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Need a Sales Page Review

by sblackburn
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Hi fellow warriors -

I am getting ready to market a product which is "Swipe My Library" which is my library of Real Estate related information that I have collected over the past 3-4 years.

I would really like feedback on the sales page, and the pricing for this product.

Here is the link: Swipe My Library

This is really my first attempt at using video as well so any feedback there is greatly needed.

Thanks a ton
#page #review #sales
  • Profile picture of the author trom771
    Hi Stephanie -

    From a personal standpoint, I'd want to see more details about what is included before purchasing. Just seeing the raw numbers is not enough to peak my interest. Also, it looks like you misspelled 'collected'.
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    • Profile picture of the author sblackburn
      Thanks for the feedback so far. I have just uploaded a revised page including details around what is in the package. I haven't incorporated the feedback yet on adding why this is need and the loss if it isn't purchased.

      I will be incorporating this now and updating shortly.

      Thank you so much for the feedback so far
      - Stefanie
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    • Profile picture of the author sblackburn
      As for the question how effective is this package for the Newbie -- it provides him a library of information that he/she will need in one spot - no need to search for it. Just download and start learning.

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      • Profile picture of the author gcjmarkets
        After reading your sales letter I still don't really know what those products will do for me or why I should fork out 37 bucks for them.

        You need to present a problem that your audience has, agitate the problem, then provide a solution with your offer. Right now your letter is more like this is what I have, this is what it did for me, you should buy it!

        Hope this helps
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  • Profile picture of the author Loren Woirhaye
    Try to write in the active, not passive voice.

    Refer to Stephen King's "On Writing" or Strunk and
    White's "the Elements of Style" to learn how to do it.

    Nobody will buy your product with this salesletter.

    You need to build perceived value with specificity.

    In addition to being specific about what the products
    are - you need to tell what the cost of NOT having these
    resources will be - thorny legal problems, lost money,
    sales falling through, liens on property you own, etc...
    just because you were too cheap to have the right
    information... stated in a nicer way of course, because
    in general addressing the reader's personal flaws
    head one (cheapness) is not effective.

    Instead work to build the "aspired to" self-image the
    would-be real estate success person wants to be. This
    requires some skill to do of course.

    I always tell people that they CAN write their own copy
    if they have the interest and are willing to put in the
    time to learn how. That's true here as well. Whether
    writing your own copy is the best use of your time is
    only up to you to decide.
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  • Profile picture of the author profedu
    How effective can this be for a newbie?
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  • Profile picture of the author Jonathan 2.0
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    Great idea and I like the name. "Swipe My Library." Brilliant. For some reason this offer is very appealing to me and I'm not even interested in investing in real estate. I think it's the concept and knowing that I'm doing business with a real person if you know what I mean.

    To improve your website I would use left positioning for the text and include lots of benefits for the information that I'm buying. You can learn how to write benefits by following these 2 links: 1)www.michelfortin.com/the-oft-confused-features-and-benefits/ 2)The Gary Halbert Letter I'd also offer a "Like It Or Lump It" money-back guarantee. And I'd include a strong headline. To write you headline visit this link: 3)www.michelfortin.com/write-magnetic-headlines-with-these-7-tips/

    Do all that and I think you'll convert more prospects. And remember to test everything I've mentioned because part of your website's appeal could be that it looks like you just threw it together without thinking. (That could be a good thing.) Again great concept. And the best of luck with it.
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    • Profile picture of the author sblackburn
      Thank you all for your feedback so far.

      I just posted an update to the sales page based on the feedback. I have also recorded a new video to go with it.

      Please let me know if the benefits are coming through a bit better now.

      Thanks
      Stefanie
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