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Need constructive criticism please. This is not a sales pitch

by kimkitch
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Can somebody please take a look at the first video I have just produced for You Tube. I think it looks quite good (but I am biased).
As an avid user of this forum (probably too much, should really get down to some work), i have learnt to trust and respect the comments of fellow warriors.

you can find my video here.


Thanks in advance

Kim
#constructive #criticism #pitch #sales
  • Profile picture of the author spearce000
    For a first effort, it's not too bad. A few things I'd change, though:

    First of all, I think this needs an audio track. Something fast paced and urgent would be my choice. Secondly, I'd make the pictures bigger so they fill the screen, and have white text on top of the picture for more impact. Finally, I'd ditch the white square for the text slides, make the blue background full screen with white text as it would stand out better.

    Hope this helps.
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    • Profile picture of the author kimkitch
      Originally Posted by spearce000 View Post

      For a first effort, it's not too bad. A few things I'd change, though:

      First of all, I think this needs an audio track. Something fast paced and urgent would be my choice. Secondly, I'd make the pictures bigger so they fill the screen, and have white text on top of the picture for more impact. Finally, I'd ditch the white square for the text slides, make the blue background full screen with white text as it would stand out better.

      Hope this helps.
      Thanks for the answer this is just the type of feedback that i am looking for

      Regards

      Kim
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  • Profile picture of the author travlinguy
    I agree that audio would help. But make it different than your captions and space the audio and captions so they don't overlap. That will give the reader time to digest each.

    You also need punctuation for your captions. You have several questions without question marks. Some of it is awkward.

    Overall, a decent effort. Good luck.
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