Please rate my new (third attempt) landing page, and rip into it's faults :)

Jkeown · 02-10-2009, 01:16 AM

Hey Warriors.

Just uploaded a new landing page promoting an affiliate product. It's my third attmept at a solid landing page and I'm hoping it'll convert with some traffic!

Any feedback or (constructive hopefully) Criticism would be fantastic.

It can be found here: Build Muscle Fast

Thanks in advance

Justin

sunny56 · 02-10-2009, 01:33 AM

Hm....your header graphic is an interesting choice. I like the simplicity, and the use of negative space, but I wonder how it will go over with the body building crowd??

I think your review is good. My suggestions are:

You should try and find something to give your visitors. A decent PLR product, or related video or audio or soemthing....and you should ask them for their email address in exchange for your gift...(allllllways build your list...you know that ;-).

In fact, that blank space in the header is a Great place for an optin form.

if they optin you can redirect them through to your merchants site and email them the pressi.

And my only other suggestion would be to maybe make it a bit shorter....i started skimming very early on...vary your text sizes, make it easy to read, and i think it could work well for you.

MouseandMice · 02-10-2009, 01:33 AM

Make it an opt in page... then use the auto responder to send them to the sales letter

mustard76 · 02-13-2009, 09:49 AM

The muscle man image at the top is distracting. You should be able to find a better image and put it on the left or right of the text instead of on top.

Also, add more testimonials!

I agree that you should use this page to get the visitor's email address and then send him a series of emails using an autoresponder to close the deal.

TLTheLiberator · 02-13-2009, 10:11 AM

It's quite long but pretty interesting.

Keep track of how many people land and how many people go to the affiliate sales page.

After your positive testing and you're sure you can generate visitors, you should make an opt-in page the first step for your prospects and keep as many of them in your orbit as possible.

Hope This Helps!!

TL

02-10-2009, 01:16 AM	#1
Jkeown Active Warrior Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: New Zealand Posts: 62 Thanks: 4 Thanked 6 Times in 4 Posts	Please rate my new (third attempt) landing page, and rip into it's faults :) Hey Warriors. Just uploaded a new landing page promoting an affiliate product. It's my third attmept at a solid landing page and I'm hoping it'll convert with some traffic! Any feedback or (constructive hopefully) Criticism would be fantastic. It can be found here: Build Muscle Fast Thanks in advance Justin

02-10-2009, 01:33 AM	#2
sunny56 ๏ əɓƝɐᴚʡϚ ɦᴚəᴧ ๏ Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: CO, NYC, CA, MX, ES, MA ... Posts: 105 Blog Entries: 1 Thanks: 4 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	Re: Please rate my new (third attempt) landing page, and rip into it's faults :) Hm....your header graphic is an interesting choice. I like the simplicity, and the use of negative space, but I wonder how it will go over with the body building crowd?? I think your review is good. My suggestions are: You should try and find something to give your visitors. A decent PLR product, or related video or audio or soemthing....and you should ask them for their email address in exchange for your gift...(allllllways build your list...you know that ;-). In fact, that blank space in the header is a Great place for an optin form. if they optin you can redirect them through to your merchants site and email them the pressi. And my only other suggestion would be to maybe make it a bit shorter....i started skimming very early on...vary your text sizes, make it easy to read, and i think it could work well for you.

02-10-2009, 01:33 AM	#3
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02-13-2009, 09:49 AM	#4
mustard76 Active Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: Boston, MA, USA Posts: 79 Thanks: 9 Thanked 5 Times in 4 Posts	Re: Please rate my new (third attempt) landing page, and rip into it's faults :) The muscle man image at the top is distracting. You should be able to find a better image and put it on the left or right of the text instead of on top. Also, add more testimonials! I agree that you should use this page to get the visitor's email address and then send him a series of emails using an autoresponder to close the deal.
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02-13-2009, 10:11 AM	#5
TLTheLiberator Please get a net biz plan War Room Member Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: , , USA. Posts: 1,428 Blog Entries: 3 Thanks: 1,109 Thanked 559 Times in 427 Posts	Re: Please rate my new (third attempt) landing page, and rip into it's faults :) It's quite long but pretty interesting. Keep track of how many people land and how many people go to the affiliate sales page. After your positive testing and you're sure you can generate visitors, you should make an opt-in page the first step for your prospects and keep as many of them in your orbit as possible. Hope This Helps!! TL
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