An example of hysterically bad writing

DeePower · 07-24-2009, 03:18 PM

You get what you pay for. This is an example of one of those $2.00 for 500 words articles. It's so bad I can't even rewrite it.

Edited to add: Yes I own the article so I can post it where ever I like. And Yes I asked for samples. The samples were okay. And finally part of this was an experiment. There has been a lot of debate whether you can get quality for $2.00 for 500 words. This is the second time I've bought ghostwritten articles (for my own sites not for clients) and the second time they have been bad.

The world is moving first with great progress in everything and we are living first-life to keep tandem with everything around. To keep everything in order we are bound to live advanced life; but we easily fall prey to certain diseases associated to it, and Obesity and unwanted weight-gaining are the two most irritating diseases that is severely affecting to our life.
But, thanks to the god! A reliable product is around us in getting rid of obesity and unnecessary weight gain problems. It’s a wonder fruit that provides a number of benefits to our health. Yes, the diets of Acai Berry helps in loosing wait, very first. Let’s take a look at how it works in loosing weight.

Dee

Sandi Valentine · 07-24-2009, 03:24 PM

Nice. I'm impressed - can I get ten of those?

PatriciaJ · 07-24-2009, 03:28 PM

That almost tempted me to pack in the Wii Fit and opt for Acai Berry to lose my 'wait'

rosetrees · 07-24-2009, 03:30 PM

I found another one by the same author:

"Curb attract is quite an only the rank of attractiveness your home designs to watchers from the street.This is even more important when selling on your own because you don’t have a realtor to hype the interior as worth a looking at.

Is it deserving the inconvenience to place, if you don’t have good curb charm? The payback value on exterior promotes to your belongings range from 49% for landscaping betterments to 62% for out home betterments, such as painting."

debra · 07-24-2009, 03:31 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by DeePower

You get what you pay for. This is an example of one of those $2.00 for 500 words articles. It's so bad I can't even rewrite it.

The world is moving first with great progress in everything and we are living first-life to keep tandem with everything around. To keep everything in order we are bound to live advanced life; but we easily fall prey to certain diseases associated to it, and Obesity and unwanted weight-gaining are the two most irritating diseases that is severely affecting to our life.
But, thanks to the god! A reliable product is around us in getting rid of obesity and unnecessary weight gain problems. It’s a wonder fruit that provides a number of benefits to our health. Yes, the diets of Acai Berry helps in loosing wait, very first. Let’s take a look at how it works in loosing weight.

Dee

Yep...your right. Now, don't ever do that to me again!

I have my grand daughter here today for a little while. So...I read it to her just to see what a 4 year old response would be.

She said..."huh...NaNa...I thought Jesus (she's referring to god...she still knows him as Jesus) loved us.

P.S. Sorry for the lame post but it was to cute to pass up...and she just made my day.

GeorgR. · 07-24-2009, 03:37 PM

thanks to the gods and thanks to the wonders of the the holy acai berry of antioch...

I am 100% sure its the same guy who once wrote something for me..i was just reading in awe...and didn't know whether i should laugh or cry....

Jillian Slack · 07-24-2009, 03:44 PM

That's truly painful.

Collette · 07-24-2009, 03:47 PM

Actually, I think these pieces may have been written by someone I saw advertising 10 articles for $1. The web site copy was painfully similar.

I would go into more detail. But first, I must move with great progress to my landscaping betterments. Thanks to the god, I am living first-life to keep tandem with out advanced home betterments and that curb attract is deserving the inconvenience to place.

crissanteiro · 07-24-2009, 03:48 PM

I got one of those and the person asked me to explain what was wrong with it. How do you answer that?

Jeremy Kelsall · 07-24-2009, 03:50 PM

lol...

It is a horrible article!

But...

In a niche like acai berry, the article can suck and still make money. I wouldn't be surprised if the guy didn't get 3 or 4 sales off that article at $35 a pop.

DeePower · 07-24-2009, 03:51 PM

I got one of those and the person asked me to explain what was wrong with it. How do you answer that?

One word: everything.

