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12 years ago

The landing page doesnt look that bad but the spelling and grammar are terrible. It certainly appears that English is not your native language, which is fine but I would recommend paying someone to write your landing page for you. I wouldnt do anything else until you get the landing page fixed.

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nudelkuchen

12 years ago

Originally Posted by quadxnet

The landing page doesnt look that bad but the spelling and grammar are terrible. It certainly appears that English is not your native language, which is fine but I would recommend paying someone to write your landing page for you. I wouldnt do anything else until you get the landing page fixed.

How do you think about the product itself ? I Try to promote it since a week but i did not a single sale

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Devin X

Banned 12 years ago

Originally Posted by quadxnet

The landing page doesnt look that bad but the spelling and grammar are terrible. It certainly appears that English is not your native language, which is fine but I would recommend paying someone to write your landing page for you. I wouldnt do anything else until you get the landing page fixed.

Agreed, the page doesn't look bad but anyone who reads it will bounce because of the poor grammar and spelling.

Originally Posted by nudelkuchen

How do you think about the product itself ? I Try to promote it since a week but i did not a single sale

Dr. Drum is selling. I don't know how the refund rate is for it but it has a decent gravity which means affiliates are selling it for sure.

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nudelkuchen

12 years ago

Originally Posted by TheRealDudeman

Agreed, the page doesn't look bad but anyone who reads it will bounce because of the poor grammar and spelling.

Dr. Drum is selling. I don't know how the refund rate is for it but it has a decent gravity which means affiliates are selling it for sure.

But the grammar should be fixxed now

, check the post over yours

Someone have further ideas for improving?

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stoltingmediagroup

12 years ago

The official sales page looks like it could convert well. However, if visitors have to pass through your affiliate landing page first, then I will agree with quadxnet and say that the grammar on your page needs to be fixed.

I assume German is your first language?

Also, the landing page currently also screams "I'm an affiliate" and this may lead people to leave your page and type in Dr Drum in the search engine instead, thus robbing you from your commissions.

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nudelkuchen

12 years ago

Originally Posted by stoltingmediagroup

The official sales page looks like it could convert well. However, if visitors have to pass through your affiliate landing page first, then I will agree with quadxnet and say that the grammar on your page needs to be fixed.

I assume German is your first language?

Also, the landing page currently also screams "I'm an affiliate" and this may lead people to leave your page and type in Dr Drum in the search engine instead, thus robbing you from your commissions.

Yes, german ist my first language.
Ok i will fix that grammar. Is a traffic of 80 daily visitors normal by adverting with adwords ? I feel like this is way to less

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stoltingmediagroup

12 years ago

Originally Posted by nudelkuchen

Yes, german ist my first language.
Ok i will fix that grammar. Is a traffic of 80 daily visitors normal by adverting with adwords ? I feel like this is way to less

It sounds like you may have set a low daily budget on adwords,
and therefore you are receiving only 80 visitors since Google might not want to over serve your ads and go over the limit.

However I do not recommend spending more at this time because it sounds like you are losing money already.

You say that you have advertised for a week but no sales.

80 visitors per day to your landing page = 560 visitors per week.

From looking at the official sales page, I would think that there should have been at least one sale out of 560 targeted potential customers.

When (if) you do get a sale, you would want the income to cover the expense of what you paid so far for the period of time it took to get that sale + make a profit.

From the looks of things, I would not continue with your current path.

Write the merchant, and ask them to share their conversion stats with you.
This could be helpful in planning a budget.

However, you still need to work on that landing page,
because it is definitely making you lose sales.

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nudelkuchen

12 years ago

Originally Posted by stoltingmediagroup

It sounds like you may have set a low daily budget on adwords,
and therefore you are receiving only 80 visitors since Google might not want to over serve your ads and go over the limit.

However I do not recommended spending more at this time because it sounds like you are losing money already.

You say that you have advertised for a week but no sales.

80 visitors per day to your landing page = 560 visitors per week.

From looking at the official sales page, I would think that there should have been at least one sale out of 560 targeted potential customers.

When (if) you do get a sale, you would want the income to cover the expense of what you paid so far for the period of time it took to get that sale + make a profit.

From the looks of things, I would not continue with your current path.

Write the merchant, and ask them to share their conversion stats with you.
This could be helpful in planning a budget.

However, you still need to work on that landing page,
because it is definitely making you lose sales.

I thought theres something like a key i need to find like better keywords or ads or something to get it started but maybe im really on the wrong path i will fix that grammar mistakes and try it like 2 more days. If there are no sales the clickbank hoplink is broken or im unable to sale this sh**

I mean i could try it myself but it whould not sound like im native english speaker

could you please tell me where i could pay someone to fix this text

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Originally Posted by Bluestarace

As everyone else said, your sales page does require some heavy editing.

Few other tips:- Try making the features part a little more bigger. It looks a little squished right now.
Break up the text so that it is easy on the eyes.
Have a clear call to action towards the end of your sales page.

Also, maybe you could talk a little more about why they need Dr. drum and, without it, what they would be missing out on. Make them aware of their problems and then offer a solution.

Hope this helps

Thank you, im going to work at this aswell and will post a before after picture when its finished. hopfully i can do 1 sale :/

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Bluestarace

12 years ago

As everyone else said, your sales page does require some heavy editing.

Few other tips:- Try making the features part a little more bigger. It looks a little squished right now.
Break up the text so that it is easy on the eyes.
Have a clear call to action towards the end of your sales page.

Also, maybe you could talk a little more about why they need Dr. drum and, without it, what they would be missing out on. Make them aware of their problems and then offer a solution.

Hope this helps

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Bluestarace

12 years ago

Go to the warriors for hire sub forum. You will find someone there.

You could also post an ad on the "warriors looking to hire you" sub forum.

Then there is always fiverr, odesk etc.

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12 years ago

I tend to agree with Bluestarace re Fiverr. Thats your best option in my view. Find a person/s you can trust and develop a relationship with them and use them as part of this process for your work.

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nudelkuchen

12 years ago

Thank you very much im going to do that and come back after i have improved with a new screenshot/url

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contentwriting360

Banned 12 years ago

Hi nudelkuchen,

Please don't take this piece of advice offensively. I would recommend you to fix those grammar and spelling issues on your page. With 500+ visitors per week, at least one of those should have been converted as a buyer. I bet you already know that 'good content' also means correctness of grammar and spelling. Buyers may not have a good impression on your product if they feel that your content was not written professionally.

You can hire someone who offers writing services or visit the 'Warriors For Hire' thread. I hope this helps!

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rosetrees

12 years ago

Or. You could write the page in German and target it at German speaking users? Ok, you'll have fewer potential customers, but you will have much less competition.

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sudeep765

12 years ago

keep trying different experiments until you succeed.

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nudelkuchen

12 years ago

Hi

i have some changes.

I have increased the main title,
I broke up the text for easier reading,
I bought 1,2k facebook likes for credibility which will hopfully will be delivered tomorrow,
I bought someone to fix the grammar on my website what will be done tomorrow.

and one change that makes me a bit curious may you could help me im using adwords
I changed some settings, added keywords, ... and now ive got like 90 visitors per hour which is actually good but the most traffic comes from googleads.g.doubleclick.net and they are all leaving without doing anything. Im paying 0,05€ per Display network click.

should i remove the display network's again or should i just enjoy the traffic and hope that someone buys?