Please Critique my Blog

mscherrah · 03-12-2009, 12:21 PM

Hi Warriors!

I made a sales blog selling a golf product. I would love it if you could tel me what I need to do to make it better.

Thanks!

Matt

HERE IS MY NEW BLOG

ragstworiches · 03-12-2009, 12:35 PM

Hey I had a quick look, I'm not really up on golf, but I would say the subheading could be a bit more snappy.

Your images could be improved if you round the corners, this can be done for free at roundpic.com

Also some kind of frame for the video would be good.

On the plus side, I think the content and the colour scheme looks good.

Hope this helps.

mscherrah · 03-12-2009, 12:38 PM

Hey, Thanks alot! I am going to go in and tweak it not.

Matt

Teresa Coppes · 03-12-2009, 12:53 PM

I'm not a golfer but is there another way to say "your swing"? In your first paragraph the use of your swing becomes repetitive. Anyway to say it differently?

Sorry I'm not much help. Overall I think it looks good and the color scheme works with the product.

Good luck.

kimkitch · 03-12-2009, 01:54 PM

Nice and clean looking blog but the only thing if I was nitpicking would be the fact that I cannot read the words swing better in the subheading because of the trees.

Droopy Dawg · 03-12-2009, 02:25 PM

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Originally Posted by Teresa_C

I'm not a golfer but is there another way to say "your swing"? In your first paragraph the use of your swing becomes repetitive. Anyway to say it differently?

Sorry I'm not much help. Overall I think it looks good and the color scheme works with the product.

Good luck.

yeah I noticed that too... must be the main keyword...

Great looking site though.

aekaplan · 03-12-2009, 03:39 PM

How do you plan to market this blog?

mscherrah · 03-12-2009, 03:51 PM

I am marketing it through article, youtube, metacafe, and others.

Mikeman · 03-12-2009, 04:28 PM

I would end your article with a stronger call to action...simply adding the words "CLICK HERE to learn more about The Simple Swing >>" would help.

03-12-2009, 12:21 PM	#1
mscherrah HyperActive Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: Pittsburgh, PA Posts: 240 Blog Entries: 8 Thanks: 70 Thanked 21 Times in 15 Posts Social Networking	Please Critique my Blog Hi Warriors! I made a sales blog selling a golf product. I would love it if you could tel me what I need to do to make it better. Thanks! Matt HERE IS MY NEW BLOG
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03-12-2009, 12:35 PM	#2
ragstworiches HyperActive Warrior Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: , , United Kingdom. Posts: 338 Thanks: 57 Thanked 17 Times in 12 Posts Contact Info	Re: Please Critique my Blog Hey I had a quick look, I'm not really up on golf, but I would say the subheading could be a bit more snappy. Your images could be improved if you round the corners, this can be done for free at roundpic.com Also some kind of frame for the video would be good. On the plus side, I think the content and the colour scheme looks good. Hope this helps.
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03-12-2009, 12:38 PM	#3
mscherrah HyperActive Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: Pittsburgh, PA Posts: 240 Blog Entries: 8 Thanks: 70 Thanked 21 Times in 15 Posts Social Networking	Re: Please Critique my Blog Hey, Thanks alot! I am going to go in and tweak it not. Matt
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03-12-2009, 12:53 PM	#4
Teresa Coppes HyperActive Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Aug 2008 Location: Iowa Posts: 296 Thanks: 123 Thanked 77 Times in 65 Posts Social Networking	Re: Please Critique my Blog I'm not a golfer but is there another way to say "your swing"? In your first paragraph the use of your swing becomes repetitive. Anyway to say it differently? Sorry I'm not much help. Overall I think it looks good and the color scheme works with the product. Good luck.

03-12-2009, 01:54 PM	#5
kimkitch HyperActive Warrior Join Date: Jan 2008 Location: United Kingdom. Posts: 256 Thanks: 54 Thanked 7 Times in 7 Posts Social Networking	Re: Please Critique my Blog Nice and clean looking blog but the only thing if I was nitpicking would be the fact that I cannot read the words swing better in the subheading because of the trees.
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03-12-2009, 03:39 PM	#7
aekaplan HyperActive Warrior Join Date: Jan 2009 Posts: 144 Thanks: 25 Thanked 16 Times in 7 Posts	Re: Please Critique my Blog How do you plan to market this blog?

03-12-2009, 03:51 PM	#8
mscherrah HyperActive Warrior War Room Member Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: Pittsburgh, PA Posts: 240 Blog Entries: 8 Thanks: 70 Thanked 21 Times in 15 Posts Social Networking	Re: Please Critique my Blog I am marketing it through article, youtube, metacafe, and others.
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03-12-2009, 04:28 PM	#9
Mikeman Warrior Member War Room Member Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: , , . Posts: 20 Thanks: 1 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Re: Please Critique my Blog I would end your article with a stronger call to action...simply adding the words "CLICK HERE to learn more about The Simple Swing >>" would help.