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My Sales Page - Any Comments?

by RRicart
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Hello Everyone,

I just created a sales page for a membership site that I have been running for the past 2 years - I was wondering if I can get any feedback on the sales page - on wording - any recommendations on re-wording the sales page - I just feel its in need of some work so I would love to feedback from more experienced folks in this area...

I may be interested in hiring some help on sales and design of hte page so if some folks in that niche read this, please pm me...and let me know what your $$$ range is...

the web address is: MYSANTERIA COMMUNTIY | PAGAN AND ATR COMMUNITY
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  • Profile picture of the author steve m
    Where it says members testimoniuls, it all looks a bit mumbled up. where your videos are some of the text is all sort of merging if that makes any sense, over lapping. maybe its my browser. can anyone else notice?
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    • Profile picture of the author Devan Koshal
      probably get a better response posting this in the copywriting part of this forum.
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  • Profile picture of the author zackriley
    Hi,

    I took a look at your site and noticed that several of the image and text were overlapping. Also your opt-in box is at the very bottom of the page and may not get noticed.

    -Zack.
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  • Profile picture of the author Eric Stanley
    On my end, using Firefox 3.. the text is way off and alot of the elements (CSS?) are jumbled.. may want to do a cross browser check
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  • Profile picture of the author steve m
    I thought it looked funny. Thought I was going mad for a second.
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  • Profile picture of the author Jared Alberghini
    It looks very confusing to me... I didn't know what the heck I was looking at until I scrolled to the red headline stuff that actually explained it....

    - Jared
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    • Profile picture of the author RRicart
      Originally Posted by webdesignhq View Post

      It looks very confusing to me... I didn't know what the heck I was looking at until I scrolled to the red headline stuff that actually explained it....

      - Jared
      Hi Jared,

      Why is it confusing to you?
      If its becaused you didnt understand the keywords in the headline - thats probably why - unless you follow that Niche you wont understand those terms because im targeting a specific type of folks...not the general market....

      Let me know your thoughts.

      Thanks!
      Ruben
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  • Profile picture of the author Ebbi
    The structure is way off to begin with!
    Close the table to 750 pixel, that should make people have a
    better chance of actually getting through your letter.

    Also try different colors and make sure the text isn't going
    under you youtube videos.

    The popup optin box also is not correct setup.

    Ebbi
    p.s. I'm using Google Chrome
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    • Profile picture of the author Ralf Skirr
      The layout is totally screwed in Firefox 3. You need fix this first before you care about the sales copy.

      At first glance I would make the header are much smaller, so that the actual content and headline become visible. Right now there's too little content above the fold.

      Ralf
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  • Profile picture of the author radicals
    The heading looks like clickable links or a menu:

    "Santeria | Candomble | 21 Division | Espiritismo | Vodou | Quimbanda | Umbanda | Xango |Voodoo"

    I have tested it with IE6, and get the same result as the previous posts (text behind videos)

    I hope this helps.
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  • Profile picture of the author RRicart
    Okay - so I fixed the page - new design, new color, added a blog section etc....let me know how you feel now. Its better than the previous version..

    Mysanteria - A Santeria and African Traditional Religion Blog About
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  • Profile picture of the author KimBeckers
    Hi,

    There still seems to be something wrong with your pop up box for the newsletter as it appears on the bottom of the page and not as a pop up.

    There also is not a lot of content that is making it before the fold. You have made the text of the head line smaller but it is still taking up a lot of space.

    I would also get rid of the Google Ads at the top of the page.

    Just my 2 cents.

    Kim
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