I am not fluent in English, but I dare to fail.
Below are two videos, that I recorded to insert into sales letter.
Please comment, how can I improve.
The first video is spontaneous, the second video is transcripted first.
(I tested the first one into my sales letter, it make visitor stay longer than before. Will it be good sign or not? )
1. for EASqueeze.com
2. embed on fbmaniax.com
Other than video quality and sound, how can I improve and make it better?
One thing I realize is, my tone isn't "selling" tone.
Thanks
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