Dee

SteelDanno · 07-24-2009, 03:53 PM

Amazing bad how that article is.

Hehe. :-P

pbennett · 07-24-2009, 03:53 PM

I remember once freaking out after reading my CEO's writing for the website. I desperately wanted to fix it and he wouldn't let me. He said it was written that way for his market....

really bad stuff.

Is this garbage computer generated???

Scott Ames · 07-24-2009, 03:57 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by crissanteiro

I got one of those and the person asked me to explain what was wrong with it. How do you answer that?

Funny!!

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Jillian Slack · 07-24-2009, 03:58 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Collette

I would go into more detail. But first, I must move with great progress to my landscaping betterments. Thanks to the god, I am living first-life to keep tandem with out advanced home betterments and that curb attract is deserving the inconvenience to place.

Well put, Collette. Couldn't have said it better myself.

Jeff Henshaw · 07-24-2009, 04:04 PM

I'd get him/her to write me about 50 articles and then I'd produce an ebook on how not to write articles, citing those particular articles as examples.

I wonder if he/she does ebook covers too!

Could turn out to be a best seller.

Jeff.

cashcow · 07-24-2009, 04:07 PM

I the article is actually worth $2 just for the laugh!

Steven Wagenheim · 07-24-2009, 04:08 PM

Gimmie his email address...I wanna hire him as my PR man.

JohnMcCabe · 07-24-2009, 04:10 PM

I wonder what would happen if you put one of those monstrosities through an article spinner...

Would the spinner program butcher it so completely it comes out readable?

Rezbi · 07-24-2009, 04:10 PM

They look like they've been spun already.

Steven Wagenheim · 07-24-2009, 04:10 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by JohnMcCabe

I wonder what would happen if you put one of those monstrosities through an article spinner...

Would the spinner program butcher it so completely it comes out readable?

I think it would crash.

Lisa Gergets · 07-24-2009, 04:36 PM

There are no words.

Obviously.

GuerrillaIM · 07-24-2009, 04:42 PM

Not sure what you expect to get for $2. Even in the third world there are better paid jobs for literate people.

sevenish · 07-24-2009, 05:14 PM

That's not writing. It may qualify as terrible typing though (if I may paraphrase Truman Capote).

mojuu · 07-24-2009, 05:18 PM

How great is this. Not even a machine could do that. Wonderful.

rlpruitt · 07-24-2009, 07:38 PM

Well, unfortunately that's the kind of quality I've been running into myself. It's forced me to spend the last week writing my own articles - something I hate to do 'cause for me it's VERY time consuming.

I just can't afford to pay someone to write the kind of stuff I want.

Ralph

traces2757 · 07-24-2009, 07:50 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by DeePower

You get what you pay for. This is an example of one of those $2.00 for 500 words articles. It's so bad I can't even rewrite it.

The world is moving first with great progress in everything and we are living first-life to keep tandem with everything around. To keep everything in order we are bound to live advanced life; but we easily fall prey to certain diseases associated to it, and Obesity and unwanted weight-gaining are the two most irritating diseases that is severely affecting to our life.
But, thanks to the god! A reliable product is around us in getting rid of obesity and unnecessary weight gain problems. It’s a wonder fruit that provides a number of benefits to our health. Yes, the diets of Acai Berry helps in loosing wait, very first. Let’s take a look at how it works in loosing weight.

Dee

I hope this facial tic that article gave me isn't permanent.

hangtimenino · 07-24-2009, 07:59 PM

Didnt you ask for samples of his work before you actually hired him? He sounds like a word for word english translator to me.

moralde · 07-24-2009, 08:07 PM

Any more of those articles and we all would have nose bleeds.

I admire the guts of this writer for being still in the writing business. I bet everyone of his clients has contacted him back about the same complaint. Uh, anyway, he'd just answer back 'What's wrong with it?'. And when the client fails to answer (in exasperation), he'd be thinking, 'see, there was nothing wrong with it'.

Michael Oksa · 07-24-2009, 08:17 PM

I am convinced this was not computer generated.

