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My first squeeze page.....critique it!

by Arran82
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First of all thanks fot any replies, be as brutal as you like, I dont mind.

easyvideoplayersoftware.net
#pagecritique #squeeze
  • Profile picture of the author wlasikiewicz
    Its nice, small and to the point, just split test it and see how it goes.
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    • Profile picture of the author Arran82
      Originally Posted by wlasikiewicz View Post

      Its nice, small and to the point, just split test it and see how it goes.
      total noob...how do i go about split testing?
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      • Profile picture of the author RogueOne
        Originally Posted by Arran82 View Post

        total noob...how do i go about split testing?
        You test a different page against your original.

        For example you might send 1000 people to the page, then change the headline or some other component and run another 1000 to the new version. You then analyze the results to see which converts more visitors to subscribers.

        That's the fast answer. You should do some studying up on split testing.
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  • Profile picture of the author TheSalesBooster
    Is "Easy Video Software" an actual name of a program? If it is... Does anyone coming to this page know what it is? If not I think you might have a problem with people wondering what the heck easy video software is. You might benefit from actually putting a real video on your site of what your software is capable of.
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  • Profile picture of the author Jacob Pionke
    Yeah i agree with @TheSalesBooster, you want to create a video showing them what the software is capable of and you want to make them want to get it. Thats when you will get the emails and finally sales.
    However the page you have just now is fine but thats the page you want to use once the customers know what the software actually is.
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  • Profile picture of the author 300SMG
    It's a quick hitter for sure..I have to say, it makes me want to see the video. I think if you can get enough visitors to it, you'll generate a pretty sizable list.

    Maybe try another longer page with a bit more meat of what easy vdeo software is and another sign up form at the bottom and see which works better.
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  • Profile picture of the author Arran82
    ive updated it.....any better?
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  • Profile picture of the author keyon
    This is kind of a small point about the copy, but I noticed you're putting the main benefit toward the end of the paragraphs (instead of the start). For example, I have to read "Discover how everyone else is using..." before I get to the more important "increase traffic, leads, sales." Hope that makes sense.
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  • Profile picture of the author gcbmark20
    Hi Arran 82,

    The best way to test it is to produce traffic!

    This can take time or you can use paid advertising to speed things up so you get a clear picture of your results faster.

    Don't worry too much about getting it right the first time.

    Mistakes are what gets you closer to your goals anyway.

    You've taken action my friend that is massively important!!!

    Now test, test & test again to find that WINNER!

    Good luck my friend and keep up that momentum!!!
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  • Profile picture of the author Joseph Robinson
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    Your best bet would be to ask people that might actually be qualified to give an opinion in this section:

    The Copywriting Forum
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    • Profile picture of the author Build Discipline
      The copy looks solid to me.
      Imho, I would add two more paragraphs explaining what the program is about.
      Also, one more graphic would hurt the look of the page.

      Cheers
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  • Profile picture of the author IMWarrior0
    Looks Pretty Good, how are you driving traffic to it ppc, social media ??
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  • Profile picture of the author E. Brian Rose
    Do as the other say: create different layouts and split test. That is the only way you will know how it compares to other designs. My one suggestion is if you are going to have a video, make the video your centerpiece. Decide whether you want to showcase the text or the video. By splitting, they both lose impact.
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  • Profile picture of the author emsgroup
    You need to say the same thing in less words. The benefits are pretty vague...be more specific...give me a real world example.
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  • Profile picture of the author Des Lau
    ..no offense, the video to me seems boring >.< I don't know if that's what you are selling or promoting later down the funnel but it held my attention for only about 10 secs and I wanted to exit without even reading the rest of the page.
    What about some dialogue or speech in it?
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    • Profile picture of the author MariusPrice
      Originally Posted by Des Lau View Post

      ..no offense, the video to me seems boring >.< I don't know if that's what you are selling or promoting later down the funnel but it held my attention for only about 10 secs and I wanted to exit without even reading the rest of the page.
      What about some dialogue or speech in it?
      Good point Des and by the way great WSO
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  • Profile picture of the author Vadimarket
    The page itself looks pretty good. However, there isn't enough info about what I'm gonna get. Need more details.

    Oh, and about that video at the top. If you're offering a system that will teach how to do video marketing, why not use your own system, and make a better one on your squeeze page? Think about, how are you gonna teach people how to do video marketing if you're using a 45 second video with nothing but text on the background?
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  • Profile picture of the author Griffin Smith
    Originally Posted by Arran82 View Post

    First of all thanks fot any replies, be as brutal as you like, I dont mind.

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    The video didn't seem to load for me..

    I would add some testimonials and maybe some more copy.

    Besides that it was right to the point and a good beginning.
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  • Profile picture of the author annie800
    I think the squeeze page is very professional. I see a lot of squeeze pages when I surf my websites and yours looks every bit as good as the ones I see in my surfing.
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  • Profile picture of the author finalbusiness5000machine
    I think the page is pretty strightforward and attracts the attention. the video never load up and i tried it a couple of times.
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  • Profile picture of the author MarketFriendly
    It looks good, but make sure you put in some arrows showing where you want them to submit their info. Arrows and action images always help out!
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  • Profile picture of the author MarketingMonk
    Simple and minimalist. It looks quite good to me as I always advocate minimalist look. What are your traffic sources ?
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  • Profile picture of the author Time to get up and move
    Your getting close the Vid still loads slow ,also dont forget what joseph said about the The Copywriting Forum they are the ones who will give you great input
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  • Profile picture of the author Brains Gone Wild
    Not bad - short & sweet. I would add a bit more copy, though. Good luck!!
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  • Profile picture of the author TMercT
    looks pretty good, optimized press =D
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  • Profile picture of the author zahedi117
    looks pretty good! however I would add 1 or 2 bullets more, fix the copyright at the bottom and add something below the optin form like available even at 2am or no credit card required. Also try to "speak" more friendly to the customers, like if you know them. Overall a great squeeze page for your first time Wish you success!
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  • Profile picture of the author matchoo77
    Originally Posted by Arran82 View Post

    First of all thanks fot any replies, be as brutal as you like, I dont mind.

    easyvideoplayersoftware.net
    I like how basic the page is...a quick rendition of my headline would be:

    "In The Next 3 Minutes...See 5 Easily Duplicated Tactics Internet Marketers Are Using to Crank Out Tons of Traffic, Leads and Sales With Easy Video Player"

    Then use your bullet points to close the deal.
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  • Profile picture of the author AndrewStark
    Video didn't load, and I don't actually know what I would get if I opted in?

    Headline is pretty weak, if you've been online for more than a month you will have seen it many times of cookie cutter sites. Tell me exactly what I will get in the first 5 seconds or I've lost interest.

    Keep on testing things out, and you will soon get better conversions.
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  • Profile picture of the author Super Money Maker
    It is Semple nice and good very converting but the video is little bet slow to load
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