into a subscriber. People won't read much farther beyond that, and many will stop after the first sentence if they don't find it compelling.

    Well, I hope that helps you out.
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  • Profile picture of the author Paul Guilfoyle
    I agree with most of the other comments but the very first thing I looked at (as will your prospect) is your headline which contains a misspelling of Professional. Sorry if this sounds harsh but if I were in the market for this type of product I would already be questioning the quality of what’s on offer.
    There is at least one other spelling mistake above the fold (“comands”). I appreciate it is very easy to miss your own errors ( I suffer with this myself sometimes, as we all do) so a good idea is to get a fresh pair of eyes on it.
    Wishing you all the best- keep going until you get it right and keep testing
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