"...loosing wait..." is why I think it wasn't.

Also, if you tell then everything that is wrong with it, then you are, in effect, doing all of the proofreading for them. Isn't that THEIR job?

Oh well.

Positive the outcome forwarning at outside applause form after timelessness. Mistake is well into and more same, finally. Stars over fencing butternut squash tamale oatmeal.

All the best,
Michael

sevenish · 07-24-2009, 08:24 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Michael Oksa

Mistake is well into and more same ...

Beautiful! Butternut squash tamale is quite poetic as well.

gskesavan · 07-24-2009, 08:27 PM

Spun + Written so that he needn't rewrite the whole part of the article. I used to write $2 a piece (don't look at me like that guys

) but I never once have written like that.. maybe that's why I'm at least having most of the clients with me

Anyways, why would you go for those $2 articles? Go with a reputed writer, it's the best and worth the money.

Btw, excellent article, I'm impressed by the way he's able to excite us.

kennethtang · 07-24-2009, 08:28 PM

Scary thing is....I understood that passage

CDarklock · 07-24-2009, 08:31 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by DeePower

The world is moving first with great progress in everything and we are living first-life to keep tandem with everything around. To keep everything in order we are bound to live advanced life; but we easily fall prey to certain diseases associated to it, and Obesity and unwanted weight-gaining are the two most irritating diseases that is severely affecting to our life.
But, thanks to the god! A reliable product is around us in getting rid of obesity and unnecessary weight gain problems. It’s a wonder fruit that provides a number of benefits to our health. Yes, the diets of Acai Berry helps in loosing wait, very first. Let’s take a look at how it works in loosing weight.

Dee, do you mind if I use this on my sales page as a concrete example of why nobody should hire these people?

I've got some bad writing examples on my computer, but honestly, nothing quite like this.

sevenish · 07-24-2009, 08:36 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by CDarklock

Dee, do you mind if I use this on my sales page as a concrete example of why nobody should hire these people?

I've got some bad writing examples on my computer, but honestly, nothing quite like this.

Those gems are not Dee's intellectual property. However, you can find a few of this particular author's insights here:
Google

Edit: I just noticed most of those links are unavailable. Hmmm, I wonder why ...
Here's another set:
Google

Keith Kogane · 07-24-2009, 08:55 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by DeePower

You get what you pay for. This is an example of one of those $2.00 for 500 words articles. It's so bad I can't even rewrite it.

The world is moving first with great progress in everything and we are living first-life to keep tandem with everything around. To keep everything in order we are bound to live advanced life; but we easily fall prey to certain diseases associated to it, and Obesity and unwanted weight-gaining are the two most irritating diseases that is severely affecting to our life.
But, thanks to the god! A reliable product is around us in getting rid of obesity and unnecessary weight gain problems. It’s a wonder fruit that provides a number of benefits to our health. Yes, the diets of Acai Berry helps in loosing wait, very first. Let’s take a look at how it works in loosing weight.

Dee

Oh come now. Sounds like a challenge! It just needs a little translation:

In the modern world, everything moves fast and we have to live fast just to keep up. But because of this hectic pace, our lifestyles can make us fall prey to diseases like unwanted weight gain or even obesity. Being overweight can make life irritating, not to mention being a severe health risk.

But thank goodness! Now there's a reliable, safe way to get rid of unwanted weight and help fight obesity. This wonderful fruit provides a number of health benefits, but the primary benefit of an Acai Berry diet is that it will help you lose weight fast. Take a look at how an Acai Berry Diet can help you lose weight here.

Not defending paying for horrible writing like that, but for me, rewriting the above took less time than writing it from scratch, since I don't know anything about Acai really. I didn't have to think about it, I just fixed it.

It's not great now or anything, but it's readable, and would probably be a good piece to blog for backlinks.

If you have a bunch of terrible PLR laying around (like me) don't give up on it without giving it a shot at a translation. What's funny is that after a while, you can almost READ this stuff if you look at it enough, and you can work through them with re-writes pretty quickly.

I'd be maaaaaad if I paid more than a dime for that article though.

