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Your landing page is too 70's looking. I suggest you check out WSO for better updated templates plus don't waste your time building a page just for those cb products. You should concentrate on more how to get the buyer first.

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- freetraff 15 years ago
  
  This is the best page I have ever seen, because I have nothing bad to say about it - because I do not see it, he-he.
  
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  Who or what are you talking to/about?
  
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Vince Runza Online

15 years ago

What good is looking sexy if you don't get seen? Where's the URL?

Oh, is this one of those websites in Google's Witness Protection Program?!

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Kevin Riley 15 years ago

Originally Posted by Vince Runza Online

What good is looking sexy if you don't get seen? Where's the URL?

Oh, is this one of those websites in Google's Witness Protection Program?!

You want sexy? I got more mankini photos.
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- Louis Raven 15 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by Kevin Riley
  
  You want sexy? I got more mankini photos.
  
  For goodness sake not again!!
  
  My eyes are still sore from last year
  
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Daniel Scott

15 years ago

Is sexy Japanese for "Oh my God it's burning my retinas"?

-Dan

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globalpro

15 years ago

I think your page is the best I have 'never' seen.

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PS Sorry, I couldn't resist.

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Scott Ames 15 years ago

Originally Posted by globalpro

I think your page is the best I have 'never' seen.

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John

PS Sorry, I couldn't resist.

LOL!!!! made me really laugh out loud.
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WinsonYeung

15 years ago

I'm SORRY GUYZ !!! I have forget to paste my url
here is the website Advanced Weight Loss Formula - Lose 9 Pounds Every 11 Days With This Ultimate Weight Loss Formula

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WinsonYeung

15 years ago

I'm SORRY GUYZ !!! I have forget to paste my url
here is the website Advanced Weight Loss Formula - Lose 9 Pounds Every 11 Days With This Ultimate Weight Loss Formula

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Daniel Scott

15 years ago

A landing or "squeeze" page, by its very nature, is supposed to be short. Yours is long as all hell.

Try making the signup box fit above the fold, and then maybe have a few short, powerful bullet points. Curiosity is key here.

-Dan

P.S. what is the current on converting at?

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WinsonYeung

15 years ago

Currently the conversion is real bad
286 visit and i only gotten 11 leads.

By the way, what do you mean by "making the signup box fit above the fold" ?

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Asher 15 years ago

Originally Posted by WinsonYeung

By the way, what do you mean by "making the signup box fit above the fold" ?

Above the fold means to have your sign up box
higher up on top before selling to people on this
sales page.

Just put one up on top and one at the bottom
for those who have read through the whole thing.

Asher
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Floyd Fisher 15 years ago

Originally Posted by WinsonYeung

Currently the conversion is real bad
286 visit and i only gotten 11 leads.

By the way, what do you mean by "making the signup box fit above the fold" ?

When I first open the page in my browser, I should be able to see the signup form without any scrolling.

Yeah, you need do that. Just put one in right below the headline, and see if you can shrink your header graphics down a little so it will fit.
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Steve Iser

15 years ago

The syntax reminds me of Hostler copy - was this part of his Renegade package?

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WinsonYeung 15 years ago

Originally Posted by Steve Iser

The syntax reminds me of Hostler copy - was this part of his Renegade package?

Hmmm, sorry but what's that ?
anyway guyz, i have just shorten the length of my squeeze page. Please review again
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Stephen Saha

15 years ago

Hi Winson,

Its not tat sexy, but going by the subject it can be made a real hot stuff!
I think you need a custom template which is more contemporary and attractive.

If you need any graphics help send me a PM.

All the best!

Stephen

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WinsonYeung

15 years ago

Originally Posted by mawardee

how about just remove all items / paragraph after or below the
opt-in form?
What you do is just make it seems longer, and besides, put
it at the end of page
is the best place (& people love to scroll down
until the end of the bottom!), as people will easily found it.

I see that all things above the opt-in form are already
enough to convince people.
Plus please make sure your opt-in form looking a little more larger,
with a box line surrounding the opt-in form.
Add with some attractive graphics on it, is an optional.

Believe me, it'll work!

I see, any example of opt-in form that I'm able to take a look at ?

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Chris Keith

15 years ago

I would change the background color to something other than just white...

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Mike Hill

15 years ago

Winson,

Why is the terms of service link on your site advancedweightlossformula.com point to Christopher Lee's FATLOSSQUEST.COM ..?

Mike Hill

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Christian Fox

15 years ago

Originally Posted by WinsonYeung

Hey guyz,
I have started out on the weight loss niche and promoting fat loss 4 idiots from clickbank.
I have created my landing page/seqeeze page and i need recommendation on it.

Please suggest any form of recommendation,

www.advancedweightlossformula.com

Thanks in advance ,
Winson

P.S Happy new year to all warriors !

As a bodybuilder, your header turns me off immediately. From Fat to Flat in 11 days is impossible. I may not be typical but that to me is completely unrealistic...

By 'above the fold' they are telling you your viewers need to see your opt in without having to scroll down. I would shorten and tighten it up a bit. You are not trying to sell them here. Build enough interest to get an email, sell them on your sales page.

Work on a unique USP, something unlike the 10,000 other weight loss information products. Just my 2c.

Although your headline and subhead fonts are not typical, I like them.

The rest looks fine, and is good information IMO.