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Having spent hours, no months reading and watching WF stars I have my FIRST sales page and would appreciate comments and advice from the money making copy writing gurus here...thank you for your time!!!

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  • Profile picture of the author tomcam
    Congrats for taking action! So few do. However, it won't work if you expect Google or any other search engine to find it. The articles are all graphics. Search engines don't read graphics very well. Also, those articles should be in multiple pages with meta tags, titles, and headings optimized for each subject. This will give you a much more organized site with far more search engine reach.

    My best wishes on your new journey.
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  • Profile picture of the author Michael Meaney
    It's a great start man..


    You could also try split testing some copy.. arranged in this order..
    • Main headline needs a promise / attention grabbing statement
    • Bring attention to the problem you're solving
    • Provide your solution
    • Show what qualifies you to help them
    • List the benefits
    • Provide testimonials / social proof
    • Present your offer
    • Add genuine scarcity
    • Provide a guarantee
    • Remind them what will happen if they don't purchase
    That's what I'd do anyway, works for me and it might work for you. It might not... but test, test and test some more it and tweak as you need to. Good luck to ya.
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  • Profile picture of the author travlinguy
    Detach yourself and look at your page. Ask yourself where the compelling reason to stay and find out more is. There isn't one. First you need to get a headline that screams benefits. Benefits appeal to emotion.

    People challenged with excess cellulite want certain things. They want to look better. They want to feel healthier. They want to be attractive or sexy. They might even want to lose the cellulite to impress someone.

    Speak to those issues and you're speaking to your potential clients. Until you do you're going to have disappointing results. Don’t count on the video to do much for you because without first grabbing your visitor’s attention many won’t bother to even look at it. Good luck.
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  • Profile picture of the author Karen Barr
    One thing I would definitely add is some before and after photos. People shopping for beauty/weight loss products LOVE those.
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