LilBlackDress · 07-24-2009, 08:59 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Keith Kogane

Oh come now. Sounds like a challenge! It just needs a little translation:

In the modern world, everything moves fast and we have to live fast just to keep up. But because of this hectic pace, our lifestyles can make us fall prey to diseases like unwanted weight gain or even obesity. Being overweight can make life irritating, not to mention being a severe health risk.

But thank goodness! Now there's a reliable, safe way to get rid of unwanted weight and help fight obesity. This wonderful fruit provides a number of health benefits, but the primary benefit of an Acai Berry diet is that it will help you lose weight fast. Take a look at how an Acai Berry Diet can help you lose weight here.

Great translation! I love it!

GeorgR. · 07-24-2009, 09:08 PM

yes...but you don't pay anyone and then sit down yourself and do it over..defies the purpose

By the way...did you purchase the service from DP forum?

Keith Kogane · 07-24-2009, 09:30 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by GeorgR.

yes...but you don't pay anyone and then sit down yourself and do it over..defies the purpose

By the way...did you purchase the service from DP forum?

I mean, it depends. If I got 10 like that for $1, I think the time and brainpower it would save me is worth it. I'm one of those people cursed by a blank page though. I'd much rather rewrite anything than write from scratch.

That's why I also love vendors who provide swipe copy, too. I heavily re-write to make it my own, but I don't have to think at all or review anything or research anything. Of course this is IMHO, and YMMV.

I just find it to be quick to read, translate in my head, re-type. And hey, you end up with something TRULY unique that way. :P

Rus Sells · 07-24-2009, 09:33 PM

Why you do fun make of article write I? I many hours my rack brain to content this provide!

I copywrite sue for now!!!!

AndrewCavanagh · 07-24-2009, 10:01 PM

I think you're being a bit over critical here. That article really spoke to me.

I mean who isn't worn out from this "first moving world" and how isn't living "first-life" trying to "keep tandem with everything around."

I'm pretty sure that's all of us. Yes indeed.

And yes "thanks to the god!" so many of us in our "living first-life" lifestyle "fall prey" to "irritating diseases" like "unwanted weight-gaining".

I know it's "severely affecting" to many of our lifes.

If I was wanting to "loosing weight" I'm pretty sure this article would have worked on me.

Or maybe not.

Kindest regards,
Andrew Cavanagh

elle56 · 07-24-2009, 10:08 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by DeePower

You get what you pay for. This is an example of one of those $2.00 for 500 words articles. It's so bad I can't even rewrite it.

The world is moving first with great progress in everything and we are living first-life to keep tandem with everything around. To keep everything in order we are bound to live advanced life; but we easily fall prey to certain diseases associated to it, and Obesity and unwanted weight-gaining are the two most irritating diseases that is severely affecting to our life.
But, thanks to the god! A reliable product is around us in getting rid of obesity and unnecessary weight gain problems. It’s a wonder fruit that provides a number of benefits to our health. Yes, the diets of Acai Berry helps in loosing wait, very first. Let’s take a look at how it works in loosing weight.

Dee

Jesus. That's what you get for scrimping on quality.

Rus Sells · 07-24-2009, 10:09 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by AndrewCavanagh

I think you're being a bit over critical here. That article really spoke to me.

I mean who isn't worn out from this "first moving world" and how isn't living "first-life" trying to "keep tandem with everything around."

I'm pretty sure that's all of us. Yes indeed.

And yes "thanks to the god!" so many of us in our "living first-life" lifestyle "fall prey" to "irritating diseases" like "unwanted weight-gaining".

I know it's "severely affecting" to many of our lifes.

If I was wanting to "loosing weight" I'm pretty sure this article would have worked on me.

Or maybe not.

Kindest regards,
Andrew Cavanagh

My laptop just received a dose of nasal cavity projectile milk for reading that while eating my birthday cake!!!

THAT WAS FUNNY!!!!!!!!!

