My First Squeeze landing page

thanks for the comments, opinion will change it

Cheers
Vasilis

Hi:
You should have the optin box much higher on the page. People may not want to scroll down to see it. You should be able to determine the country from the IP address, so you can delete this information. Too much information is currently being required

And if my 2 cents worth is anything I reckon the headers too big and eye catching and I'm being distracted from the headline under. You could easily make a video with loads more images of such a nice place but take up less space for the eyes. You can also use the video to guide them to the sign up box which again should be above the fold and as little info as you can get. That's why CPA offers that require lots of info get higher payouts than a simple name and email, it's because they're filled out less. You could always give them a small survey once they're signed up. Either way don't be disheartened you're on the right tracks and at least you're taking action.

Hey guys!
just made a small change on the page. what do you think of the changes now?

maybe you the warriors with experience on similar pages could design 1 page each and i could add it on Google Website Optimizer experiment.

1 template per warrior
Max 5 templates

Also i am open to pricing per template and to make it even better. the Winning template with the most conversion (results provided by Google website Optimizer) will be given an extra $150

PS. i have seen on various threads that similar templates are charged $20 each (for a none Video page). let me know your thoughts about it. :-)

Hi Buzz,

I really like the heading, it really sets a nice tone. It makes me want to go to Greece... I htink you should put a bit more copy though as it appears top heavy. As a new visitor I'd check out the header, think "ah, Greece, tell me more..." and then have nothing to read. Looking forward to seeing it again.

Best wishes

Neil

Your updated landing pages certainly looks much better now!

However, one more thing you might want to add - And that is, an anti-spam policy... You may wish to include a statement to assure people who sign up that their personal details will be kept private and confidential and will not be spammed. - By stating this will give more confidence to people to want to part with their personal information...

Hope this helps!


Cheers
Jun Yuan

The headline is very weak... And the image at the top should be changed because from that image it generates a feeling of Greece being empty, no one there. There is absolutely no point to the image at all.

In your headline you need to capture attention not bore me off the page. I didn't even know you were giving away a chance to win a free trip because I stopped reading after a few words of the headline.

Some possible attention getting headlines...

"Go To Greece FREE!"
"Win A Greece Vacation!"
"How To Win A Trip To Greece!"
"FREE TRIP TO GREECE!"
"FREE 2 Week All Inclusive Greek Vacation!"

Are you really giving away a free vacation or are you just saying this?

Vasilis
I read all the feedback you got so far and I was impressed! I am an offline copywriter and I say you did an amazing job! Perhaps, as others have said, to move your capture box up into the upper fold. Here's what I suggest: Move the body of your sales message to the left and place the capture box just beside those bullets points on the right. So the reader will see your bullets on the left and your capture box on the right.
More than 80% of communication is NOT with the use of words Images are extremely powerful if you want to create 'pull'. You can use a better image than the one you got. Think of those romantic old European locations that people go to Europe for - you may not like them but your readers do. After all, isn't that what writing a sales letter (or be it a Squeeze page) all about? Don't be afraid to split the header image into 3 pictures.
Just my view
Byrt

What ever is the outcome of your page, you must show that outcome in the form of a
photograph ....... the photo should show the end result. Pleasure, contentment,
achievement ...... in other words, where they end up at after they buy your
product.

Hi Vasilis,

just looked over your page (don't know if it's your latest version as I got some loading errors..) and the first thing I get in my mind after viewing it:

THIS PAGE WAS NOT DONE BY A PROFESSIONAL!

Then next question comes up:

WILL THAT WHAT I GET IF I ENTER MY DATA ALSO BE ON THE SAME LEVEL?

and then:

So why should I waste my time and enter my Name and email here?

Remember: You have only one chance that people trust you on your page.

But don't worry, I would change a few things:

*Header Graphics: not enough power to impress me, looks like 'ok I took this from one of my big free graphics packages (10000 images for 9.99$) '. You can get so many good and unique graphics today by asking people who are putting their graphics into the internet, e.g. flickr(dot)com or even buy a great image for 1-5$ for example at fotolia(dot)com.

I would recommend to look for images with some elements of: landscape // great buildings // beach // party // happy people // Sunset

*Background color: On this one page you use 3 diff. Colors (white,yellow,brown). Too much, looks not smooth enough. Sometimes using only white helps much. Or take white and one add. color like an almost white-yellow.

*2. Text-block: This 3 red line with this lost small red dot before are not strong enough. As someone before said, get them darker, get them bigger/stronger and put them on one side, not centered.

I wouldn't use centering text, as it's better for the eyes to have a left borderline-Column from there the text-line starts.

*The animated Sign has an white background (no transparency) on this light brown background. Never do this, typically newbie bug...

*Take a nice graphic and exchange this ordinary gray Order-Button. Use a short commando like: 'Get it' Or 'FREE Newsletter'

*Way too much footer-Msg's and why 3 colors again?
If you really need this amount of information there then take a light-grey color, so it's not so massive then.

Hope this helped a little bit..:rolleyes:

Cu
Tobias

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CU
Tobias