Opinions/critiques please

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Simple page, nothing special but would like some feedback.
Free 8 page report on Celiac Disease
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  • Profile picture of the author Killer Joe
    Michael,

    There's a typo in your headline...read it outloud...

    KJ
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  • Profile picture of the author Mike Shain
    My first impression was why do I have to opt-in to get a report you are wanting feedback on?
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    • Profile picture of the author KimW
      Originally Posted by Netpiddler View Post

      My first impression was why do I have to opt-in to get a report you are wanting feedback on?
      Maybe he is asking for feedback on the page, not the report?
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      • Profile picture of the author Mike Shain
        Originally Posted by KimW View Post

        Maybe he is asking for feedback on the page, not the report?
        That might be the case, I just read Free 8 page report on Celiac Disease in his post and took that to mean he wanted that reviewed.

        Sorry if I misunderstood the request.
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  • Profile picture of the author lotsofsnow
    It should serve the purpose as is
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  • Profile picture of the author Ross Bowring
    In your bullets... don't use the word "Learn"... sounds too much like hard work.

    Use "Discover", "Find out..."
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  • Profile picture of the author Michael Motley
    thanks all.

    Yes, i meant i wanted feedback on the page, not the report. (a fine report done by TMG Enterprises for a very nominal fee mind you *shameless plug*)
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    • Profile picture of the author BigRedNotebook
      Headline has multiple errors.

      You're giving away a free report, but you provide the bullet points re: the benefits of the report before telling anyone you're giving one away.

      Multiple spelling errors.

      Background information re: Celiac Disease seems misplaced, if not unnecessary.

      PM me. I took the liberty of giving it a quick edit. Would be happy to show you what I mean.

      Carson
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