Pokerlover · 07-24-2009, 10:15 PM

Nice one.. Can't understand.. Goodbye $2.. Make sure to ask for samples of the writer before you ask him or her to write for you next time..

traces2757 · 07-24-2009, 10:21 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by AndrewCavanagh

I think you're being a bit over critical here. That article really spoke to me.

I mean who isn't worn out from this "first moving world" and how isn't living "first-life" trying to "keep tandem with everything around."

I'm pretty sure that's all of us. Yes indeed.

And yes "thanks to the god!" so many of us in our "living first-life" lifestyle "fall prey" to "irritating diseases" like "unwanted weight-gaining".

I know it's "severely affecting" to many of our lifes.

If I was wanting to "loosing weight" I'm pretty sure this article would have worked on me.

Or maybe not.

Kindest regards,
Andrew Cavanagh

I'm pretty sure I lost a couple of pounds trying to decipher it.

thewizard · 07-24-2009, 10:38 PM

I was just considering getting into article marketing. Atleast now I know what kind of articles NOT to write.

TMG Enterprises · 07-24-2009, 10:53 PM

I wish people would stop loosing their weight on the world - it all seems to be finding its way to my house lately.

Tina G

peter gibson · 07-24-2009, 11:01 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by DeePower

You get what you pay for. This is an example of one of those $2.00 for 500 words articles. It's so bad I can't even rewrite it.

The world is moving first with great progress in everything and we are living first-life to keep tandem with everything around. To keep everything in order we are bound to live advanced life; but we easily fall prey to certain diseases associated to it, and Obesity and unwanted weight-gaining are the two most irritating diseases that is severely affecting to our life.
But, thanks to the god! A reliable product is around us in getting rid of obesity and unnecessary weight gain problems. It’s a wonder fruit that provides a number of benefits to our health. Yes, the diets of Acai Berry helps in loosing wait, very first. Let’s take a look at how it works in loosing weight.

Dee

So then it is true. The writing Gods have gone and banished us all to the Ninth Circle Of Hell.

The horror.

bgmacaw · 07-24-2009, 11:03 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Sandi Valentine

Nice. I'm impressed - can I get ten of those?

Sure, why not.

Joseph Then · 07-24-2009, 11:10 PM

Wow, if that's the quality of the work, I must be a damn good writer compared to these.

07-24-2009, 03:18 PM	#1
DeePower Senior Warrior Member War Room Member Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: High Desert Arizona hot hot hot Posts: 1,407 Blog Entries: 18 Thanks: 35 Thanked 251 Times in 86 Posts	An example of hysterically bad writing You get what you pay for. This is an example of one of those $2.00 for 500 words articles. It's so bad I can't even rewrite it. Edited to add: Yes I own the article so I can post it where ever I like. And Yes I asked for samples. The samples were okay. And finally part of this was an experiment. There has been a lot of debate whether you can get quality for $2.00 for 500 words. This is the second time I've bought ghostwritten articles (for my own sites not for clients) and the second time they have been bad. The world is moving first with great progress in everything and we are living first-life to keep tandem with everything around. To keep everything in order we are bound to live advanced life; but we easily fall prey to certain diseases associated to it, and Obesity and unwanted weight-gaining are the two most irritating diseases that is severely affecting to our life. But, thanks to the god! A reliable product is around us in getting rid of obesity and unnecessary weight gain problems. It’s a wonder fruit that provides a number of benefits to our health. Yes, the diets of Acai Berry helps in loosing wait, very first. Let’s take a look at how it works in loosing weight. Dee
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PatriciaJ HyperActive Warrior Join Date: Oct 2007 Location: United Kingdom. Posts: 233 Thanks: 7 Thanked 17 Times in 15 Posts Social Networking	Re: An example of hysterically bad writing That almost tempted me to pack in the Wii Fit and opt for Acai Berry to lose my 'wait'
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Collette HyperActive Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Aug 2008 Posts: 434 Thanks: 89 Thanked 188 Times in 105 Posts	Re: An example of hysterically bad writing Actually, I think these pieces may have been written by someone I saw advertising 10 articles for $1. The web site copy was painfully similar. I would go into more detail. But first, I must move with great progress to my landscaping betterments. Thanks to the god, I am living first-life to keep tandem with out advanced home betterments and that curb attract is deserving the inconvenience to place.

