Critique my new site

greenovni · 11-18-2009, 04:11 PM

I just made this website today. Disney Netpal by ASUS | 5.5 Hour Battery Life | Kids Laptop

Anything I left our or any suggestions?

AlexKei · 11-18-2009, 04:17 PM

hi "greenovni"

first of all,....you can get troubles with the Trademark "Disney" on the domain name.

I would reduce th blank space on the header.

The main image is kinf of blurry.

Besides that,...the Affiliate website is nice.

Cheers!

Alex.

P.S.: take care of that copyright and trademark infrigment and you will have no problems at all.

lightanjoy · 11-18-2009, 04:28 PM

Looks to me like you have put in lots of elements that I would have done, clickable link above the fold, coupons, hyperlinks in the content etc etc so I haven't much to add as a relative newbie ... looks nice ... looks like you have a spelling mistake (I'm an ex English teacher!) in this line:
Other Disney Netpal Accesories Available

Accessories has 2 s's .... or is this the American spelling?

davidac · 11-18-2009, 04:39 PM

I like the layout and design of the page, just worried about how disney will take to the use of their name in the domain name.

Looks good thou!

David.

Kat Bartone · 11-18-2009, 04:42 PM

As 'lightanjoy' points out, 'accessories' needs the double 's' - even in the US

Also in the US, 'and' has a 'd' in it.

Sorry, lightanjoy, just couldn't resist.

Other than that, the page looks very nice - I agree some of the top space should be removed - and also, my personal preference would be that the font would be a bit larger. The older I get, the less I like those small fonts. And remember, your audience may be lots of parents and grandparents - with eyes like mine.

If anything else jumps out at me, I'll post again.

Hope this helps,

kat

greenovni · 11-18-2009, 05:57 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by AlexKei

hi "greenovni"

first of all,....you can get troubles with the Trademark "Disney" on the domain name.

I would reduce th blank space on the header.

The main image is kinf of blurry.

Besides that,...the Affiliate website is nice.

Cheers!

Alex.

P.S.: take care of that copyright and trademark infrigment and you will have no problems at all.

Thanks Alex - I didn't think of that.. will fix it tomorrow

Quote:

Originally Posted by lightanjoy

Looks to me like you have put in lots of elements that I would have done, clickable link above the fold, coupons, hyperlinks in the content etc etc so I haven't much to add as a relative newbie ... looks nice ... looks like you have a spelling mistake (I'm an ex English teacher!) in this line:
Other Disney Netpal Accesories Available

Accessories has 2 s's .... or is this the American spelling?

Sorry about that, been awake and working on it since 4 am. Will jump on it in the morning

Quote:

Originally Posted by davidac

I like the layout and design of the page, just worried about how disney will take to the use of their name in the domain name.

Looks good thou!

David.

Thanks David - Looks like I'll have to change domain names in the morning.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Kat Bartone

As 'lightanjoy' points out, 'accessories' needs the double 's' - even in the US

Also in the US, 'and' has a 'd' in it.

Sorry, lightanjoy, just couldn't resist.

Other than that, the page looks very nice - I agree some of the top space should be removed - and also, my personal preference would be that the font would be a bit larger. The older I get, the less I like those small fonts. And remember, your audience may be lots of parents and grandparents - with eyes like mine.

If anything else jumps out at me, I'll post again.

Hope this helps,

kat

Hey Kat - Will see how it looks like with a larger font in the morning - You are right, I too am squinting

greenovni · 11-18-2009, 05:58 PM

Can also take domain name suggestions as my mind is blank on this end

Lawyer007 · 11-18-2009, 06:50 PM

I like it... I would maybe add a few images on the right-side or in the content to break it up a little bit. Most readers do not like to read content all the way across a screen

Ken Snowdon · 11-18-2009, 06:56 PM

It looks great, other than the DISNEY possible infringement, I think you have something here as all parents are concerned these days about security for child predators and other security issues. Good job.

Kat Bartone · 11-18-2009, 07:17 PM

Greenovni,

Maybe you can come up with a domain name that incorporates some keywords that people might be searching for which would lead them to the netpal.

e.g. safesurfing.* is already taken, but that's the idea.

another example, netbuddy.*, which are also gone, but a little play on netpal.

add a prefix or a suffix and you might find something.

Just a couple of quick starting points.

- Kat

greenovni · 11-18-2009, 07:20 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Lawyer007

I like it... I would maybe add a few images on the right-side or in the content to break it up a little bit. Most readers do not like to read content all the way across a screen

Thanks for the great suggestion!

Quote:

Originally Posted by Ken Snowdon

It looks great, other than the DISNEY possible infringement, I think you have something here as all parents are concerned these days about security for child predators and other security issues. Good job.

Took a ton of time to create because I build everything from scratch this morning but now I have a template so the next site should only take 2 hours.

Wonder if I can rank a .co.cc website?

Thanks for the kind words

greenovni · 11-18-2009, 07:22 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Kat Bartone

Greenovni,

Maybe you can come up with a domain name that incorporates some keywords that people might be searching for which would lead them to the netpal.

e.g. safesurfing.* is already taken, but that's the idea.

another example, netbuddy.*, which are also gone, but a little play on netpal.

add a prefix or a suffix and you might find something.

