Let's Have A Little Experiment Here...

Hi James,

It seemed to load slow.

I stopped reading as soon as the pop up blocked the view of the headline, which was right away. It may be personal preference, but if someone wants me to at least read their headline and then they immediately block it with a pop-up, then I ove on to the next page.

I was trying to view it like it was another page, and that's what I would have done.

To be fair, your site may be really good, with convincing copy, but I never got that far.

If there is a way to time it so the pop-up appears after a few seconds (give people time to at least read the headline), or on exit, then that may help.

All the best,
Michael

Hey James, Alright... I checked it out for ya. I'll just try to give you objective feedback. k?

General impressions
Same as all other Squeeze Pages. Feel like I've been there before. Design wasn't custom enough for my taste. Didn't seem original.

What you found difficult about the site
The video played and I didn't know how to stop the music/noise... kept looking for a place to turn off the sound. I suggest you move the video up to the top (definitely move it). Also, maybe have the pop up come up LATER, like after the readers been there for say.... 3 mins. Or remove the pop up... It's kind of annoying...

What you liked about the site
Well I mean it's an alright site. Nothing too special. To me it doesn't really stick out and make a great impression.

Where you stopped reading
I went ahead and read most of it, but in all honesty I would have normally stopped reading at "$1,199.64 In Just ONE Day!
That's Over $437,868.60 Per Year!"

Cuz to me that's like... ok this isn't proven... he can't do this everyday anyways. (rolled my eyes and would definitely not purchase because of that).

What could be improve
Move your introductory video up higher. So people know where the sound is coming from.
Turn down the background music - it was a bit hard to understand you.
Sales Copy: $1.2k in 1 day doesnt mean 437k/year. - turned me off...
I'd refrain from using quotations for example, "Then it all changed." - to me it's like... ok so who's saying that...? Quotations to me are supposed to be what someone else said about your product/service.

Also all your headers should flow, as in a reader should be able to just read the headers and get an idea of what the essence of your sales pitch is.

Well these are just my suggestions. Please don't take offense at all. I'm sure you're working hard. I think if you make some of these changes, you'll be on the right track.

Also, personally... Although you might be a 19 year old college drop out, I personally am turned off by that... as in... I rather be 'mentored' by a seasoned professional... not someone that found a 'glitch' in the system and made a lot of $ quickly... I want sustainability and a proven track record.

I hope I helped, and once again, please don't take my suggestions to be harsh at all. Keep up the good work and continue to tweak, you'll make it eventually.

Stay in touch, in about 1 month I'll be launching my site as well. I'd also really appreciate some feedback.

I'm with the other guys. I didn't like the pop up. I stuck through it, but found the headline and pitch to be less than credible.

Not sure why you've put all your headlines in quotes ...

I think the site looks OK
The pop up was up before the page which was not very good.
Maybe set the timing to come in after say 15 seconds.
I liked the graphics thou wher did you get the site made?

Also I found that the affiliate page could of been a little bit easier to use.
maybe a couple of text boxes where I can just grab the code would of been nice.
Also the as soon as you said 438,??? I lost intrest TBH.

Getting there though, is it a member ship site as there are repeat subscription payments for affiliates?

James,

The site loads fine for me. Actually it loaded very quickly. Just a few quick things:

The header doesn't line up correctly (Firefox 3, tested on Mac and PC with different screen sizes). I attached a photo. I am not sure if this was intentional or not. Besides that I do like the design, it looks good.

The pop-up is going to go over your headline and may turn people off or not give them enough time to read it. I would only make that pop-up if they go to leave the page.

With your earnings screenshots you may want to crop the second one to just show the 20th. The reason is you are showing one sale on the 18th and 6 on the 19th. This doesn't fit in with your math for the full year like previously mentioned.

Like others have said I am confused about exactly what the product is. Is it a membership site or a one-off payment. I know you list the products towards the end, but it says get access now. I am also not a fan of pages that don't show a price. I know people think it is tricky because you get the customer to click through and closer to buying, but I don't like it. I did see the price but really had to look for it. I am one who generally scrolls through these sales pages really fast. Once again though, is it monthly for $47?

