I desperately need advice about my web page

[richard515680]

Hello Warriors. I have produced a web page for selling 'How to beat the Credit Crunch' ebook.

Could you please advice me how I can make it more 'sellable'?

Also (please excuse my cheek for asking this) how soon should I see some more traffic to this web page from the 10 blog accounts I set up yesterday? The content was slightly different in each submission (using the Senuke article spinner). I plan to revise the blog content every couple of days to keep it fresh. Should I also routinely change the tags?

Here's the web page link: How to beat the credit crunch

An example of a blog I made: How to beat the credit crunch

I really am desperate to get this up and running as quickly as possible.

If anyone can please take the time and trouble to help me I will be eternally grateful

Thanks in advance for your help and advice.

Kind regards,

Richard
PS I am away most of this weekend but will be 'on the ball' first thing Monday

[Fernando Veloso]

Hi Richard,

That is a huge competition niche! Ok, your site, maybe i am missing something but the design could be improved a lot. It does not ring any bell about money, credit, fear of losing my house... nothing.

Hope you can fix that asap.

Best,
Fernando

[David Raybould]

Hey Richard.

Sorry to be blunt, but that page just
wont sell anything. Sorry.

It's missing the most important,
fundamental aspects of any sales
page.

Also, the design is pretty hard on
the eye.

To get results you'll need to tear
it down and start over.

Sorry.

I can give you some pointers
on this, drop me a PM if you
need help.

Good luck

-David Raybould

[waken]

1. I think that a white background would be better..
2. Getting an independent top level domain for this is better still..
3. Get rid of the "buy now" box at the top. It's too early that people will buy without reading through...
4. I feel uneasy when you say this "The info is not confidential" ..
5. Your sales copy lack of testimonials...
6. And I cannot grab the main points.. What this ebook is about?

Why don't you put it in a more compelling Title ie "Discover Secrets In My Grandmother's Diary That Saved Me From Credit Crunch and How You Can Avoid The Same Disaster" ...

So, you're a seller. Set up an affiliate page with tools to get affiliates.

Cheers!

[richard515680]

Originally Posted by Fernando Veloso

Hi Richard,

That is a huge competition niche! Ok, your site, maybe i am missing something but the design could be improved a lot. It does not ring any bell about money, credit, fear of losing my house... nothing.

Hope you can fix that asap.

Best,
Fernando

Thank you for your help. I will get back to the drawing board

Regards,

Richard

[richard515680]

Originally Posted by waken

1. I think that a white background would be better..
2. Getting an independent top level domain for this is better still..
3. Get rid of the "buy now" box at the top. It's too early that people will buy without reading through...
4. I feel uneasy when you say this "The info is not confidential" ..
5. Your sales copy lack of testimonials...
6. And I cannot grab the main points.. What this ebook is about?

Why don't you put it in a more compelling Title ie "Discover Secrets In My Grandmother's Diary That Saved Me From Credit Crunch and How You Can Avoid The Same Disaster" ...

So, you're a seller. Set up an affiliate page with tools to get affiliates.

Cheers!

Thanks - you have given me some great ideas

Regards

Richard

[richard515680]

Originally Posted by David Raybould

Hey Richard.

Sorry to be blunt, but that page just
wont sell anything. Sorry.

It's missing the most important,
fundamental aspects of any sales
page.

Also, the design is pretty hard on
the eye.

To get results you'll need to tear
it down and start over.

Sorry.

I can give you some pointers
on this, drop me a PM if you
need help.

Good luck

-David Raybould

Thanks David

I may very well take you up on your offer and PM you.

Regards

Richard

[PLRwithAlex]

I like the graphic of the guy, but in FireFox the text flows over it.

No background color, no different size fonts like H1, bold.

Personally, I didn't feel motivated to read the message based on the boring design. Sorry to be so blunt.

Good Luck,

Alex