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DeePower Senior Warrior Member War Room Member Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: High Desert Arizona hot hot hot Posts: 1,407 Blog Entries: 18 Thanks: 35 Thanked 251 Times in 86 Posts	Re: An example of hysterically bad writing I got one of those and the person asked me to explain what was wrong with it. How do you answer that? One word: everything. Dee
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pbennett HyperActive Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Texas Posts: 197 Thanks: 183 Thanked 15 Times in 11 Posts	Re: An example of hysterically bad writing I remember once freaking out after reading my CEO's writing for the website. I desperately wanted to fix it and he wouldn't let me. He said it was written that way for his market.... really bad stuff. Is this garbage computer generated???

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07-24-2009, 04:10 PM	#20
Rezbi www.magicwordssell.net War Room Member Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: Lancashire, United Kingdom. Posts: 427 Thanks: 12 Thanked 20 Times in 17 Posts Social Networking Contact Info	Re: An example of hysterically bad writing They look like they've been spun already.
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07-24-2009, 04:36 PM	#22
Lisa Gergets Official WF Babe & War Room Member Join Date: May 2009 Location: Chicago, Illinois Posts: 582 Thanks: 401 Thanked 113 Times in 82 Posts Social Networking	Re: An example of hysterically bad writing There are no words. Obviously.
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07-24-2009, 04:42 PM	#23
GuerrillaIM One Man Army War Room Member Join Date: Jul 2008 Location: London, UK Posts: 904 Thanks: 25 Thanked 122 Times in 69 Posts	Re: An example of hysterically bad writing Not sure what you expect to get for $2. Even in the third world there are better paid jobs for literate people.

07-24-2009, 05:14 PM	#24
sevenish Advanced Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: , , . Posts: 926 Thanks: 148 Thanked 68 Times in 57 Posts	Re: An example of hysterically bad writing That's not writing. It may qualify as terrible typing though (if I may paraphrase Truman Capote).
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07-24-2009, 05:18 PM	#25
mojuu Morten Juul Join Date: Jul 2009 Location: Copenhagen, Denmark Posts: 57 Thanks: 2 Thanked 5 Times in 5 Posts Social Networking Contact Info	Re: An example of hysterically bad writing How great is this. Not even a machine could do that. Wonderful.

07-24-2009, 07:38 PM	#26
rlpruitt Active Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Jun 2009 Posts: 98 Thanks: 10 Thanked 10 Times in 8 Posts	Re: An example of hysterically bad writing Well, unfortunately that's the kind of quality I've been running into myself. It's forced me to spend the last week writing my own articles - something I hate to do 'cause for me it's VERY time consuming. I just can't afford to pay someone to write the kind of stuff I want. Ralph

07-24-2009, 07:59 PM	#28
hangtimenino HyperActive Warrior Join Date: Apr 2009 Posts: 206 Thanks: 42 Thanked 13 Times in 12 Posts	Re: An example of hysterically bad writing Didnt you ask for samples of his work before you actually hired him? He sounds like a word for word english translator to me.
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07-24-2009, 08:07 PM	#29
moralde Active Warrior War Room Member Join Date: May 2009 Posts: 59 Thanks: 13 Thanked 3 Times in 3 Posts	Re: An example of hysterically bad writing Any more of those articles and we all would have nose bleeds. I admire the guts of this writer for being still in the writing business. I bet everyone of his clients has contacted him back about the same complaint. Uh, anyway, he'd just answer back 'What's wrong with it?'. And when the client fails to answer (in exasperation), he'd be thinking, 'see, there was nothing wrong with it'.
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07-24-2009, 08:17 PM	#30
Michael Oksa The Ethical Marketer War Room Member Join Date: May 2006 Location: Wisconsin, USA Posts: 3,624 Thanks: 437 Thanked 823 Times in 353 Posts Social Networking Contact Info	Re: An example of hysterically bad writing I am convinced this was not computer generated. "...loosing wait..." is why I think it wasn't. Also, if you tell then everything that is wrong with it, then you are, in effect, doing all of the proofreading for them. Isn't that THEIR job? Oh well. Positive the outcome forwarning at outside applause form after timelessness. Mistake is well into and more same, finally. Stars over fencing butternut squash tamale oatmeal. All the best, Michael
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07-24-2009, 08:27 PM	#32
gskesavan Active Warrior Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: Chennai Posts: 91 Thanks: 2 Thanked 7 Times in 6 Posts	Re: An example of hysterically bad writing Spun + Written so that he needn't rewrite the whole part of the article. I used to write $2 a piece (don't look at me like that guys ) but I never once have written like that.. maybe that's why I'm at least having most of the clients with me Anyways, why would you go for those $2 articles? Go with a reputed writer, it's the best and worth the money. Btw, excellent article, I'm impressed by the way he's able to excite us.

