New site weight loss niche 1st CB product - Please review

Hi Dave,

thanks for feedback. Will take a look at some targeted backgrounds.

Any other comments will be appreciated!

Hello Morten,

Thanks for your imput. About the design, my wife keeps telling me its too "classy" and i keep telling her its the "product"...

I am completing a old style sales page (same content but different graphics) and will perform a slip-test (by the way, what do i need to do that in safe way)?

Hope that split-test can guide me about the best design to this product.

Thanks guys, keep the comments coming, they are very important to me, especially at this point.

Just a quick note: I've been thinking about this since i designed that page, the width size. If i run a test decreasing the size of the site (hit control -) i feel it has more presence and somewhat the sales will increase!

Maybe just my bad guess or a good one? Your thoughts?

Hello hidman,

Thanks for feedback. Working on site width right now, should be able to deliver a different LP in 2 hours.

Can anyone advice me a free script to do a split-test on those 2 LP? Don't know if it even exists but a script that delivers Page A - Page B each time a visitor comes in. Hope that makes sense.

Any script you can recommend?

Why not add a video to the page...

Just curious, can you expand on what you meant by "Decided to drop the affiliate battle..."?

What in particular was not working out for you?

Thanks!

Warriors,

Did some tweaking and tried to follow your guidelines. Please check hxxp://www.losebellyflab.com and tell me your thoughts.

Thank you!

You have no proof.

The baseline standard in the weight loss niche is before and after pictures...the more the better.

Andy,

If you can write solid pieces of sales copy, then you have 75% of the work done. And this is exactly where i fail: sales pitch, sales pages, content.

I have taken a look at the site, and I think it looks awesome.

Congrats, the site is clean and smart. The graphics are the best part - I love them.

Well done, I wish you well

Is your traffic from search engine or social traffic?
Social traffic it's awful to make sales... try getting specific traffic, like traffic from weight loss forums...

I agree with Steve. You could lose all credibility if your potential customer has already seen your before and after pics on the pages of other weight loss websites.

Scubita,

Nice, clean website... the images you have look great, but throw in a couple "real world" images - definitely a before and after.

Something else to note - although your site does look very clean, the more "simple" websites have been known to convert better - even ones that look like a complete newbie made them.

I read your entire sales copy and there's a couple things I'd like to point out:

Social proof is good, and you have it. Maybe move them around a bit to keep it fresh in the readers mind (i.e. move one testimonial up to the top a bit). Prove that what you say you'll do, you'll do.

Tell a story through HEADERS and BOLD statements - most people skim through things, including a website... so make sure you're getting your point across even if they skim JUST the headers and bold statements. It's like telling a mini story through them.

Consider video up at the top - but you may want to be particular about the quality (make sure it matches the website). If you can't, consider an illustration of some case studies and how many weeks it took them to achieve results? (shrug)

In your copy, add Empathy: "If I were you, I'd be wondering if this really even works"

In your copy, add Validation: "And you're absolutely right to ask that question. I know how you feel."

In your copy, relate to the reader: "My latest Holywood client was scared out of her mind - she needed to lose 15 lbs in just TWO weeks because she was nominated for a Grammy (blah blah)." This is damaging admission - it states why she was scared out of her mind and the reader subconsciously feels comfort.

Add a hook or two to keep the reader interested, somewhere about 1/3 of the way down. For example: "If you think this whole weight loss thing is an uphill battle, I can completely relate to you... in fact, you wouldn't believe what I discovered to be a GREAT way to lose weight is... but before we get into that, I want to say this:" (at least one hook in your copy)

Always use graphics and images to prove your point, not to show off a product.

Other than that, I think you're good ... you've positioned your service for high perceived value (and I'm thinking you could even charge a bit more). Think about adding a OTO or back end offer, maybe an **** berry weight loss supplement from a reputable affiliate?

And remember - create headers, subheaders and bold statements to be congruent with one another... I'd have to say that this is probably most important.

Best of luck and feel free to PM if ya have any questions.

Kindest,
John Dennis

wayyyyyyyyyyyyyyy too cheap....$29 is not very attractive...otherwise site looks good...

edit: i dont know the product....increase price...or extend product...let someone write, whatever..and sell it at a decent price *at least* $57++ ..then it gets also attractive for affiliates.

Exercise niche for certain parts of the body otherwise is excellent...there are some stellar keywords out there

Since I come from a strong art background and live not to far from the Hollywood scene, I hope I am not being over critical here. I would like to see you succeed.

In your copy you say that you are sculpturing some of the most beautiful bodies in the Hollywood world. I think I would be more convinced if you had more attractive before and after pictures. (More the Hollywood type). Also the wood background in the back does not go with the rest of the website.

For what it worth, just my 2 cents worth.

Hey Nick, I think you've done a wonderful job. It looks great!

I'm being picky, very picky--but that's me. There are just a very few typos, but I will also tell you that your copy has far, far fewer typos and writing mistakes than 95% of the sites out there! The copy is well written.
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Now you are going to receive the benefit of all <<<myexperience>>>, and my proven methods. Needs a space between my and experience.

Just imagine... In less than a few minutes, you'll be on your way to knowing exactly how <<<i>>> shape those perfect bodies of my <<<<Holywood clients>>>! The "I" should be in caps. "Holywood" is misspelled.

Two of the testimonials also have an "i" when it should be "I".

I understand that the unique investment required on my part is a <<<one-off>>> $29. The phrase "one-off" was used a couple times and I don't understand that phrase.
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The only other thing I might think about is getting a product cover for the bonus ebooks. People are visual. I think that would draw more attention to them. I might also consider putting the box cover in your header on your order form.

This stuff is, as I said, me being pretty picky. Just trying to help! Good luck buddy!

Hello Warriors, thanks for you precious feedback.

GeorgR. : Price will increase as soon as photo session and videos are available.
joan007: Noted!
mikemcmillan: Thanks, already erased the typos. Bonuses: i will re-design the ebook covers. Right now they are too "fashion" and off target.
submit_articles: Opt-in box: Maybe 1 Report with 1/5 of the ebook? I WIll sell those bonuses more. They are hidden don't they?

A couple of quick thoughts...

1. First, figure out if you are going to sell to men OR women. It's hard to reach both. The header pic and name (belly flab) clearly point to women - but 1/2 your testimonials are from men.

2. Put a video of yourself so they can see you and make a connection.

Ryan