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Need Advice

by stephtwy
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Hi Warriors!

I am a newbie, I posted a thread in Warriors for Hire, however I don't get people to reply my post. I am wondering is there anything that I miss out in my post?

Please give me advice, how do I actually make the post better so that people will reply me.

Thanks!

My thread is here: http://www.warriorforum.com/warriors...r-website.html
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  • Profile picture of the author Jill Carpenter
    1. creativty - misspelled

    2. Too much red going on for my personal taste - but could just be me

    3. missing information - are you doing wordpress templates or just html on the sites?

    4. - and this is my personal big pet peeve.
    When you do ALL graphics on a sales page, you miss out on keywords and seo for someone to find your offer.

    5. You're not selling me enough on why I need your great graphics on my website. The importance.

    6. Not enough samples there.

    7. - would be helpful - some reviews.

    I'm confident others may have some suggestions.
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    • Profile picture of the author jeff09
      Originally Posted by Jill Carpenter View Post

      1. creativty - misspelled

      2. Too much red going on for my personal taste - but could just be me

      3. missing information - are you doing wordpress templates or just html on the sites?

      4. - and this is my personal big pet peeve.
      When you do ALL graphics on a sales page, you miss out on keywords and seo for someone to find your offer.

      5. You're not selling me enough on why I need your great graphics on my website. The importance.

      6. Not enough samples there.

      7. - would be helpful - some reviews.

      I'm confident others may have some suggestions.
      Yes. I agree with Jill
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    • Profile picture of the author stephtwy
      Originally Posted by Jill Carpenter View Post

      1. creativty - misspelled

      2. Too much red going on for my personal taste - but could just be me

      3. missing information - are you doing wordpress templates or just html on the sites?

      4. - and this is my personal big pet peeve.
      When you do ALL graphics on a sales page, you miss out on keywords and seo for someone to find your offer.

      5. You're not selling me enough on why I need your great graphics on my website. The importance.

      6. Not enough samples there.

      7. - would be helpful - some reviews.

      I'm confident others may have some suggestions.
      Thanks Jill! Can you elaborate a bit on the creativity misspell advice? I don't quite understand how to improve from now. Million thanks!
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      • Profile picture of the author rleejr
        Originally Posted by stephtwy View Post

        Thanks Jill! Can you elaborate a bit on the creativity misspell advice? I don't quite understand how to improve from now. Million thanks!
        I think he meant you mispelled creativity. "I am well-EQUIPPED with the skills, CREATIVITY, and passion in design."

        I agree with the comments above though. It's a bit overdone. It would be better if you just typed in your services and included a link of your site in your signature. Your site should then include your portfolio and offers.


        Hope this helps!
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        • Profile picture of the author stephtwy
          Originally Posted by rleejr View Post

          I think he meant you mispelled creativity. "I am well-EQUIPPED with the skills, CREATIVITY, and passion in design."

          I agree with the comments above though. It's a bit overdone. It would be better if you just typed in your services and included a link of your site in your signature. Your site should then include your portfolio and offers.


          Hope this helps!
          Thank you very much rleejr!! I will look into the post again and make it better before I bump it again.
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          • Profile picture of the author Dburn
            The one thing that immediately turned me around was all the red at first. I didn't even bother to read the rest. That's what I would change first.

            Hope this helps,

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          • Profile picture of the author stephtwy
            Originally Posted by Portlandrocks View Post

            Here are my two cents (they are brash because I want you to succeed):

            First, it has only been a week - Rome wasn't built in a day and there is way more to making money than simply hanging your sign post up and waiting for the hordes to come flocking to your offer.

            Second, you are offering a service in a highly competitive field in a highly competitive market. That doesn't mean you won't succeed - it just means that nobody ever won a competition by waiting for the other players to stop playing. You need to get out there and hustle. Do you have a referral program to reward people for recommending your service? Are you networking? etc.

            Third, within the first 3 or 4 sentences of your copy you say that you are a newbie to the forum. It is ok to point that out - IF and ONLY IF you share why that is a good thing for the prospect. For example, you can say "I am new to the forum, and because of that I will be offering my services for really cheap etc." but pointing that out without providing any benefit to the prospect only works against you.

            Fourth, there aren't any reviews on your thread. People buy from people that they know, like and trust - without reviews you don't get any of that. Slap up a "reviews wanted" thread and get some reviews. Watch your conversions jump through the roof.

            There is a bunch more you could do - but that is enough to get you started I think.
            Thank you Portlandrocks! I really think review is very important, have to work on getting review from now on.
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  • Profile picture of the author Clyde Dennis
    Just seems a bit too 'over done'.
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  • Profile picture of the author rodsav
    I agree with all the above, and one of the most important pieces of missing information - REVIEWS.
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  • Profile picture of the author Paul Clark
    What, no graphics in your post??? Maybe a little video presentation embedded in your post would help sell your services. If you are not sure how to embed a video in your post, here's how...

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  • Profile picture of the author tamalanwar
    Stephanie, I have an ad there too in the same field. That makes us competitors LOL.

    Okay you have your ad up. Interested people will contact you. Maybe people don't like you because you have less post count and think you are a newbie.

    So go ahead and participate in this forum. Get thanks and build a reputation.

    You can also check out my own ad I did (I posted reviews and videos) and I got inquiries right after that. I didn't got any replies to the post (yet) maybe there was nothing more to add or ask: http://www.warriorforum.com/warriors...-warriors.html

    Have a great day (And have patience!)
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