CONTEST - $3000, $2000 & $1000 Winners...WINNERS ANNOUNCED! <----

[Rod Cortez]

Ok, I'll play. Thanx for the opportunity Allen.

How A Drunken, Caffeinated, Angst-Ladden Internet Marketer Turned $1.23 Into A 6 Figure Business....

RoD

[affiliaterocks]

This is wonderful contest. Great forum for entrepreneurs and marketers.

Yeah..When is the deadline again?

[Rod Cortez]

Originally Posted by affiliaterocks

This is wonderful contest. Great forum for entrepreneurs and marketers.

Yeah..When is the deadline again?

There's no set deadline. Allen is going to wait and see; he'll notify / update this thread when he decides on the deadline. Probably going to read and read and read until he finds a few that he really likes.....

[SirHandsome]

Have You Heard of 'The War Room' Yet...?

[hockier]

Wow, good prize money. I will definately try for it.

Whats the deadline?

[Bakai]

One thing is for sure, it will really increase the value of the War Room. Great idea Allen.

[sreenivas]

Thats too good idea for making thousands of brain to work for headline and etc ideas.

Here is mine

Want to start Online - Click here

Thanks Allen
Sreenivas

[Ricky Allen]

Well heres my go at things.

I will try to format it in the way it is in HTML on my computer when I get a minute.

But For Now.

The War Room Vs Sex

Ricky "The Ebook Generator" Allen

[Pragun]

my entry -

Why have you been playing with pennies while other's are making bank ?? Learn the real secret...

[Rod Cortez]

Originally Posted by hockier

Wow, good prize money. I will definately try for it.

Whats the deadline?

Go up two previous posts to see the answer......there's no set deadline yet.

Originally Posted by Bakai

One thing is for sure, it will really increase the value of the War Room. Great idea Allen.

Good point, it's actually a GREAT case study for the use of social proof / running contests to create "buzz".......

[BigManta]

This was actually a lot of fun :-)

I'm not very good at formatting text in forums, but here's my shot at it:

"One man in a field is not a warrior."

[zapseo]

Shhhhh....it's a secret....

RIGHT IN FRONT OF YOUR FACE, if you'd but look.

Allen's actually dropped a few hints as to a few of the letters he seems to like.

I'm not going to say what. Not my place.

Just -- "He who has eyes, let him see..."

I will ask you this...

WHAT ARE YOU THINKING ?

Hamster King, this applies to you, too, so listen up!

What is the absolutely 1 essential that you need to make a sale?

Hmmmm????

Well...after my tour of most of the salesletters this morning -- many of you don't have it. Or some of you, you have a placeholder. WTF? (Hint: you don't need to use a placeholder at this time. You can use the real thing.)

Geesh. How is Allen going to pick the first 3?

Maybe it could be from....sales ?

Is the light coming on ?

Here's Another Faux Pas that would, for me, put you immediately at the bottom of the barrel ...

Comments like:

"I just slapped this up."

HOW RUDE!

Uber Copywriter Gary Bencivenga prefaces many of his autographs with "Why not the best?"

Indeed.

Why are you willing to put in a half-assed effort?

You may not win any of prizes, or have any hope to.

But guess what? Participation in this contest pays you in other ways. As Dr. Mani has pointed out. It pays you in exposure...

Some of you, it's going to give you some exposure that you may not have had before. Avenuegirl comes to mind.

Right now, this woman appears to be participating in this contest full bore (boar?) ahead. (Okay, I admit -- I could be somewhat prejudiced. She thanked my post. And participated in another thread I produced. But that spirit! It gets noticed! No hiding her light under a bushel!

Interesting, that. While I'm not Allen, and I have nothing to say about the voting (explicitly, anyway; and implicitly, if so, may be no more influence than any of you have.) -- she got my attention. I'm sure she's gotten a few other people's attention, too.

Remember what I said before ... ATTENTION IS GOD when it comes to marketing.

{/rant]

oh yah...

PS -- I think I also found the inspiration for this contest.

PPS -- someone has their copy in a serif font. That is soooo hard for these old eyes to read. There's a reason people use sans-serif fonts online.

