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Hey guys, I've got a very simple squeeze page that I've put up on one of my sites. Can you take a look and offer some feedback? I'm looking to capture a name and e-mail by offering a free report.

www.guywithalaptop.com


Thanks in advance.
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  • Profile picture of the author Greedy
    - Put "Internet Marketing" on the same line

    - Add a video or slideshow.

    - "Get the answers to your MOST asked Internet Marketing Questions!" sounds really bland and boring to be honest. Show people a free campaign or something.

    Overall I feel it just needs more energy, I think my suggestions will help.
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  • Profile picture of the author JoeyElmore
    Thanks. I've literally put this together in 5 mins. I've read that boring and ugly converts just as well, and in some instances better, than going all out.

    I will make some adjustments from your suggestions though

    Thanks again.
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  • Profile picture of the author Greedy
    yeah, I think it's real good, it will work.

    But just trying to get this thing converting like fire.
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  • Profile picture of the author jaggyjay
    That page just may work... or... it may not.

    Always run two versions so you can do a split test and see which one pulls better

    As far as the other stuff is concerned - Greedy is pretty much on point. And I'd definitely change the headline as from a Copywriting point of view - it can be a lot better.

    Consider... "Discover the #1 Most-Pressing Question Internet Marketers Have in 2012. I Tell You What it is -- Plus Reveal The Shocking Answer!"

    This one's a bit more specific... and more promising.
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    • Profile picture of the author JoeyElmore
      Originally Posted by jaggyjay View Post

      That page just may work... or... it may not.

      Always run two versions so you can do a split test and see which one pulls better

      As far as the other stuff is concerned - Greedy is pretty much on point. And I'd definitely change the headline as from a Copywriting point of view - it can be a lot better.

      Consider... "Discover the #1 Most-Pressing Question Internet Marketers Have in 2012. I Tell You What it is -- Plus Reveal The Shocking Answer!"

      This one's a bit more specific... and more promising.
      Thanks for the feedback Jaggyjay. I took your advice and changed the copy
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