This is a small one, but I think it is really tacky when internet marketers call themselves CEO's of (insert product name here). Sure, you could be a CEO of your main company technically, but it just sounds bad to me.

I thought the page was very well designed. I never got a pop-up, so maybe you took it out??? I'm on a Mac with Firefox. The only criticism I had was the fact that it was being sold as an Internet marketing program, but that's such a huge and wide open category. I watched one video and kind of got a glimpse of some of what it contained, but I still think it's kind of a broad population to target.

But hey, overall I thought it looked quite nice.

Is this your little trick to funnel all the warriors to your sales page ?

Way too slow to load, over 30 seconds.

Headline isn't powerful enough, so what you banked that in one day, what about it recurring, would be the thought of many people.

I only ask you to read this page if you're truly serious
about making an immense amount of money online.
The last line is outside the book on Firefox you might want to give yourself an extra space there.

The screen shot isn't clear enough, or certainly not for me.

Earnt should be earned

Your testimonials go outside the boxes

Get Instant Access To The Secret Members Area
For The One Time Low Fee Of Just $47!

Is sitting on top of your name and SEO details

Get Instant Access Now


Now is sitting on top of the line above it

Change the colour of the links at the bottom, I really hate the light colour which makes it difficult to read, it is like you have something to hide.

Not a Mac user, some of it seems to be corrected now. FF version 3.0.5

James, my immediate first impression of the banner image is "We burn up your cash!" Do I really want my cash set on fire?

"taking dog biscuits off my manager" - I don't understand this line.

"and then it all changed" headline isn't follow up by how it changed, but more about how the problem sucked. The headline here should be "It really sucked."

Too sudden a jump from "my job sucked" to "you're being conned." You need a transition from: fed up with the grocery job, wanted a way to find money, thought it might be online, bought promising stuff and got scammed. Also it's a sudden switch from "my story" to "what YOU experience" before evidence that the reader is going through the same problem. If I wasn't doing this review, you'd have lost me at that point.

"Imagine a fully-featured private membership website...."
If I knew how to imagine that, I'd have already gone and bought one, wouldn't I? The command to the reader to imagine something they don't know about creates confusion, and another reason to give up reading the letter.

You don't explain what you offer and how much money it's worth before throwing out the price.

I was trying to imagine a fully-featured website, but then I see a pile of disks. Huh?

This feels to me like you're halfway to a great letter.

Regards,
Allen

Love it! You say who it's for, what you offer, give away free content to prove the value, then make the pitch with a concise letter depending which feature the visitor is most interested in. I think this is a killer example of Michel Fortin's "Death of the Salesletter" approach (http://www.michelfortin.com/the-deat...e-salesletter/) in which he says, rather than throw everything including the kitchen sink into an overstuffed long letter, give people links to choose what appeals to them. Had you read his article or did you come up with the approach yourself? Either way I think it's really inviting now.

It's also really impressive how you took the feedback from all the reviewers and used it to improve your pitch.

Regards,
Allen

First impression - tight and to the point.

The flow of the site is easy and not many choices to do ... look at video, register or leave.

what copy there is on the site is well written.

Product upsell is great with the OTO page.

Overall the site is well put together. I would change on thing though .. the product graphic, something about does not fit the page.

Just my thoughts
Fran

I didn't see any real problems with the load, and my real objection is rather philosophical, but I would give anything to see a truly unique sells page. I suppose people tend to think "If it ain't broke..." but truly they are all starting to look alike.

Im going to innovate something in that area if it is the last thing I do!

Interesting Read, I do useualy close down webpages that look like a useual sales page (which yours does).

When I click Demo, it seems to go to a different template. This is very bad for putting off visitors. When I go to demo and templates their are 6 templates listed this put me off, as my own website offers 100's of quality free templates for free.