[zerofill]

And the Winner is...this professionally crafted one-of-a-kind copy from Zerofill...

You have to pay extra for the uncensored version...

Cool

[laurenceh]

http://www.warriorforum.com/test-forum/131899-should-you-join-war-room-comp.html


What a great idea and opportunity Allen. Thank you.


This is also the very first sales letter/review of it's type I have ever written, and would probably not have showcased what I can do without the prompt of this contest.


Hopefully I will get a bit of feedback here, AND gain valuble lessons in the process of maybe earning some prize money!

Love it!


Ooooh how green I am! I cannot get the link to work! I think I coded it right? What have I done wrong? Grrrrrr

[zapseo]

Laurence, all ya gotta do is slam the url in there.

I think the posting mechanism will do the rest.

Let's try it:

http://www.warriorforum.com/main-int...ml#post1255091

(pulled directly from my address bar)

Oh, and by the way, someone has already privately answered my question, and also knew some of my other secrets....

And no, his name wasn't Allen.

Anyone else?

[zapseo]

Don -- about 50% of your copy gets edited out.

I could have sworn I'd seen worse words here in the forum.

The easy peasy brain dead simple way to add clickable links to your post:

Just put the link in the post. The very smart posting will transform it into a clickable link for readers. (And I'll even remove these educational comments about putting links in...)

[MikeAmbrosio]

Well, why not, right?

The Cream Of The Crop Only!

Mike

P.S. I am not a copywriter...I am not looking for jobs...just having a little fun

[John Rogers]

Respectfully submitted...

Mysterious Backwoods Louisiana Man Reveals Secrets to Internet Fortune

[laurenceh]

oh booger cnt get 2 a pc 2nite. On cell internet so ave 2 edit tommorow. Wat a fool! I pasted the url that appeared after i posted entry. Thought that would work. Should you join the War Room? (Comp) see if this works!

[Adam Carn]

Great competition.

Some real good entries already. I wonder if any have caught Allen's attention yet. Are we going in the right direction?

Adam

[tomw]

What a great idea (and opportunity!)

I can't remember the last time I had to write copy, but I've given it a go and really enjoyed the challenge of getting the old brain cells into gear again.

A lot of fun!



Thanks Allen.

Here's my link:

Business is a Battleground. You Need Warriors.

Tom

P.S. I'm with Mike A (great to see you!) I'm not a starving writer either.

[Bill Farnham]

This has been more fun than anything I've done all week.

Warrior Forum War Room - Your Catalyst For Success On The Web


KJ

[nursewriter]

This is a great contest!!

Here's my entry.



Want Financial Freedom? Join the War Room and Gain Access to Everything You Need



Thanks Allen!

[Jill Carpenter]

Originally Posted by zapseo

WHAT ARE YOU THINKING ?

OMG, I am such a moron.

[jaggyjay]

3 pages of entries so far. Looks like some stiff competition : )

Here's my entry:

What If All The Answers to Your Internet Marketing Questions Were Just 1 Click Away? (Competition)

Best of luck to all warriors!

- JaggyJay

[RGallowitz]

WHOOPS!

I totally forgot to post here.

Here's my entry. A bit different I think....

Start OVER and BANK - Warrior Forum's WAR ROOM!


Cheers!
Reinhardt

[MizzCindy]

Psst! You Don't Need Another Rehashed eBook. You Need the WAR ROOM!

[Scott Murdaugh]

"I just slapped this up."

HOW RUDE!

Fixed my post there ZapSeo...

It's a figure of speech for "I don't have 40 hours to put into this like I normally would..."

It's the best I can do in a few hours, it was actually quite a bit of work, but don't have the time to edit/polish it like I would for a normal client...

Hell, if I wasn't swamped with work right now I probably WOULD put 40 hours into it...

But I don't... I don't know the deadline, I'm not 100% sure where it's going to be marketed, or if I'm supposed to be targeting forum members who haven't signed up yet or people who may be new to IM and this forum in general.

I'm working on a project right now that pays more than 1st place upfront... I'm sorry if you're offended that I have to give that client my full attention right now, on top of personal projects and everything else I've got going on.

