I am trying, and kind of failing...

Your squeeze pages are both horrible. Too much text and they're not pleasing to the eye.

I'm not going to take the time to re-do them for you, but I can see the problems on both of them.

Look at other successful squeeze pages on big sites in your niche and see if you can model yours after them.

Good luck!

I have to agree with Jeff. Your opt in pages look terrible.

Too much text and you are just giving away too much on that page. Try a lot less text and get rid of the red points.

Something about all the mixing of bold, and red in the text make it look too commercial or spammy for me. I would not leave my email either.

Go for fewer words and get the optin at the top.

Good luck, I hope you do great with this. The great thing you did was take action, now you just need to keep tracking and adjusting.

Dear Sushi92,

Thumbs up for your courage to do a talking head video and upload it to youtube.
Keep on creating more video.

My 2cents about your video.
Build Trust
- Tell people what happened to you.
- Have before and after picture of yourself.
- Tell people how you do it.

Transcribe your video and put it in the description.

Do not send people to two landing page on one video.

This particular video is viewed by only 14 people, if you have 243 visitors, it means the visitors are coming from other places. Did you track?

Your landing page.
Your call to action buttons at both landing page are under the fold.
Try to fit everything above the fold.

Keep tuniing your landing page.

Thanks for the input so far guys. I hoped they didn't look as terrible as they do . I did think they look horribly spammy but a guy said to me but RED and BOLD and FREE all over the place...... Do you reckon I could literally take out the bullet points? I was told to keep them in... so I'm getting conflicting opinions ...

gr8... is that GetResponse? If so, get your own domain name and site. Shorten the squeeze page and get straight to the point with your headline.

Your prospects already know what the deal is.

Get rid of the video at the bottom of the page. Just get in, and get out.

Sushi92,

They suggest you to use less red, not taking out your bullet point.
No body ask you to take out your FREE words.

Try to shorten these sentences
* The benefits that this FREE video talks about are:
Example:
Here's what you will learned

* How to get fit and in shape without needing to starve yourself or take pills
Example:
Stay in shape while eating as much as you want.

* How us women have a head start over men when it comes to balancing out this hormone
Example:
Women are better than men in losing weight.

The copy is weak. Looks like you're targeting WOMEN. You need to create a BENEFIT DRIVEN headline.

How do you do that?

Your product is a WEIGHT LOSS SYSTEM, right?

Think what the number one emotional benefit your product offers to your target (Women?) and that's your headline.

Example:



You can test that one if you like though I'll admit, I just pulled it out of thin air. Here's a few things about that headline that are important when writing copy......

That headline is BENEFIT DRIVEN. It plays on an emotional want most women have..... looking better than their peers in a swimsuit (it's implied in the headline)

..... 14 pounds in 30 days..... that provides an element of tangablity. They can actually SEE themselves losing 14 pounds in 30 days. That's kinda like a goal. You can't say the same for "lose weight" though. It's weak.

Consider these points and rewrite your copy.

I see you've made changes but it still doesn't quite do it for me. I went and looked at the Venus Factor website. From that, here's your copy. I'd say you test this......

Build traction w/ your Youtube channel(This will take time). It's a great way to attract traffic. You just need to stay consistent with adding more videos but at the same time providing great, exciting(share worthy) content in your videos. Don't let $$ be your primary focus. Let your message be the primary focus. Build a following by providing great content first... once you gain their trust you can sell to them later.

Look at your squeeze pages from outside of yourself.

Would you leave your info?

What is the reason why someone would leave their info?

Why opt-in to watch a sales video when I can just type in venus factor if im looking for it?

Who are you and why should I listen?

Nothing Happens Unless You Make It Happen..... just keep on testing and optimizing your landing pages till you get consistent high results.... here are examples from my landing pages and different traffic sources.... TC- total clicks UC- unique clicks A- actions or optin
ACR- optin%

Better yet, hire someone to enhance your rich content squeeze page.

How about using leadpages?

I agree with them, reduce the font size of your main heading. You may use this red color #cc0000 for your heading.

Try to move the site wrapper a little bit higher.

Work on your salescopy.

To spice it up a little bit, use a check bullet point image.

You forgot to add your copyright text in the footer.

Break a leg.

Also you may want to get proper domains for the squeeze pages - something short/catchy, easy to remember that will look professional.

Long domains, especially when you also have sub-domains, look amateur and create a sense of a cheap brand.

This is almost always a sign that you're not targeting your marketing correctly.

When you don't know how to target your marketing, you try to appeal to everyone, but with the number of specific products available today, you lose every customer.

For example, if you promote "weight loss", and another person promotes "6-pack abs", while another promotes "drop your body fat", we're going to go with the program that delivers SPECIFICALLY what we want.

Figure out your customer's EXACT needs, and focus around building that.

Like ChrisNosal touched on... poor conversions have more to do with the traffic you're targeting and the ad/CTA they clicked than the design of your squeeze page.

Squeeze pages are one of the most misunderstood aspects of internet marketing. People think they can throw up a squeeze page and send traffic to it and get 80% conversion rates.

That's not how it works. I've gotten CR's that high but it was because I spent a helluva lot of time preselling the opt-in. So, when they got to the page they were already sold on opting in.

I'm going to take you in a completely different direction, mainly because it's made me more money. Here goes...

Forget about the hard squeeze page (what you're using). Font colors, background images, button colors and all that crap mean nothing. If you've done a good job selling the opt-in and you're showing it to the right person, it doesn't matter what color the headline is or if it looks "pretty".

I used to use squeeze pages like the ones you're using and the best CR I ever got (from cold traffic) was 52.1%. What I use now is a 7-PAGE squeeze page that has converted as high as 30.5%. (It's the free mini-course in my signature.)

That's a much lower conversion rate, right? Yep. But guess what? My conversion to sale is 10 TIMES higher. My 7-page squeeze page does two things:

1. It attracts the exact person I want to attract.

2. It repels the exact people I want to repel and never want on my list.

You need to inject your own personality. If you have experience with this niche, use that. Tell stories. Stories building trust because can relate to your stories.

(My 7-Page squeeze page is the free mini-course in my signature. Look at it. Study it closely. You don't need to opt-in to understand what I'm doing - just study my structure. It took me days to write it but was well worth the time.)

Hi sushi92

Yes, you have to change the squeeze, you can not watch and do not need the text.

Definitely too much text, very cluttered-looking. Also, make sure that your optin fields are above-the-fold of the page otherwise visitors might miss them.