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need your suggestions about my sales page !

by TheKing
9 replies
Hello

I created this sales page ,,
I know you guys have lot of experience in this and want to know what i m missing in it and on what things i should concentrate ?

Thanks for your help
#page #sales #suggestions
  • Profile picture of the author ChristopherTheron
    It is lacking content. I would add some more content that informs people about what they are buying, why they should buy it, and why to buy it from you. What qualifications make you different? Any testimonials? I would also have it edited and formatted. Hope this helps!
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    • Profile picture of the author AWill
      Here are my thoughts:

      1. Choose a different Wordpress theme that looks more like a business front page. Themeforest has just about the best themes available and at most they're $35.

      2. I do like your graphics.

      3. Make your services pages "pages" instead of "posts". Disable comments in all pages through the WP control panel. (You want your business services pages to look like static HTML pages, not like a blog.) Having your services look like blog posts does not look professional.

      Note: Go look at your competition and see what they're doing as far as site design and layout. That'll give you an indication of what customers expect to see and what you're up against.

      4. Content. You need more details and content. Some of your pages are almost blank. Clearly define each service and stress it's unique benefits in your content. Your services pages need to answer the questions "What's in it for me?", "Why you and not the other guy?", What exactly do i get with this service?".

      5. Consider a master pricing table / rate sheet page. Or, if you just have one package, a page that shows the cost and an enticing bulleted list of what you get for the money.

      6. There are some grammatical errors that you should get looked at by an editor. Get rid of the "powered by Wordpress line" in the footer. Rename "Blogroll" in the sub footer to "Services".

      7. Have a blog. A separate link on the main nav for your blog will allow you to put up relevant information and useful tidbits for your potential customers. It will show them that, aside from the services pages, you really are an expert and can help them. It will also provide more opportunities to get picked up in the search engines.

      8. Suggestion: An about page that talks about your company helps build credibility, as does a real phone number and street address. If you don't have a physical location, it's OK... just make sure your about page is good. Also, don't forget to add a portfolio/case studies page once you have a few customers. That'll also add to your credibility.

      I hope that helps! Please feel free to PM me if you have any specific questions or want more info on any of this.
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      • Profile picture of the author eWebCats
        Wow, Awill has hit every target. I can't really improve on most of his comments, except for #6. Oh, Awill is right, but you really need a real live living editor. Not a software program. Your spacing and use of periods, commas, etc. is so far off the mark that if I were a company looking for the services you're offering, I would click right off. I would think, "How is someone who can't even structure a proper sentence going to help me."
        Head on over to fiver and enter editor in the search box. For $5 you can't beat it.
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  • Profile picture of the author christopher jon
    Choose a different Wordpress theme that looks more like a business front page. Themeforest has just about the best themes available and at most they're $35.
    Funny, since the site is using this theme

    Now, why did somebody remove the author meta from the CSS? I guess we'll never know.
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  • Profile picture of the author AWill
    Good find. He already knows about themeforest, which is great. But my statement about finding a better theme for what he's doing still stands. The theme he has is not a bad one, I just don't believe it is a good fit for his business type.
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  • Profile picture of the author scrofford
    Originally Posted by punjabi View Post

    Hello

    I created this sales page ,,
    I know you guys have lot of experience in this and want to know what i m missing in it and on what things i should concentrate ?

    Thanks for your help
    It's NOT a sales page. It's a blog. Big difference! Yes I realize you are trying to sell something on that page, but I think you need to either learn how to copywrite or hire a professional.

    There isn't enough content and there isn't any real eye catching reason to stay on the main page. You also have some distractions on top to where someone could click away from the page they are on. Then they probably would never come back. Just my 2 cents.
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  • Profile picture of the author learn
    When you use periods (fullstops), commas, questions marks they should be beside the word. There should be no spacing. You mention that you create "Graphics" which I assume are Banners. Some Banners/Graphics include text on them; right? Your site is like your resume. You want it to be correct.

    Also, your site says "for just a little piece of work ? you are simply throwing...." There should be no question mark beside the word "work." Plus, the wording doesn't seem correct.

    Also, you mention your skills. You should have some examples on your site beside each skill listed if possible. Beside "Graphics work" >> give an example of a graphic.
    Beside "Programming work" give an example of a simple script you've written.

    Just my opinions.
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    • Profile picture of the author Jolia
      Originally Posted by learn View Post

      When you use periods (fullstops), commas, questions marks they should be beside the word. There should be no spacing. You mention that you create "Graphics" which I assume are Banners. Some Banners/Graphics include text on them; right? Your site is like your resume. You want it to be correct.

      Also, your site says "for just a little piece of work ? you are simply throwing...." There should be no question mark beside the word "work." Plus, the wording doesn't seem correct.

      Also, you mention your skills. You should have some examples on your site beside each skill listed if possible. Beside "Graphics work" >> give an example of a graphic.
      Beside "Programming work" give an example of a simple script you've written.

      Just my opinions.

      I agree with learn's opinion and evaluation. It is very important that we observe correct usage of English grammar, spacing with punctuation, periods, ellipsis marks, commas, semicolons, colons, question marks, exclamation points, quotation marks, parentheses, apostrophes, hyphens, dashes etc. if we create our website.

      I would also suggest that you try to change the theme you're using or try to adjust and reduce the pixel size of the theme.
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  • Profile picture of the author John Galt
    Here's a few tips:

    * Revamp the design. Most of your above-the-fold real estate is being wasted.
    * You need a headline. "AllTineSEO" and "Website Management" don't count.
    * Too many exit points. Get rid of all the links except the Buy Now button.
    * You need benefits. "we can do it for you" and "more special" don't count.
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