Uber Copywriter Gary Bencivenga prefaces many of his autographs with "Why not the best?"

Because my "best" takes 40 hours or longer... Although I still think if my hunch is correct about who this is targeted to that I did a pretty damn good job on the copy given the time frame I have to go on here...

It's not a half-assed 3 line ad, it was a lot of work... Is it my best? No. Can it sell to the right crowd? Yeah, if I'm right about who that crowd IS.

Sorry if it sounded "RUDE" to you, but honestly this is the ONLY contest like this I'd ever consider entering... And I seriously doubt anyone else is spending 40 hours writing their ads either.

Peace,

-Scott

[zapseo]

best does not necessarily require 40 hours in everyone's book. One of my mentors pulled in $1.4M in 15 minutes from a letter he wrote, I don't recall how long -- but he did it in front of a group of people during no more than an evening in Friday Harbor, Washington. (He's actually the person who turned me on to Bencivenga, btw.)

I don't have adequate amount of time to write something that would do what I have justice -- so I'm not writing it.

Over on the copywriters' forum here, there's a thread for people requesting reviews. It comments about people who say such things as "I just slapped this up here."

It sets up a bad taste in people's minds from the outset.

Your work deserves a better shot. Whatever you do.

So, even if you DID just "slap this together" -- and can't devote your usual amount of time -- it most likely serves you better to keep the amount of effort you spent to yourself. Some of my best selling work is some of the writing I've done the quickest.

PS -- that's a sweet job you did on Ken Fry's copy, BTW (I haven't read your contest copy yet.). I was part of Ken's inaugural group on that product and it pleases me that his outstanding product is so well-served by your copy.

[zapseo]

Originally Posted by avenuegirl

OMG, I am such a moron.

No, no, no. Past tense.

You went above and beyond expectations with the sig.

Judy

[Matt Jutras]

I'm really confused about something here...just a small detail...

I've noticed in more than a few submissions the claim that the $37 investment gives you 20 years of membership...yet in the sales letter for The War Room it says that you get a LIFETIME membership.


Link to War Room sales page:

Warrior Forum - The "War Room" - Private Discussions

The quote I'm referring to:

Yep -- just $37 buys you lifetime access to the private marketing forum that could add thousands, tens of thousands, or even more to your bottom line if you just follow the steps laid out for you by top marketers that generate their fortunes using the info they are giving you!

Since I wrote my submission with the assumption that the membership was for life, can someone clear this up for me...if I made a mistake with my submission I'd like the chance to fix it...

[BigManta]

I noticed the same thing when creating my post. But when you sign up for the War Room it does mention 20 years in the drop-down box - as I just signed up yesterday after wanting to participate in this post :-)

[Jill Carpenter]

FREE Video Reveals the #1 Secret to your IM Success - The War Room UNCUT

[tommygunn]

My humble entry.

War Room Community on Warrior Forum

[TiffanyDow]

Originally Posted by Matt Jutras

I'm really confused about something here...just a small detail...

I've noticed in more than a few submissions the claim that the $37 investment gives you 20 years of membership...yet in the sales letter for The War Room it says that you get a LIFETIME membership.


Link to War Room sales page:

Warrior Forum - The "War Room" - Private Discussions

The quote I'm referring to:



Since I wrote my submission with the assumption that the membership was for life, can someone clear this up for me...if I made a mistake with my submission I'd like the chance to fix it...

I seem to recall someone saying the system only allowed 20 years but it's a lifetime membership

[MikeHumphreys]

Hey Warriors,

This contest looks like fun, so I decided to join in!

Here's my entry:

How To Become One of the Marketing Elite…

Thanks,

Mike

[Ankesh Kothari]

Here is my entry:

If You Buy Any Other Internet Marketing Educational Product Before Reading This Page... You're Stoooopid
(Because You'll Be Wasting a Lot of Money)

[4Highflyers]

No time for fancy graphics and stuff, but it's been a fun lunchtime distraction for sure ...

Attention! Special Operatives Required For Lucrative Elite Training at Our Secret War-Room Facility

Good luck with getting what you need, Allen.

