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Quick critique on my squeez page. Too little content?

by markspark
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Please give a quick critique on my squeez page. I havent used to much time on it, but would like to know if it should have more content, og just if it is badly written agent-affiliate.com is the website.
#content #critique #page #quick #squeez
  • Profile picture of the author markspark
    And: Any tips one how I should drive traffic? I'd like to buy it.
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  • Profile picture of the author Bluestarace
    Can't access your site either.
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  • Profile picture of the author markspark
    Whoops! I did'n even get the url right :/ Sorry, its affiliate-agent.com
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  • Profile picture of the author twinkenterprises
    Hi,
    I took a look at your page. You might want to add a little of how you'd be making this money. Maybe a bullet point or two about the program. If I came across that page, unless it was from a friend I knew very well. I wouldn't have given my email to it.

    Could you take a look at my squeeze page and let me know what you think. It also kind of shows what I mean about telling a little about what a person is getting when they sign up. I'm also probably going to add a line or two on the email form, this was the only way it would fit in with the submit button showing.

    http://vur.me/twinkenterprises/email2
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  • Profile picture of the author markspark
    Sorry again I wrote it "backwards"
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  • Profile picture of the author AndrewStark
    Terrible, who ever taught you this is taking you for a ride.

    Generic headline, no branding, and I bet you didn't make $2k in the last year never mind a week.
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  • Profile picture of the author AndrewStark
    Also I signed up, and becoming a webcam model is a bit of a bizarre niche and has absolutely nothing to do with the squeezepage.

    Note you will get about a 10% confirm rate at best with the current set-up.
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    • Profile picture of the author markspark
      Originally Posted by AndrewStark View Post

      Also I signed up, and becoming a webcam model is a bit of a bizarre niche and has absolutely nothing to do with the squeezepage.

      Note you will get about a 10% confirm rate at best with the current set-up.
      Becoming a webcam model has nothing to with my squeez page, thats for sure

      Appreciate the critique on the page, thank you
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  • Profile picture of the author markspark
    Thank you for your insight
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  • Profile picture of the author AndrewStark
    So do you not think that the conversions and number of people joining your webcam affiliate business may work a little bit better if you told people what the "opportunity" was?

    Blind advertising copy on the squeeze tends to lead to a real low quality list as you've already left them disappointed straight away.
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  • Profile picture of the author Bluestarace
    Typo- "witch" should be "which".

    Other than that, your squeeze page is too short. There is no background, or any form of detail.

    The headline is not compelling at all.

    But the important part is that right now, all your page does is ask people to give you their email id to learn how to make $2300. It's not convincing at all.

    Give them some reason to trust you, show them some proof. Tell them in detail about what they can expect if they choose to opt in, and what they will be missing out on if they choose not to.
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  • Profile picture of the author markspark
    Thank you for your feedback I guess I pulled the trigger to fast on this one The "sales pitch" stuff is not for me I think Can I hire anyone to do this better? And how much should i pay for this kind of service?
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  • Profile picture of the author twinkenterprises
    There's a warriors for hire forum on here. or you could try fiverr for a squeeze page design.
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    • Profile picture of the author Michael Harris
      Too little content is not your concern..

      As mentioned before, you need to make your
      content more compelling, (it needs to catch their attention
      and cause to them to feel that they have got to take you up on your offer..)

      At the moment your page is basically telling me to "sign up for work"
      Not really some thing that gets me thinking "I got to grab that NOW!"

      The links down the bottom of the page don't go anywhere, so if
      someone clicks on them this will damage any trust they may have..

      On the positive side of things, your opt-in box is above the fold,
      overall your page is "clean" as in it's is easy on the eyes and
      there are no distractions..

      I think you have put together a good foundation, and you should
      build on it..

      Fivver is an option, but you will become a better marketer if you
      do the tweaks yourself..

      No one gets it right first time..

      But over time you will get it right..

      All the best..
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  • Profile picture of the author nwalker2
    yeah sorry mate it it aint great. Just an honest opinion. You need branding. and more colour. It just is boring to look at. There is a lack of detail as to what the programme is. Also, you need to give the person an incentive to fill in their email... like a free video of report or something. Also a little video on the squeeze page would work best. Take a look online at squeeze pages that the big IM'ers use. I think you will see what your squeeze page needs to be like in order to convert. Hope this helps my friend :-)
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