Just a couple of quick starting points.

- Kat

Thanks Kat - Gonna try to find something in the morning (I'm beat) hopefully i'll be able to figure something out by then,

greenovni · 11-19-2009, 06:43 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by agentsully

I think you should target the page titles a bit better when it comes to keywords. dont target just disney netpal itself, target some other low competition laptops

Will do some keyword research now, thanks!

Forest_Parks · 11-19-2009, 06:59 AM

Layout looks good, copyright is an issue as others have mentioned.

Also using the actual Disney logo could get you in a bit of trouble so you may be better using a product image in the header.

You probably also need some FTC pleasing disclosure somewhere saying that the links will earn you a bit of cash.

Scott Ames · 11-20-2009, 10:52 AM

It looks good. I like the Walt Disney font you used. You may or may not have trouble using the Disney name. Since you are selling Disney stuff they may not bother you, but I would get an alternate domain and site ready to go in case they do.

Actually , thinking about it, if you don't want to redo all your SEO, articles and links, you may just want to get that new name right now and forward this domain to that one.

KatyaSenina · 11-20-2009, 11:14 AM

Too be honest I felt awkward clicking the link because it ends with co.cc. Why not .COM? Anything with .info or .co.cc looks like a spyware site to me.

And some people already said it put you can get in trouble with the trademark Disney.

ps. I've clicked it :P But where is the layout?

11-18-2009, 04:11 PM	#1
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AlexKei Active Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Nov 2009 Location: Barcelona, Spain Posts: 28 Thanks: 0 Thanked 4 Times in 4 Posts Social Networking Contact Info	Re: Critique my new site hi "greenovni" first of all,....you can get troubles with the Trademark "Disney" on the domain name. I would reduce th blank space on the header. The main image is kinf of blurry. Besides that,...the Affiliate website is nice. Cheers! Alex. P.S.: take care of that copyright and trademark infrigment and you will have no problems at all.

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lightanjoy Health & IM Consultancy War Room Member Join Date: Oct 2008 Location: London UK Posts: 22 Thanks: 2 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Social Networking Contact Info	Re: Critique my new site Looks to me like you have put in lots of elements that I would have done, clickable link above the fold, coupons, hyperlinks in the content etc etc so I haven't much to add as a relative newbie ... looks nice ... looks like you have a spelling mistake (I'm an ex English teacher!) in this line: Other Disney Netpal Accesories Available Accessories has 2 s's .... or is this the American spelling?
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davidac Ironcladbyte Marketing Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Brisbane, Australia Posts: 78 Thanks: 12 Thanked 6 Times in 5 Posts Social Networking	Re: Critique my new site I like the layout and design of the page, just worried about how disney will take to the use of their name in the domain name. Looks good thou! David.

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Kat Bartone Proud Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Montague MA Posts: 1,029 Blog Entries: 1 Thanks: 117 Thanked 84 Times in 72 Posts	Re: Critique my new site As 'lightanjoy' points out, 'accessories' needs the double 's' - even in the US Also in the US, 'and' has a 'd' in it. Sorry, lightanjoy, just couldn't resist. Other than that, the page looks very nice - I agree some of the top space should be removed - and also, my personal preference would be that the font would be a bit larger. The older I get, the less I like those small fonts. And remember, your audience may be lots of parents and grandparents - with eyes like mine. If anything else jumps out at me, I'll post again. Hope this helps, kat
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Kat Bartone Proud Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Montague MA Posts: 1,029 Blog Entries: 1 Thanks: 117 Thanked 84 Times in 72 Posts	Re: Critique my new site Greenovni, Maybe you can come up with a domain name that incorporates some keywords that people might be searching for which would lead them to the netpal. e.g. safesurfing.* is already taken, but that's the idea. another example, netbuddy.*, which are also gone, but a little play on netpal. add a prefix or a suffix and you might find something. Just a couple of quick starting points. - Kat
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Forest_Parks HyperActive Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Dec 2008 Location: Cairo, Egypt Posts: 120 Thanks: 40 Thanked 24 Times in 23 Posts Social Networking	Re: Critique my new site Layout looks good, copyright is an issue as others have mentioned. Also using the actual Disney logo could get you in a bit of trouble so you may be better using a product image in the header. You probably also need some FTC pleasing disclosure somewhere saying that the links will earn you a bit of cash.

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Scott Ames Senior Warrior Member War Room Member Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: West of Rockies Posts: 5,556 Thanks: 363 Thanked 665 Times in 325 Posts	Re: Critique my new site It looks good. I like the Walt Disney font you used. You may or may not have trouble using the Disney name. Since you are selling Disney stuff they may not bother you, but I would get an alternate domain and site ready to go in case they do. Actually , thinking about it, if you don't want to redo all your SEO, articles and links, you may just want to get that new name right now and forward this domain to that one.
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KatyaSenina Advanced Warrior Join Date: Oct 2009 Location: The Netherlands Posts: 754 Thanks: 448 Thanked 126 Times in 97 Posts Social Networking	Re: Critique my new site Too be honest I felt awkward clicking the link because it ends with co.cc. Why not .COM? Anything with .info or .co.cc looks like a spyware site to me. And some people already said it put you can get in trouble with the trademark Disney. ps. I've clicked it :P But where is the layout?