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Could you Critique my Website before I release it on Clickbank

by GoogleWarrior
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Hi.

I have been working on this Ebook for a few years.

The ebook I finished many years ago...

but it has taken me forever to learn how to make a

nice looking sales page.

So, if you wouldn't mind taking a look

and let me know what things need a touch up.

http://eslclassroomgames.com
#clickbank #critique #release #website
  • Profile picture of the author travlinguy
    I'm not sure what this is but it's not a sales page. I clicked on the link and after three minutes it still hadn't loaded. You have no headline. You have a bunch of images with brief little messages that don't make much sense.

    You have a video right up front but don't even give the visitor a clue as to why they should view it. There is nothing on the page that even hints to what it's about. My intention is not to be cruel, just honest. I'd suggest you hire a copywriter.
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    • Profile picture of the author David Keith
      the page is way to heavy (is too big from a file size perspective). i have a fast connection, and it never fully loaded after waiting way longer than your average visitor will.

      who is your site hosted with? if your on a shared server that may be part of your trouble.
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    • Profile picture of the author JoshTara
      all the boxes at the top half of the page with writing in them make the page take forever to load, i would probably give up if i was acctually looking for info or to buy something. the video at the top loops the same thing 2 time, why does someone need to see it 2 times. i guess you assume most people who end up here know what ESL is because you dont mention that anywhere.
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  • Profile picture of the author WritingSource
    The page loaded up quite fast for me. I'm not digging the video at the forefront of the page. Tell us what it is you are selling near the top of the page. I think there's far too much going on this page, I'd say make it shorter.
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    • Profile picture of the author danols
      Don't want to be harsh on you but my quick feedback is:
      * its is very long
      * takes forever to load
      * feels like i am reading a long powerpoint (which is not a good thing)

      suggestions:
      * don't do powerpoint pictures in 1st half of page, do standard text flow instead
      * reduce image size, each simple powerpoint picture is >500kb

      i liked the 2nd part of the page just try and firm up 1st half

      my 2cents

      good luck
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  • Profile picture of the author Don Calizo
    the header is horrible, just remove it
    Too many images, just use plain text!!
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    • Profile picture of the author GoogleWarrior
      Yes... I have a professional redoing the header.

      I had noticed this before, too.

      Because I made the header myself.

      But, yes, it looks like shiat.
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  • Profile picture of the author TiffLee
    I'm confused.

    Are you putting this website on ClickBank.

    ... or selling it?

    http://www.warriorforum.com/main-int...ll-flippa.html

    Additionally, we've already had this thread twice before. I knew I had ran across it once -- but, after viewing your posting history, found it yet again before I was even a member.

    http://www.warriorforum.com/copywrit...ales-page.html

    http://www.warriorforum.com/main-int...clickbank.html

    ... I may not be looking hard enough, but it would seem that hardly nothing has changed on your site after many Warriors gave you solid advice in both previous threads.

    Not trying to be snippy, but am curious was to why you've posted this three times now without taking action either of the previous two?





    Originally Posted by GoogleWarrior View Post

    Hi.

    I have been working on this Ebook for a few years.

    The ebook I finished many years ago...

    but it has taken me forever to learn how to make a

    nice looking sales page.

    So, if you wouldn't mind taking a look

    and let me know what things need a touch up.

    ESL Games: ESL Games which will help you make more money!
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    • Profile picture of the author GoogleWarrior
      I have made changes....

      Small changes will eventually get me to where I want to be.

      What is your website? I am just curious to see it....
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  • Profile picture of the author MrWonton
    My iPad gave up trying tO load the page half way through. It really is huge!
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