Is this article rewriting make sense?

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Hi,

I have just used my own tool to rewrite one article for testing..is this make sense...

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You can find so many dieting, fat loss and lose the fat solutions available on the market that it can be difficult making a choice. Make no mistake that diet product makers know exactly about the power of so called natural products. Just about anything that involves references to all-natural or perhaps herbal will certainly draw attention. However there definitely are some serious issues with this overall strategy and usage of a majority of these ingredients. An unsuspecting consumer is part of the difficulty because people do have a tendency to automatically trust something which is natural, or herbal. People usually do not question the safety of these items, and they are unaware of real potential risks to health and life. Practically any natural, or herbal, substance can have adverse reactions when used, and you will find other issues linked to standard medicines. Still, an additional situation concerns the individual who has a tendency to react adversely to a certain herb.
 
   There is just one more significant point to bear in mind about herbal ingredients in diet pills. There are far too many herbal plant products for medical and scientific research to completely study for safety. What does frequently happen is a company will pay a laboratory to complete research on a specific substance. Obviously it really is a clear conflict for both parties concerned. The final result is perhaps always a favorable outcome for the natural substance that is tested. Unfortunately, many people do not even make an effort to consider these schemes. But also it will be the consumer who is put at possible threat due to this type of biased testing.
 
   There are numerous natural dieting products on the market, but few of these ingredients have been researched or proven to perform in some degree. Ephedra will actually work when joined with caffeine. However, you will recollect that ephedra was prohibited in the US not many years ago. Most recently a new replacement emerged, Hoodia was released on the market amidst significant amounts of marketing and buzz. This item, which is a plant derivative out of South Africa, has been analyzed to some degree. However you will find important potential complications for people with certain medical conditions. Hoodia will block several natural feedback systems affecting hunger and thirst. If you might be interested to examine hoodia, then you need to learn much more about it.
 
 We will share a dreadful example of what can go awry with herbal ingredients. A weight loss herbal product was used in Belgium which resulted in kidney failure for approximately a hundred people. About fifty or so more men and women experienced damage to their kidneys. When some kidneys were taken out and analyzed, they were found to have precancer as well as actual cancer problems. What actually took place was the incorrect herbal ingredient was included in that particular diet product.
 
  We do think there are genuine and effective uses for herbal ingredients. However, certainly any person needs to exercise extreme caution. Unfortunately there will almost always be a percentage of people who will never exercise good prudence in these situations.
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 Many of you diet, fat loss and find it difficult to choose one that will be available in the market can not lose fat solutions. Food producers as well as about the power of natural products that do not make any mistake. Perhaps all natural or herbal remedies that include notes about anything I will definitely attract attention. However, be sure that a majority of the overall strategy and the use of these compounds, there are some important issues. People's own nature, or some confidence in herbal remedies, which have a tendency, because it is part of the difficulty of an unsuspecting consumer.When used in practice, any natural or herbal remedies, can be a material adverse effect, you will find other issues related to quality medicines. Still, an additional condition to a particular herb as a possible disadvantage is a tendency to separate concerns. 
 
       Food is an important point to bear in mind that pills are the herbal product is about. A study of medical and scientific research are so many herbal plant protection products are available. What often happens is a company to give a specific product research and complete a lab. There is a clear contradiction in the fact that both are very worried. Perhaps the end result is always positive test result that is a natural product. Unfortunately, many people do not even try to consider these proposals. But the threat of bias due to test at this type of consumer who can put in it. 
 
In the market there are many natural dieting products, but these products have been proven to do some research or at some angle. In fact, when combined with caffeine Ephedra acts. However, you do not have ephedra banned many years ago that the United States marupativir. Recently emerged as a new answer, Hoodia Buzz marketing and the market was substantial. This item is out of South Africa, a plant derivative, has been analyzed to some degree. However, the main problems people have some medical conditions. Prevent hunger and thirst for Hoodia will affect many natural feedback systems. Hoodia If you are interested to study, to learn more about it. 
 
For example, a sample of what can go wrong, we pankukolvom herbal ingredients. Herbal weight loss product, about a hundred people in a renal failure, using Belgium as a result. About fifty or so men and women also suffered damage to their kidneys. And analysis of the kidneys when taken out some of their original cancer and precancer were problems. What really happened in the wrong place, that medicinal ingredient added to a particular food product. 
 
We think that herbal products are genuine and effective use. However, be sure to exercise, any person with extreme caution. Unfortunately, people often can not exercise prudence in this situation, there will be a percentage.Listen
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Pls suggest.

Many Thanks,
Velrajan T.
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  • Profile picture of the author Richard Van
    I'm afraid the after one looks like it's been rather badly spun.

    Sorry but there's no point telling you otherwise.
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    • Profile picture of the author robsterhews
      I agree, it is not very good and looks spun. Even the title of your post is grammatically wrong. Contact me on Skype if you see me online. If I have the time - we can talk on Skype and I will tell you everything that is wrong. PM me if you can't find my Skype ID.
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    • Profile picture of the author DebbieD
      Same here. I can smell an automated spinner did it a mile away. Sorry.
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      • Profile picture of the author JohnMcCabe
        I hate to pile on, but you asked...

        The original isn't that good to start with, and the spun version isn't any better.

        I think your tool needs more work.
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  • Profile picture of the author laurencewins
    I agree. both articles are quite bad and I would never use either one for anything.
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  • Thanks for your tips..hope i have to change my grammer :-)
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    • Profile picture of the author Richard Van
      Originally Posted by Velrajan Thangavelu View Post

      Thanks for your tips..hope i have to change my grammer :-)
      Don't worry Velrajan,

      There's always a way round these things and I admire the fact you have come on here to get honest feedback.
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      • Profile picture of the author IMWinner
        The after will really be rejected because it is spun badly. I would say, you just have to write the articles yourself. There are article spinning program that really gives us "bad" spunned articles and as we all know, that bad article will automatically be rejected when you attempt to submit those kind.
        It would be nice to write and re-write the articles yourself or probably hire someone to do re-write for you or write original articles.
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  • Profile picture of the author koyaai
    the after article would get rejected after the first 4-6 words...
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  • Profile picture of the author koyaai
    "IF" a project would call for a rewrite. I do it on a sentence level and not on the"phrase/word" level. Yes, it would entail more time and effort but you get better results after spinning.
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  • Profile picture of the author LarryC
    As others have said, it definitely reads like a spun article. To be honest, though, there are many articles that you can find on directories such as Ezinearticles that aren't any better. Still, you're better off using content that readers will find helpful rather than articles that are just stuffed with the right keywords.
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  • Profile picture of the author Buddha94
    Wow, that is so hard to understand! I thought India was colonized by the British. Get some English lessons there, they are a good investment. Sorry no offence.
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