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Can I get a couple of reviews for my site

by seanyd
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I built this site about a month ago....
It has so far got about 900 views but no sales can anyone tell me a better way to market it , or should I tear it down and start over ?
Any help would be much appreciated.

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  • Profile picture of the author nobodyreal
    Originally Posted by seanyd View Post

    I built this site about a month ago....
    It has so far got about 900 views but no sales can anyone tell me a better way to market it , or should I tear it down and start over ?
    Any help would be much appreciated.

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    Hey Sean, this is actually a great site layout. Other people will respond and talk about different methods for driving traffic to your site--and really, there are some very good resources out there put out by the top marketers on this issue that you should get--but I want to say something about the copy on this site.

    First off, did you pay to have someone do this copy? If so, who? Because the offer and the copy are going to determine how many conversions you get, since I think the layout is fantastic. Here are some suggested changes to the copy --

    The start up phrase "would you like to make insane amounts of money" is immediately off putting to the experienced web user. So are you targeting the experienced web user, entrepreneurially inclined person like Warrior or are you targeting the soccer mom who wants to work at home? If you answer that question, it's going to change the whole rest of your approach.

    Because your starting phrase signals to me "he's targeting the soccer mom", but then the rest of your copy is really dense, and assumes the person is familiar with concepts like MRR/PLR packages. In other words, it isn't structured in a way to get the soccer mom by using unfamiliar terminology(master resale rights, mrr/plr etc), yet it sounds too 'connish' to attract the warrior/entrepreneurial potential user. Not to mention there are basic grammatical errors like "You can also sell this entire TwitSellers' Dream package itself!" .

    So, my suggestion is to redo the copy, either yourself or outsource it to a competent Copywriter and target ONE type. This type of general copy doesn't convince either of those two types very well.

    After you redo the copy and pick which 'type' you are after, buy another web domain, transfer your website to this new domain, and now write copy targeting the other type who you didn't target in the revision. If you do this, you will be able to see which of the types is going to buy more of your product.

    Good luck! Get the valuable resources from the masters--they will answer this stuff better than we can here.
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    • Profile picture of the author nobodyreal
      Also, your copy has no testimonials. It doesn't work to establish your credibility even by citing personal success in Twitter marketing. Your offer doesn't have any form of risk reversal--even if it's a pseudo-risk reversal like customer support(sometimes this can substitute for real risk reversal). There are a ton of mistakes with your copy, and no matter how good you get your website or how much traffic you can get directed to it, with that copy(and offer) you aren't going to sell very much.
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  • Profile picture of the author seanyd
    I would say its more targeted to the "soccer mum" type , so I will take your points on board and look to see if I can redo the copy to be more targeted to this customer
    Thanks
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    • Profile picture of the author nobodyreal
      Originally Posted by seanyd View Post

      I would say its more targeted to the "soccer mum" type , so I will take your points on board and look to see if I can redo the copy to be more targeted to this customer
      Thanks
      sean

      Good, if you do that you'll see a lot more results man. Good luck to you, sorry for sounding harsh, for some reason my posts always come off that way.

      Also--you want to see a great example of copy targeting soccer moms? Check out the "Google work at home" advertisements that pop up whenever you are browsing the web. They are PERFECT examples of copy geared toward that soccer mom type. In fact, it's some of the best copy for many other reasons too. Next time you see that advertisement, ask yourself "What can I learn from this" and then after studying it, go re-write your page and it will have a much more natural, unified flow to it and you'll get sales.
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  • Profile picture of the author SparowHawk
    Hi!
    I have a website as well and if is possible iwould like to have some reviews on it! I would like to get some feedback
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  • Profile picture of the author SparowHawk
    The website is www,sparowhawk,com! Sorry but i can not put links at the moment i'm a newbie
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    • Profile picture of the author seanyd
      Originally Posted by SparowHawk View Post

      The website is www,sparowhawk,com! Sorry but i can not put links at the moment i'm a newbie
      I think you need more content on you site than just google adsense .
      I think people would be put off because every page is just links to other sites selling something.
      When I clicked a couple of your links I thought I was going to learn something about birds not be redirected to another site.
      I am no expert so maybe someone else will have a differtent view
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    • Profile picture of the author nobodyreal
      Originally Posted by SparowHawk View Post

      The website is www,sparowhawk,com! Sorry but i can not put links at the moment i'm a newbie
      Woah... dude, if you are serious about making money, you need to redo that site layout. It looks like someone built it with yahoo page builder.

      Really, if you are serious about making money at this, WHY NOT LEARN FROM THE MASTERS? This forum is no substitute for the type of information products that are out there. Do you know all I said to the above poster about his website and his copy etc? That information is about 1/50th of what he would get if he got a hold of John Reese's Traffic Secrets 2.0 or Dan Kennedy's stuff on copy writing.

      I just think that you guys must not be serious. If you don't have the money to get the products, then you better find a way to get the information necessary--since it's evident that you don't know what's going on.

      Sorry for being harsh, but that's the truth. I could tear apart this site in layout and in copy giving very specific examples, but it would be more profitable for you to get a hold of some good material.

      Hope that helps,
      -Andy
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  • Profile picture of the author sbucciarel
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    I checked it out. I live in the country and am on dialup. So I'm instantly greeted with your opt-in box and am still waiting for it to load so I can get rid of it. I don't opt-in until I see a website and you have given me a good reason to give you my email address. So far, I've waited for over 5 minutes for some sort of a button to get rid of the opt-in box and the site is still hanging with no button to get rid of it. So I'm out of there.
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    • Profile picture of the author SparowHawk
      Is it my website?
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    • Profile picture of the author seanyd
      Originally Posted by sbucciarel View Post

      I checked it out. I live in the country and am on dialup. So I'm instantly greeted with your opt-in box and am still waiting for it to load so I can get rid of it. I don't opt-in until I see a website and you have given me a good reason to give you my email address. So far, I've waited for over 5 minutes for some sort of a button to get rid of the opt-in box and the site is still hanging with no button to get rid of it. So I'm out of there.
      Hi their is an exit button on the opt in box , x in the top right hand corner of the box.
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      • Profile picture of the author sbucciarel
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        Originally Posted by seanyd View Post

        Hi their is an exit button on the opt in box , x in the top right hand corner of the box.
        It never loaded for me. Just hung there, so had no choice but to close the page.
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  • Profile picture of the author SparowHawk
    Actually most of the products on the site are my plr products! And each has separate website!
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    • Profile picture of the author seanyd
      Originally Posted by SparowHawk View Post

      Actually most of the products on the site are my plr products! And each has separate website!
      Sorry but that is the first impression I got.
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  • Profile picture of the author SparowHawk
    Thats Fine! Thanks for that! As I said I;m still newbie in this and this is my first website what i did my own!
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