07-24-2009, 08:28 PM	#33
kennethtang Leaves Fall War Room Member Join Date: Jul 2002 Location: Somewhere Out There Posts: 1,889 Blog Entries: 14 Thanks: 14 Thanked 91 Times in 40 Posts Social Networking	Re: An example of hysterically bad writing Scary thing is....I understood that passage
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07-24-2009, 09:08 PM	#38
GeorgR. Senior Warrior Member War Room Member Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: Earth Posts: 2,555 Thanks: 10 Thanked 202 Times in 132 Posts Social Networking	Re: An example of hysterically bad writing yes...but you don't pay anyone and then sit down yourself and do it over..defies the purpose By the way...did you purchase the service from DP forum?
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07-24-2009, 09:33 PM	#40
Rus Sells HyperActive Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Jan 2009 Location: Where ever the storms take me. Posts: 151 Blog Entries: 1 Thanks: 0 Thanked 7 Times in 7 Posts	Re: An example of hysterically bad writing Why you do fun make of article write I? I many hours my rack brain to content this provide! I copywrite sue for now!!!!
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07-24-2009, 10:01 PM	#41
AndrewCavanagh Senior Warrior Member War Room Member Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: Cairns, Australia. Posts: 2,778 Thanks: 2 Thanked 431 Times in 242 Posts	Re: An example of hysterically bad writing I think you're being a bit over critical here. That article really spoke to me. I mean who isn't worn out from this "first moving world" and how isn't living "first-life" trying to "keep tandem with everything around." I'm pretty sure that's all of us. Yes indeed. And yes "thanks to the god!" so many of us in our "living first-life" lifestyle "fall prey" to "irritating diseases" like "unwanted weight-gaining". I know it's "severely affecting" to many of our lifes. If I was wanting to "loosing weight" I'm pretty sure this article would have worked on me. Or maybe not. Kindest regards, Andrew Cavanagh
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07-24-2009, 10:15 PM	#44
Pokerlover Warrior Member Join Date: Jul 2009 Posts: 26 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Re: An example of hysterically bad writing Nice one.. Can't understand.. Goodbye $2.. Make sure to ask for samples of the writer before you ask him or her to write for you next time..
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07-24-2009, 10:38 PM	#46
thewizard Active Warrior Join Date: Jan 2009 Posts: 47 Thanks: 5 Thanked 3 Times in 3 Posts	Re: An example of hysterically bad writing I was just considering getting into article marketing. Atleast now I know what kind of articles NOT to write.

07-24-2009, 10:53 PM	#47
TMG Enterprises Tina Golden War Room Member Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: Massachusetts, USA Posts: 1,995 Thanks: 809 Thanked 452 Times in 333 Posts Social Networking Contact Info	Re: An example of hysterically bad writing I wish people would stop loosing their weight on the world - it all seems to be finding its way to my house lately. Tina G
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07-24-2009, 11:10 PM	#50
Joseph Then Senior Warrior Member War Room Member Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: Singapore Posts: 3,375 Thanks: 6 Thanked 70 Times in 50 Posts Social Networking	Re: An example of hysterically bad writing Wow, if that's the quality of the work, I must be a damn good writer compared to these.
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