Opinion/Feedback On My Landing Page

Sharing your lading page url would make the users give comments on it and at first the start up cost is always going to be high. so advertise as much as you can, i would suggest you to use Facebook ads as it is easier to laser target potential customers through that. And The more you email, the more better although you could do something like 3 days promotional email, 2 days free valuable content and keep it going. so this will make the subscribers check your email often and engage with you and your offers

Though you've probably already heard this, you can't teach people how to make money online when you don't know yourself.

My prediction - Zero income.

My prediction - Zero income.

Do some tests and see how satisfied you are with the results.

I would try adding a picture of a real person to make it more inviting. Right now it feels like all the millions of other make-money-fast products.

Maybe even describe more about the website you are creating.

Is it a personal website, a passive income website, a product review website?

Just look at the Guru squeeze pages and imitate what they do.

Make it look a little more professional maybe, and use a format that's easier to read.

Just a few tips.

The url is in his signature, where it should be.

Landing page is on the lower end of acceptable. It's not awful. Here's the problem: it's not exciting. The headline isn't enticing. Again, it's not terrible...it's just...bland.

"The Simple 3-Step Cucumber Sandwich for Filling Your Stomach In Under 10 Minutes"...see what I'm saying? Not a plane crash. But not sit-up-and-take-notice, either.

Sub point #1 - rewrite so it's positive. You have a double negative in there ("making it impossible for you to not understand"? Lawd, it's like The Simpson's knife episode when Bart's stumbling through an out-loud reading of the safety comic "Don't...Do...What...'Donny...Don't'...Does."

Sub point #2 - "One death is a tragedy. A million deaths is just a statistic." ~Joseph Stalin

7 Billion people is too darn large a number for our puny human brains to comprehend.

So your impossible understanding in the first point plus this mind-blowing incomprehension in your second are not a good start.

Sub point #3 - "You WILL get my personal email..."

There's only one problem with this. Who the heck are ya??

I mean, if you're Frank Kern or Matt Cutts, I'm interested.

Otherwise...


So, man, my advice is to brush up on "hooks."

Get one one for your page. Work it into the headline. Build it into the sub points.

What you have isn't bad, but it needs seasoning.