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what do you think of my site?

by Matthewgen
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i am a newbie to IM and just want to make sure that i am heading in the right direction or not and any advice will be helpful, and i been reading things of this forum for the last 4 days (like everything)
www . mind zoom review . org
#newbie #site
  • Profile picture of the author GoogleWarrior
    Wow. Pretty good website.
    What kind of traffic do you get?
    Have you made any affiliate sales yet?
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  • Profile picture of the author alcymart
    Sorry, your Ad copy is terrible

    For starters, get the word Scam and "waste" out of Headline!


    Good Words
    vital, understand, right, you, results, proven, health, truth, safety, security, easy, comfort, advantage, guarantee, fun, proud, positive, money, profit, benefits, deserve, save, happy, new, trust, love, value, discovery

    The Not So Good:

    failure, obligation, scam, cost, try, pay, deal, contract, sign, worry, loss, lose, hurt, buy, sold, death, bad, sell, price, decision, waste, hard, difficult, liable, fail, liability.


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  • Profile picture of the author Bradley J Anderson
    I counted the use of 'mind zoom' 31 times on that one page. You might get 'accused' of keyword stuffing by the bots.

    I'm not sure how other people feel about this, but when I see this on a page:

    i always give my most honest and true reviews.

    If you are looking for an honest review...
    ...especially twice, I wonder how honest it really is. It's like your trying to put that thought into my head for me for some reason. Let me read through the review myself and come to my own conclusion, please.

    Sometimes you use 'I' and sometimes you use 'i'. It's always 'I'.

    You said that you would be discussing the good and bad points of the software in the sake of fairness, but the only 'bad' thing you mentioned is that you wouldn't notice results for a few days. First, I don't think that would be a 'fault' of the software, and I really don't think many people would expect their lives to change with only a single listen, anyway. If you point out a real weakness or two, it will make your review sound more honest.

    I've said many times I'm not a big fan of plain-vanilla sites, but a lot of people disagree with me on that point. That one is up to you to decide for yourself.

    Also, your writing skills need some improving. Either get a friend to proofread your work, or hire a pro to rewrite it for you. If funds are an issue, I'm sure you could find someone on Fiverrr to proofread and edit it for you.

    Lastly, I would make the ads in the sidebar related products. I doubt many people looking specifically for subliminal message software would be interested in Recipe Secrets or driver update software.

    All in all, though, you've got a great start. It sounds like a very interesting piece of software. I even went to have a look at it myself.
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    • Profile picture of the author Enfusia
      Sorry If I conflict with anyone but here's what I see:\

      Take all the negative junk words out of your copy and especially your headline. If I saw that I would just hit the back button.

      You have no meta description for your primary key word and you have not bolded, italicized or underlined your primary key word.

      On your actual post page your KW density is only 2.2% so I don't see it as KW stuffing. However on your home page I would tome that down a bit.

      I think your home page does not give me a clear path as to what you want me to do. You have other unrelated products that I would have no interest in and so would confuse my purpose.

      Plain jane works and sells ok, but the site could be a bit more pleasing to the eye (that's an opinion) plain sites do sell well so take that with a grain of salt.

      That's what I see.
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  • Profile picture of the author Matthewgen
    thanks guys I updated it, and got rid of the scam words and waste of money, i change the bad things about it. and fixed all the (I)s, I really needed this, this is my first review site and I just want it to be the best it can be.
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  • Profile picture of the author Bradley J Anderson
    Sent you a PM, Matthewgen. Hope you find it useful. BTW, if you've only been reading for 4 days, and then set your site up that quickly based on what you learned, you're doing an awesome job already. Good luck to you.
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  • Profile picture of the author algarve
    well your mor up than me I did not even know what IM was let alone SEO and still not sure but this forum is full of great people with plenty of help
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    • Profile picture of the author Iqball
      hi mathewgen,

      Honest opinion not bad design. Clarity is great. Just break up your
      paragraphs a bit. As people tend to scan on the web rather than read
      in depthly. Hope this helps! B-)
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  • Profile picture of the author Matthewgen
    I took you advice Bradley J Anderson that you sent a PM to me. and I just have one more question should I keep the sentance: (This is a unofficial review so I am going to be going into both the good and the bad points of the software.) in or take it out. in your reworded version you took it out. can I ask why? I am trying to capture the readers so they do not hit the back button in 10 secs, which is a known thing to happen. I am going on 5 days of reading the forums and I am a quick learner, but more important I learn from doing things, that is why I didn't hesitate to start the website up. thanks everyone that posted advice on this tread as well.
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    • Profile picture of the author Bradley J Anderson
      Originally Posted by Matthewgen View Post

      I took you advice Bradley J Anderson that you sent a PM to me. and I just have one more question should I keep the sentance: (This is a unofficial review so I am going to be going into both the good and the bad points of the software.) in or take it out. in your reworded version you took it out. can I ask why? I am trying to capture the readers so they do not hit the back button in 10 secs, which is a known thing to happen. I am going on 5 days of reading the forums and I am a quick learner, but more important I learn from doing things, that is why I didn't hesitate to start the website up. thanks everyone that posted advice on this tread as well.
      The reason I took it out is because I didn't see where you listed any negatives. If you're talking about the fact that it took a week to notice results, rather than instantaneous, then I personally don't see that as a 'negative'. I think most people would already assume that it would have to be used over a period of time, so a week is actually pretty darn fast, which is actually another positive.

      Bottom line, though, is that it's your website, so if you feel more comfortable adding it in, then by all means do so. I'm not sure why you would think that particular sentence would keep your readers from hitting the back button, though.

      If you think it's important to note to your readers, then somewhere toward the end you might want to say something like: "Ordinarily I also include negative aspects of the product in my review, as well, but with MindZoom I really haven't found any. blah blah blah..."
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  • Profile picture of the author Brantley
    Nice looking site!!!...is it a sniper site?

    If your targeting the right keywords, you should make some sales.

    The main thing is, you've taken "ACTION", you keep progressing forward
    and you will see success, if you haven't already.
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  • Profile picture of the author Matthewgen
    I just updated the header and took out scam and waste of money, but when I do a search on google it stills says the old description, does it take couple of days for google to change it? or do I have to do something for it to change? and yes it is a sniper site.
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    • Profile picture of the author spectrefax
      Originally Posted by Matthewgen View Post

      I just updated the header and took out scam and waste of money, but when I do a search on google it stills says the old description, does it take couple of days for google to change it? or do I have to do something for it to change? and yes it is a sniper site.
      I believe you are seeing the cached version still listed on google. They will update that automatically at some point.
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  • Profile picture of the author carcrazy
    I think your site is really nice. I can't believe you just started.
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