Sales Page Critiques Please (Order button is non-functional)

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Hi all,

OK... I have not made a sales page in alot time but this one
is simple and I know I need a guarantee but other than that...

http://getyourstuff.org/facebookpp

What do you think it needs or can/should be changed?
(I know a guarantee is still missing but otherwise)

Thanks in advance!

:-)
#button #critiques #nonfunctional #order #page #sales
  • Profile picture of the author Harvey M
    Not bad. It's a bit cluttered. Nothing really made me want to read, I kind of just scrolled down to check it out. Probably because I wasn't initially interested in your product. The images loaded a little slow. The big list of products could be a little easier to read also.
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  • Profile picture of the author Dave90210
    The site doesn't load in my browser. I'm using Firefox
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    • Profile picture of the author Jamie Iaconis
      Thanks Harvey. I'll see what I can do.

      Dave. I am having a problem with a Wordpress plugin
      that intermittently fools with my site. If you want to try
      loading it again it should go. Thanks for trying. Sorry.
      (I am working on fixing the problem)
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      • Profile picture of the author AlexCN
        Hey Jamie! Constructive critisism... right?

        First thing I would say is that when Im looking for a solution to something, I want ONE product for ONE need/solution.... any time I see 4 or 5 or 10 or 15 products bundled together, it lessens the value of ALL of them in my eyes... They all seem like something cheap and mashed together just because the seller could.

        Secondly, your headline doesnt 'grab' me...Maximize Your Productivity
        isn't really something that makes me jump out of my seat and say OOOooo I just HAVE to take advantage of this!

        Why not break up your Main product into 5-8 individual products and sales pages as well...

        This way you are not only increasing the value of each product in your customers eyes, but can also make a unique exciting headline for each product pinpointing its EXACT benefits.

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        • Profile picture of the author Oliver Williams
          Originally Posted by AlexCN View Post

          Hey Jamie! Constructive critisism... right?

          First thing I would say is that when Im looking for a solution to something, I want ONE product for ONE need/solution.... any time I see 4 or 5 or 10 or 15 products bundled together, it lessens the value of ALL of them in my eyes... They all seem like something cheap and mashed together just because the seller could.

          Secondly, your headline doesnt 'grab' me...Maximize Your Productivity
          isn't really something that makes me jump out of my seat and say OOOooo I just HAVE to take advantage of this!

          Why not break up your Main product into 5-8 individual products and sales pages as well...

          This way you are not only increasing the value of each product in your customers eyes, but can also make a unique exciting headline for each product pinpointing its EXACT benefits.
          I feel the same way, maybe its a psychological thing but large bundles devalue the products.
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  • Profile picture of the author Oliver Williams
    Firstly the graphics are good and I feel this page has the potential to be a really professional page as it is almost there. This is just my humble opinion but I suggest you get rid of the graphics at the top and add more benefits.

    It comes across as a products list not a sales page. Also maybe its just me but it feels very old school in its overall presentation.
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  • Profile picture of the author Jamie Iaconis
    OK, Ichanged the headline a little... sounds better I think/hope :-)

    Any more thoughts out there?
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  • Profile picture of the author Jonathan Joseph
    Hi Jaime,

    I've had some experience with writing copy myself and creating offers. It seems like you're currently using a very old-school design layout. If you'd like to boost your conversions and have someone stay on your page longer, instead of them leaving right away then...

    Here's what I suggest:

    1) Have the background color a very light grey or white (currently blue). This has been proven to boost conversions, since it's more welcoming, and easier on the eye's.

    2) Create an offer video. (Place typically below the headline or simply on its own as a video offer).

    3) Have a "PS." message below, adding in something extra or giving a special instruction.

    4) Testimonials - if you have any. (Written, video, or audio).

    5) Make some of those products bonuses.

    6) The top half especially seems much too cluttered and confusing. I'm not sure what I'm looking at, or getting, what the benefits are, etc. You may want to get some graphics done as a header, or simply have the headline right at the top. And I'd suggest un-highlighting so many titles.

    7) Have an option to subscribe for a free giveaway. Either on the site embedded, or as a pop up (popupdomination), or upon leaving your site as an exit-pop.

    8) Lastly, be sure to have the price of the bundle, and the VALUE of each item on the site, and any SAVINGS that they get with your bundle.

    Try it out!
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  • Profile picture of the author absplittesters
    Hey Jamie,

    a few more things you should be looking at changing:

    1 - Repeating backgrounds SUCK... Change it to a real light blue or light gray, and drop the repeating one

    2 - Drop the product images from your headline area, put your headline and sub head into a stronger font like tahoma, use red and black for the colors.

    3 - Put each of the product's in johnson boxes

    4 - Instead of using plain dot points, use high impact red ticks

    That's a start, more that could be done like adding a high converting header, stronger copy etc, but start with the above...

    Matt
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  • Profile picture of the author Jamie Iaconis
    OK thanks a bunch!

    I couple things I forgot about and a couple I have
    not implemented onto the page yet, but I will start
    working on it now... thanks for all of the replies!

    Header looks too cluttering huh? I kinda figured that too but
    I wanted to show all the products... what I think I will do instead
    is implement the package name into a more simple-type header!

    Keep 'em comin' guys. Thanks.
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