What about this CB product design?

This.

Please excuse our being outspoken, but I'm afraid it really is terrible, honestly.

You'll (possibly) attract some of the 95% of affiliates who between them bring in only 5% of the sales, but almost none of the 5% of affiliates who produce 95% of the sales will consider it at all. (And those are just about the only ones you need.)

Will and Luke have covered the problems and left me with almost nothing more to say, except to follow all their advice, and/or that a professional copywriter is urgently needed here (not someone pretending to be a copywriter). Sorry!

"Fixed that for you"!

If you're brave enough to post it in the Copywriting Forum here, requesting professional opinions about the sales page from the professional copywriters here, you'll get some valuable, expert opinions (but they're going to match Luke's, above. I'm sorry but "that's the way it is".)

Whoa there! I just said I liked the illustration

I'll take a wild stab in the dark and say he probably imputed them after the approval. He needs to completely scrap this site and start over and be thinking "Less is more" the entire time.

Those aren't nice at all in my opinion but each to their own..

Exactly so. I was astonished. The reason I decided to reply, myself, after your original reply and Luke's was to try to balance out the numbers and not leave the impression that "experienced Warrior opinion" might possibly be in favor of using this page.

It's just breathtaking to me that people can really think this.

I make my living doing this and I know I wouldn't be able to make one single sale by sending targeted traffic to this page.

This is really important. It can only damage your reputation as a vendor to use these, and may also cause legal/regulatory problems jeopardising the security of your domain-registration/hosting, and worse. The FTC has effective jurisdiction over any ".com" domain-registration wherever its owner lives, and wherever it's registered/hosted, and has demonstrated it regularly!

And good luck with it!

Hey, it's all a learning game and I know that's why you came here asking for opinions. What's good is you are taking those opinions on board and you will definitely end up with a sales page much better than it is right now.

We all have to start somewhere -- it's where we end up that counts so please do not be disheartened by any of the comments given above, we are only telling you these things because we know what will work better for you. Be sure to keep us updated on the progress of the page.

I know what you are saying -- you have no money for those things.

The problem is, without those things, you will likely earn very little or nothing from that sales letter. So you are in a bit of a catch 22. Spend no money and make no money or spend money and make money.

I don't think you will find any of the good copywriters are willing to be paid later. Most of the good copywriters are not struggling for work and will want to be paid when the job is complete. You might be able to find someone who is willing to do a rev share but even then, most of them will still want some sort of flat payment upfront.

My advice is to find some way to earn the money needed for those services. It might delay your project a little but they really are necessary. You could end up wasting a lot of your time playing around with that page in it's current state and it won't make a whole lot of difference.

Designers: I don't know.

Copywriters: it's sometimes possible, but not easy. Copywriters will sometimes do this for returning clients they already know well and trust, though even then most will want a deposit. The difficulty is that successful, established, "ClickBank-proven" copywriters don't need to do this but can pick and choose their work, creating the reality that a copywriter who jumps at the chance may be a struggling one, and there may be "reasons for that".

There's a lot of discussion in the Copywriting Forum here about this issue. My own entirely subjective impression of this situation, unfortunately, is that using the services of a copywriter willing to work in this way significantly reduces your chances of achieving successful copy.

However you look at it, the market realities predicate that "getting the sales page written" is likely to be the major financial outlay of such a project.

Successful copywriters need a lot of skill, experience and time, to work on a project. Some of the best ones are taking on no more than 2 or 3 jobs per month, because their work demands such a high degree of research, care and effort. There are people charging many thousands for sales pages for products of this type, and they do tend to be the ones that become very successful on ClickBank (otherwise they wouldn't get the returning customers and recommendations enabling them to charge those amounts). It's not nearly as overpriced as it seems, when you look at the income potential arising from their work. Think about how much your dentist charges: an experienced, professional writer probably isn't going to work for much less than half that hourly rate? (Some command the same sort of hourly rate.) And no professional copywriter is going to produce what you want/need in much less than about 20 hours' work (and maybe more)?

That said, it's possible sometimes, with a great deal of care and research, to find highly skilled, aspiring copywriters "on their way up" who will do "a $3,000 job" for $500 (perhaps partly because they want the experience and the testimonial?), but that's like outsourcing anything: you need to select the person very carefully indeed, there's always going to be some luck in it as well, and there are more unsuccessful outcomes than successful ones, that way. Just the market realities, I'm afraid.

It's obviously a viable niche, though - and I wish you good luck with it.