Just Finalized my Squeeze Page - What do you think?

Welcome to the forum.

That won't help you, Rassan, because you can't reply to private messages yourself (only receive them) - you haven't made enough posts. Your best bet is just to spell it out something like "www . mysite . com" in non-clickable form, and let people take the spaces out for themselves, or whatever.

hey buddy, thanks for the tip - I appreciate it - I just don't want to get kicked off of here before I even got started, lol.

here is the spaced out URL:

www - top - online - reviews . com / recession proof income

thanks, and let me know if you can view/see it!

it's not working

LOL its ok. I wouldn't sign up, but others might. You might want to explain a little about what it is though...

The squeeze page design is great but it doesn't say much, except about getting secret software! Curious enough but I would want more info before opting in. Also I am not sure that you would gain any trust with visitors when you use words like "Today Only" and they came back a few days later and your offer was still available.
Just my opinion anyway...

Isn't that Charles Oknoma's site, and you are an affiliate?

:-Don

Looks good enough.

1. I had a look at the page on your main domain and see you are using a fake news/blog site to push your gear. Straight away that tells me what kind of a marketer you are.

2. Has your software REALLY been seen on CNBC, NBC, ABC, and CNN? I highly doubt it but would love to be proven wrong. If it hasn't then you need to get rid of that graphic from your squeeze page right away.

3. The countdown timer runs out but I can still get the offer? Hmm. Nice try buddy! Oh, and when I refresh the page the countdown timer starts again?! That's funny. Now I will believe EVERYTHING you say.

All in all I am not overly impressed with your site but that's just because I am not a fan of deceptive marketing. That page is the sort of thing the FTC would have a field day with.

Personally I wouldn't be drawing any attention to that page on a public forum - little too late now though.

You may get a higher conversion rate but you will also get a higher number of fake and useless email addresses. By forcing people to optin to see the video they don't yet know whether they want to be a part of what you are offering so they are more likely to enter random email addresses just to get to that video.

I just had another look at that fake blog site on your main domain and saw even more deception being used. You have a Facebook like button there with over 33k likes and I thought that seemed a little strange for a fake blog site. So I checked the html source code only to find you are using the Like button for a totally different url. How deceiving is that...





You really are the type of 'marketer' the FTC are trying to get rid of.

Based on some of the reviews here of people I trust, I'd say your page is perfect.

The Perfect Example Of What Not To Do...

...if you want to make a real go of it online.

I suppose if this is the type of marketing you want to do, and if there is really money in this type of b.s. then it's okay for what it is.

Personally as soon as I see a page like this I feel someone is attempting to weasel me into something that they can't just sell in a normal way, and I head for zee hills. No offense intended - you asked for opinions so that's mine. I'm not at all a fan of this type of marketing and I find it hard to believe it works on anyone.

I let the timer run out to see what would happen, was a bit dissapointed. haha.
Overall, the page looks nice. But as mentioned before, after seeing these shady tactics in play, it kinda annoys me. I'm sure that anyone tring to make money online has seen these before, as such, would probably jump off your page.

I was about to opt-in... and then I saw the countdown timer. On top of that, you say it's today only, which is CLEARLY not true. Also it seems you have a plethora of other problems, according to the other comments.

It's too bad, really, it's actually a good looking page. If only an honest marketer had control of it...

It's not too late. Take a turn and become an honest, reliable marketer. Looks like you could be successful.

Blake

Hey all - thanks again 1000's of times for all of the suggestions and comments, I really appreciate it.

As far as the parent URL - toponlinereviews.com - My site is actually hosted on a friend mine's hosting plan right now and I'll be changing the domain name this week.

And the CB product that it's linked to is going to change as well - that was just a placeholder. I'll be changing it to a newer higher converting CB product here soon as well.

And I very much so agree about the suggestions on the headers - and the "Today Only" at the top - I am most definitely going to change that. As I said in my first post; this is my first creation of getting a squeeze page together; and I know I overlooked some areas, but I'm all for going back and making things better all the way around.


I was also kicking around the idea of...when the timer expires it would either try to close the page...or maybe have a javascript pop over warning the user that they have 10 seconds to enter in their e-mail address before they are kicked off the page.

Also, I was thinking of changing the "Get Instant Access Now!" button to an "Add to Cart" button when the timer expires but since I don't have a Clickbank product myself and I really haven't given too much information about [said] product; I doubt that very many would just "add to cart" right away...I could be wrong though - could be worth it to test..

Anyways, thanks again all I highly appreciate it and any other suggestions, comments, questions or concerns are mighty appreciated.

I know that the "As Seen On" is kind of deceiving (aren't most marketing techniques? Have you seen television commercials lately?) and not exactly 100% with the FTC, but I've seen so many affiliates do it lately...but hey that as well may be worth changing.

I do like the design of the squeeze page. The only thing is the description above the video doesn't really jump out at me, for some reason. Perhaps it's overshadowed by your to headline with graphic.

As for the reason to opt-in, I agree with some others, it smells of BS to me and I wouldn't really be interested in opting in for it.

But, nice design!

when I first started an affiliate business, that's one of the squeeze pages who welcomed me and took my 299 bucks off me,lol.. so it freaks me out when i see deception to that level,lol....it seems you got a good talent though, use it wisely.....you will make money in the long run,..

Hi Rassan,

I think you are very new to marketing. I was also in the same position you are now 3 years back. I thought "playing tricks" to make others do something is the only way. I was totally wrong.

Promoting "make money online" products before you do the same is the worst thing you can do. I did it

"Permission marketing" is the only permanent way to success. I highly recommend you to read the book "Permission Marketing" by Seth Godin

Amazon.com: Permission Marketing : Turning...

Always keep a true intention to help others. Be honest. Learn and apply marketing principles. Money will follow.

If you feel that you are not good at any skill, spend sometime to learn it. Once you lean and practice it, you can teach others.

Now here is my suggestion apart from the things already discussed

1)Try Red color for your headline
2) have a very compelling,curiosity generating headline
3)Keep your call to action ("Get Instant Access Now") above the fold. So visitors need not to scroll to see it
4) Put a few benefits in bullet points below the headline

These are some of the general things that increases the conversion rate of squeeze pages.

Hope it helps

Hey Warriors thanks for all your positive and also a few negative opinions and comments . I am working with a wed developer who has informed me that some changes are being made and some are not .

I don't know what 64 bit explorer web browser has to do with anything but something that I requested be changed after reading your posts crashed my page OMG ..

Good job, man. Keep up the good work!