Best,
Adam

[zapseo]

Happened to bump into the CURRENT copy for the War Room.

In case y'all haven't seen it in a while.

Worth reading, examining, thinking about.

Warrior Forum - The "War Room" - Private Discussions

Even Elmer can read it, since it's not one of the entries.

[laurenceh]

Also Ladies and Gents If possible I would like to use this opportunity to take any feedback offered by any copywriters and critics in regards to my effort.

First attempt at this type of sales copy so would be useful to know what I need to work on and learn.

In case you missed it the link is below.

Should you join the War Room? (Comp)

[Martin.Avis]

This was fun!

Here is my entry:

Slap ... Ouch ... Oh!

Martin

[Jagged]

OK...was a ton of fun & a big time learning experince. I'm definately a fish out of water with writing copy....

Comments & critiques welcome....(bracing myself...lol)

Get Your Head Back Into Your Business!

Thank you Allen for encouraging me with this contest to do something that is soooo out of my element...I need to do that once in a while....definately was a huge learning experience.

Good luck everyone...
Ken Perry

[eaglechick]

Excellent Allen - Thx

Just a few quick questions?

Obviously you have to be a member of the war room - does it matter if you just joined
the war room but have been a member of the warrior forum for a few months?

Is the number of posts going to count against you?

It seems like even if someone has been a member for a long time and they do'nt
post regularly some warriors feel like it is not appropriate or acceptable.

But some people just like to keep a "low profile" and some are "more sociable".

Indeed a potpourri of personalities in this very warrior forum.

Say you've written your own unique sales copy can you call in the help of a fellow
warrior to assist you with technical stuff that you do'nt have the proper knowledge
for like for exmple an : extraordinary image

Will it then disqualify you or does anything goes within limits off course!!

[Perry Bee]

How I Trained a Lazy, Incompetent, Out of Work, Cheeky Chimpanzee with Attention-Deficit Hyperactivity Disorder to Make Oodles of Money

[Asher]

Here's my other shot!

What Do You Get When You Join As A War Room Member?

I completely re-did it because I thought the words "begging"
in my first attempt wouldn't suit the Warrior Forum's WSO letter.

I like how it turned out! It's fun and I liked the little story
I threw in... heh. I don't know if it'll work well but it sure
as heck ain't something I've seen a lot (maybe there's a
very good reason... hrmm)

Unfortunately, I only can use 10 images, so I did the best
I can with it. I also "stole" a lot of stuff from the existing
letter because there's already good stuff there - might as
well use it!

I really liked how it turned out.

Hope you like it, Allen! ... and send me the $3,000 along with
it =D

A little thing... I don't know if the code for [ YOU ] still
works but if it does, I figure it's going to be a deadly
attention grabber... just like it did back when it was being
tested.

Asher

EDIT: PHEW! Good thing I made it just before I saw the message
"Sorry, the board is unavailable at the moment"... I would have
gone mad if the whole post was not saved.

[Josiah]

Dear Allen... please do not close this contest yet...

I'm still working on mine... it should be done within the next 3 days...

I will cry if you close it... seriously I will...

It's been a heap of fun so far!

Good luck to everyone!

Josiah

[Mike Murphy]

Here's my attempt...

When will NOW be the right time to join the War Room?

[SiteSeller52]

Here is my quick entry for the contest.
Hope it is up to par :-)

War Room Review - Prepare For Battle!!

[zapseo]

Originally Posted by Perry Bee

How I Trained a Lazy, Incompetent, Out of Work, Cheeky Chimpanzee with Attention-Deficit Hyperactivity Disorder to Make Oodles of Money

No No No No.

(warning: tongue-in-cheek mode on...)

not to make Oodles of Money...but to Keep Them in Cuban Cigars

(okay, back to your regular programming.)

[zapseo]

Originally Posted by Mike Murphy

Here's my attempt...

When will NOW be the right time to join the War Room?

embedded commands tend to work a whole lot better when they don't disrupt the normal flow of a sentence (and hence are picked up unconsciously, not consciously.)